darkSpyro

100 years before spyro was born at the temple the old fire guardian was watching the eggs suddenly one of the black eggs had a crack in it and it soon hatched and out came a black baby male dragon that elder decided to name him fang. fang was diffrent then all the other dragons he had well the elemnt called chaos it was like shadow and fear mixed together. one day fang was training with his other element fire when suddenly black shadow came out of his mouth. the elders stood their in shock. then one walked up to him it was the ice guardian he said "you you beast get out of here you monster!" fang quietly cried to himself and then flew away hating himself 7 years later fang returned to the temple..


this is what fang looks like

O.O

Looks interesting. =D

10 minutes late their was blood all of the floor of the temple 3 elders lay dead on the ground fang had killed them and was closing in on the fire guardian then a dragon the same age as fang tackled him he was a red dragon "leave him alone" fang didn't respond but just left the temple here's what fang looks like http://dun198.deviantart.com/#/d3aoffi

i'm liking the idea here, but the story could use quite a bit of work.

carry on

Chapter 1 part 2

Blaze looked at the guardian in the corner, "dad are you ok" blaze asked the guardian, the
guardian stood up and then said "yes blaze I’m alright." "Who was that" blaze asked fire,.
"That was one of the eggs I watched I named him fang his parents had died just before he was born though" fire said. "Sad but why did he attack us we didn't do any" blaze tried to finish but was cut off by fire. "Actually one day we saw him use the element of darkness we overreacted and sent him off" fire said. Blaze and fire walked out of the temple then they returned home and they both fell asleep

pretty good, keep it up.

Not bad at all. Just a bit more grammer and your fanfic is A.O.K.

Now please, continue.