darkSpyro

This is a rewrite of Cynder19000 Keira-Destined to kill

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Prolouge: 2 Pathes = 2 Futures!

I hear voice outside my dark prisoin.
"She is destinded for 2 futures." a male dragon says.
"2 books = 2 futures. The path she choses is hers alone."
A female n' male tell the other they understand.
Then a blade whises by me, a nanometer from my flesh.
I see a elder purple dragon... but only for a few seconds.
The 2 other dragons, my parents, hide the books.
"What should we call her?" the female askes.
The male picks me up, "Keira, it means 'little dark 1'!"

Then a voice invades my thoughts,
"You are the light, you are the dark.
You are the day, you are the night.
You are the sun, you are the moon.
You are life, you are death.
You are...the little dark one. YOU ARE THE RUBY DRAGON!"

Good start
Altough bits of spelling need to be corrected

Pretty good start. lol. But since were working on this together, we should PM eachother our idea's, deal?

plz don't let Keira do the exact same thing as last time.

"Her destiny is ours to mold!" Mali n' Keira.
(AKA MinM20 n' Cynder 19000)

Lol..

Chapter1:The Life, Dreams, & Journey of the Ruby Dragoness!

Yrs later...

Keira, the little dark 1, is a fine young ruby dragoness. Yet dispite her name, she can't stand to see anything die. She lives in a cave... but she isn't alone. A deer n' her fawn stay w/her.

She has never seen another dragon... aleast in the real world. A dark purple dragon torments her w/her 'future'...

1 day, she woke up w/a jolt n' dashes outside. She runs n' runs... trying to escape the voice in her head. 'KILL THE PURPLE DRAGON! KILL SPYRO!!!!' Then she blacksout; she hits a tree!

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"Who is she, Cynder?" a male askes.

Keira opens her eyes has a female says the wrong words, "I don't know Spyro!" The Keira the Ruby Dragoness looks at the male n' female dragons. She looks into the eyes of Spyro the Purple Dragon & Cynder the Black Dragoness!

cool chapter!

Chapter2: Heros...

"My name is Keira. U must be Spyro n' his girlfriend Cynder, right!" The dragons nod.

"Yeah. We were going to the Temple when we saw u crash." Cynder says, lookin' at Spyro. "Want to come?" Keira nods n' follows them.

When they got to the Dragon Temple, Keira saw a picture of a very fimiliar dragon. "Who is that?"

Spyro looks down n' starts to cry. "I need a minute!" Cynder nods n' leads Keira inside.

"That's Ignitus, he was Spyros father figure! Yet, I heaard a rumor he really is Spyro's dad!" She explains.

"OK!" Keira walks away n' finds a empty room. 'Who was that... What, who am I thinking about?' She soon fell asleep!

Chapter3: ... Villains!

A dark purple dragon appaers w/ Keiras parents. "Ur daughter is to destroy the world n' to kill the purple dragon!" The dark purple 1 says.

Her father nods in agreement while her mother shakes her head. "No, her future is hers alone to deside. Mali-" Keiras mother got slamed into the ground.

"NEVER MINTION THAT NAME!" Dark says, geting off.

"Plaese exuse my wife, Master Malefor, but she wants to follow the light!" He glares at his wife, "But I will follow the dark. Ur other gave us both books!"

'What is going on here?' Keira asks herself. Then a young blue-grey dragon appears.

"Hello, ruby dragoness! U remember me don't u!"

"Mali, right!" Keira asks, looking at Malefor. He nods, then she wakes up!

problems:
1. dont use shortcuts. just write the damn word.
2. too many spelling errors. Ask Jeeves how to spell it xD
3. your chapters are too short.
4. if a character is shouting dont always use caps, just type in lower case and write so and so yelled at the top of his/her's voice.

Listens to music while u /\ tpye. "Sorry, what?"
*reads post* "Well, if u don't like it, don't read it!"

Chapter4: Training Begins

Keira looks around, her eyes heavy. "These nightmare r going to kill me!"

Cynder walks by towards the dojo. "Oh, Keira. Come on, sleepy head! The elders want to see what ur element is!" Then she ran off.

Keira chuckled a little, "She's funny!"

Then, has she entered the dojo...
She saw the statue of a great dragon....
Malefor the Dark Master, her fathers master!

Then she heard his voice:
"You are the light, you are the dark.
You are the day, you are the night.
You are the sun, you are the moon.
You are life, you are death.
You are...the little dark one. YOU ARE THE RUBY DRAGON!"

Chapter5: Ice Cold Heart!

Keira yells at the statue n' incases it in ice. 'How did I do that?'

Cyril come in to see what she did. "Ah, the royal blood of ice!" *coughblowhaertcough* "I can teach u how to harness ur power."

"Um, sure!" Keira says, walking up to the elder. "What's 1st?"

Cyril teaches her how he tought Spyro, but her fury is different.

The Dojo is encased in ice.
Icicles r even on the ceiling,
Then they fall on Cyril..........
Keira sees what she has done n' smirks, but it quickly fade to tears!

yay more!

Thx u!

Chapter6: The Path of The Ruby Dragoness Keira

"What have I done?" Keira ask herself.

"U followed ur fathers' path, RUBY DRAGON!" Malefor says, steping out of the shadows.

"NO! I'm not evil like u! I'm nice... I can't stand for anything to die!" She yells at the Dark Master.... Then looks at Cyril, shiscabobed by icicles. "They'll never forgive!"

"Of course not, u killed the Ice Gaurdian Cyril!" He says, walking up to him. "Tata!" The Dark Master venishes in a blaze of Convexity.

Spyro n' Cynder walk in soon after to see Keira crying by Cyril. "KEIRA!"

She looks up, "It was an acciddent! He was teaching me Ice n'...." Her tears chocked up her words.

'I will only help this 1ce, Keira. But after this, u must learn to control ur power!' A calm voice said. She turns around to see Mali, but he vanishes n' Cyril is OK!

'Follow ur own path Keira. U only have 2 to choice from.'

i edited. mwahahahaha!!!

yay! LOVE IT!!!!

MORE!!!!!!!!!! WE COMMAND IT!!!

"Soon, Star! Very soon!" ~ Mali n' Keira.

NUUUU!!!!!!!!!!! A QUOTE!!!!!!!!! IT BURNS!!!!!!!!!!

Chapter7: Ice, Earth, & Friends

She woke up! Just like Mali said, Keira was in the dojo.... only instead of ice, she used an earth fury! "Thank u, Mali."

"TERRADOR!" Cyril yells, "COME HERE!" The Earth Gaurdian came in to see hole in the roof!

"Um, ur supposed to be teaching her Ice!" Terrador says, cock-eyed.

"Well, I geuss I can master more than 1 element!" She says, grining.

"Her Ice is stronger than mine!" Cyril says, quietly. "Yet, she isn't a purple dragon or been exposed to the dark!"

"Is that how u master more than 1 element?"

Spyro n' Cynder came in, "Yes-!" Their eyes grew wide, speechless.

"Can I go hang out w/ my friends?" Cyril nods n' Keira joins her friends.

Any1 reading?

Of course I am, I read all the chapters just now, VERY GOOD!

U a fan or a friend?