darkSpyro

Hi! i just thought of chapter 1 the other day and decided to post it! i will get post chapters as i think of them. without further ado...
CHAPTER 1 GREMLIN TOWN
You know of the many sections of skylands. Such as the quicksilver vault and perilous pastures. But there is one that is extremely unknown. only the citicins know of: gremlin town. A town where all the gremlins live in harmony. This is the story of a citicin who became a skylander. that's right, trigger happy. first, let me tell you about the town. the gremlins have may buisnesses. there's the black smith (where our story begins), the bank, the farms, and more. the blacksmith is a very well respected man(erm... gremlin.) however, it was his APPRENTICE who became the most famous gremlin. a cretain .

well thats all 4 now! see ya on the skylanders fourm, or come back later for chapter 2!
p.s. this is my first post.

CORRECTING WORD- CITICEN
Citizen, cit·i·zen.
An inhabitant of a city or town, especially one entitled to its privileges or franchises
CORRECTING WORD- BUISNESS
Businesses, busi·ness
A person, partnership, or corporation engaged in commerce, manufacturing, or a service; profit-seeking enterprise or concern.
CORRECTING WORD- BLACK SMITH
Blacksmith, one word
CORRECTING WORD- YA
You
Variations of you
You're (you are)
CORRECTING WORD- WWHO
Who, it's who not wwho
CORRECTING SENTENCES
Capitilization needed, commas in the wrong place.

Skylander is CAPITALIZED

Sorry, I wasn't trying to act mean though. I really liked his story, I just wanted others to like it.

wow bh, harsh, very harsh.
Potential for a good story. I say this as it looks like you aren't doing it any more?