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the summer breeze lifted my wings, it felt good. the sun made golden rays as i soared through the now pink-ish/yellow late afternooon sky.
down below was the great valey of avalar. it was a glorious flight. i spread my wings as far as they would go. sadly, this was to be my last flight, but i didn't know it...

the story of rose bud
the flightless dragon's first chapter will be coming soon.

hello? any one here? o for the love of GOD!

awesome!
Don't worry, i know how it feels
I'm reading! 8-)

yay! diamond, your like my only supporter and really good friend here. :-)

aww, thats all good
just give your stories time

That's a great start wings
o(^▽^)o
BTW I know how it feels to have almost no one reading

HAY! What about me!!!

O.K Fury. ur my BEST-EST friend.

(why? because we actually know each other and live near each other.)

^
Lol, see, you just have to be paitent, think I spelt that wrong

okay, here it comes!

chapter one: the attack
I landed with a soft thump. the grass of the plains were waving softly in the late after-noon light.
some cheetah cubs were playing hunter and prey in the grass, it was adoreable to watch.
I was walking to my little burrow in the woods,(it wasn't a diry fox-like burrow, it was a large hobbit-like tunnel) when I heard a cry in the woods.
"HELP!"
I thought it was a cheetah cub or something because I soon found myself racing twoard it.
I scraped myself on a few branches to get to it, but when I got there...
tons of grublins poured onto me! I felt their claws scraping into my sides and face, scars I would bare forever. and then, RIP! they pulled my little wings off in the most gruesome way, blood was everywhere, on my face, on the ground! and then a voice, or a horn belowed and they all flew away.
I was in to much pain to scream, or cry, but i knew i would never, ever fly... again.

okay. soooorry! i wrote this in a hurry. i will do that again... when i have time to.

nice chapter

Interesting ∞
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I know too how it feels. The story is good. Hope next part come out soon.

kay, sorry the first chapter was scetchy.
@ dragonlover00 you are not garbage and you are a awsome person. do not say bad things about yourself! :-)

chapter two: the dragon that saved my life
I layed there... in my own blood... it... it was all hazy.
my heart had short beats but they took long pauses in between like : .......boom................boom................boom.
and then, I pased out. It went dark, for all I knew I was dead. it was dark....forever....then.....
I woke up. It was long after dusk and the moon sent tender beams across the ground and the tree's made sweet little shadows. I realized I wasn't where I was before. I was in a hut, and open hut made of bamboo.
"why were you laying there? were you attacked? why were you attacked?" said a voice from the shadows.
I gasped when I realized that I wasn't alone.
"am I dead? are you God?" I said, my head was spinnig.
"Well if I hadn't found you, you would be dead. And no I am not God. I am A very far cry from him." the voice said.
"then," I said whith the rest of my breath, "who are you?"
I could see the outline of his face now. he, he was an odd color for a dragon, he was purple!
"my name," he said with his head down, "is malefor."
"my name is rose bud." I replied.
"that's a weird name." he giggled.
"well, not as weird as malefor." I said trying to get up.
he was a young, handsome dragon and he had kind eyes with yellow eye color.
"I like you. stay with me, will you?"


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ooo! young malefore! and he likes rose! this should be soon interesting....

At first I was like:
Interesting someone saved her.

Then I was like:
OMFG it's Malefor.

This is so cool. Can't wait until next one.

@ cynder 123
LOL!

chapter three: like and love
a few days passed, long fun days. malefor was a nice dragon. but sometimes he went away for a little while to be trained by the
gaurdians. when he was gone it was lonely, but I managed to entertain my self by shooting fire balls into the sky.
today was one of those days... lonely. the high grass waved hello, and birds tweeted in the sky. a small stream trickled down the slope and sometimes there was little minnows swimming in it. I shot one more fire ball into the sky and it dissapeared. it was still. very still. too still. but the peace was broken by the sound of flapping wings. I turned around and saw malefor with another dragon!
they landed in front if me and I smiled friendly.
"Rose, this is my brother, Igniutus." said malefor.
I looked at the dragon by his side and thensomething happened as soon as our eyes met. he was the sweetest, kindest, most loving dragon I had ever seen. he had strong looking legs and soft sweet eyes and I think... at that moment... I fell in love.
I liked malefor, but only as a friend.
"h-hello ignitus." I said bashfully.
"greetings, rose." he smiled.
we talked for a bit, the tree of us and then ignitus said, "whats the story with the wings?"
my head dropped. he realized that he had offended me and he rushed to me and tried to make eye contact with me.
"jeez, rose! Ididn't mean to offend you. thats the last thing I would ever want to do."
a small tear rolled down my cheek and he wiped it away with his claw.
then, something magical happened, his paw rested on mine. and I knew that he felt the same way about me as I felt about him.
I had almost forrgot about malefor until, "DON'T TOUCH HER!" yelled malefor and he smacked ignitus's paw.
there was something different about his eyes now, they were completly yellow and his pupils were slits.
"DON'T YOU DARE TRY TO TAKE HER FROM ME!" roared malefor.
I put my paw on his arm and said, "don't malefor."
his eyes went back to normal and he sighed. "I am so s-sorry."

dark was falling and ignuitus flew home. but as he was about to dissapear into the sky, he turned and looked at me one last time. then he flew away.
I turned to malefor.
"I know how you both feel about me... don't get into a fight about it. we will work it out."
he turned his head and tried to appologise more, but I started to walk to the hut.
before I knew what happend he was in front of me and we were kissing!
it was a wounderfull feeling, to be kissed. but then I pulled away.
"No." I almost whispered
I jumped up into the hut.
I fell asleep after a few minuets... and that night I had a very, very strange dream.....
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oh I was right. this is getting VERY interesting indeed!

no one? really? crud.

I think you ment chapter three

any one? haloooooooooo? :-(

I reading. It's great this far.

sorry I haven't been reading
Nice!!!!

Sorry I haven't been wrighting! I will keep it up as soon as I have time.

Interesting story so far.

However I sugjest you type out your chapters in a program like MS word to check your spelling as some words are spelt wrong and to your grammar as well. I also noticed you don't capitalize names like you should.

You could add a bit more detail into your chapters maybe make them a bit longer as well. You should also try and write chapters in paragraphs instead of just a wall of text, it makes it easier to read and isn't as clustered.

Also, it's ok if no one posts after you post, sometimes readers don't have the chance to get on all the time.

I'm not trying to be mean or anything, I just am trying to give you constructive criticism and advice.