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Roka the dragon
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#1 Posted: 00:27:57 20/03/2010 | Topic Creator
It had bein a year after Cynder passing away. but Spyro remembered it like it was yesterday he let out a sigh as he looked down at Cynders grave "Spyro! come play!" A little ice dragonling called to him her name was jewl. "Yeah come play." A fire dragonling the same age (but much larger) walked up next to her "Inferno I thought you were playing with thunderstreak." Jewl asked "She ran off somewhere." Inferno said "You mean you left her alone!" Jewl growled after all thunderstreak is her sister "I didn't she ran off!" Inferno argued "Yeah right." Jewl argued back Spyro walked down the hill and stood in front of them still arguing "Will you both stop!" Spyro yelled over them Inferno and Jewl srunk back "S-sorry Spyro." Jewl stammered shaking with fear "Come on you two lets go find thunderstreak." Spyro sighed walking past them "So where were you and thunder playing Inferno?" Spyro asked "Over by the Dark forest." Inferno said "But you know that place is forbiden to dragonlings!." Spyro said sternly "Yeah Inferno you should know better." Jewl said with a grin "Jewl." Spyro said eying her "Sorry Inferno." Jewl said "Ahhhhhh! help someone MONSTER!" A voice cried "Thunderstreak!" Spyro and Jewl yelled and they bolted into the forest "Help someone anyone!" Thunder screamed they finally found her she was backed againest a tree "H-help!" she cried Jewl was about to leap out of the bushes and save her sister "Wait!." Spyro whispered.A dark figure was walking up to thunderstreak "W-wait." The figure said holding its paw out "I-" "CHARGE!" Spyro yelled and tackled the figure "Ouch!" It cried "I got you now!" Spyro said but the figure fought back, they rolled around on the ground one pinning the other only to be thrown around and pinned back, they fought in the darkness when they rolled into a sun patch spyro had won he pinned the figure with all his might and then the light shone on the figure. A purple dragon that was so dark its scales were almost black and the dragon had blue streaks and markings all over its body its dark green eyes sparkled "Will you get off me!?" It growled "Sorry I thought." Spyro started "You thought I was a damisle in distress." She growled.
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Edited 1 time - Last edited at 13:12:19 20/03/2010 by Roka the dragon
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Queen_Cynder
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#2 Posted: 01:33:44 20/03/2010
Cool! It's really good. Just one thing - could you work on punctuation a bit? There were a few parts where I was confused.
Besides that - Awesome! ![]()
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icedragonmacey2
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#3 Posted: 03:12:24 20/03/2010
I agree, Queen_Cynder. really good.
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Roka the dragon
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#4 Posted: 12:49:25 20/03/2010 | Topic Creator
eh sorry bout the punctuation.
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