darkSpyro

Chapter one

A shadow cornered a completly motionless female dragon. The shadow had a tall dragon in front, gasping at the sight.
"Mytic!" Cried the dragon, weeping at the sight, his black scales dull in the night, infested with dark shadows. The dragon was silent. Everything was silent. Departing the howling of the breeze and the weeping of the dragon. The dragon suddenly flicked her big blue eyes open but shuttered them weakly in sight of the dark night. She suddenly slowly perked up, her jaw slowly opening.
"Murri..." She groaned. She then flapped her eyelids down and let out a soft and silent bubble. She was dead.
"Murri! The egg!" Howled Murri, he drooped down and frowned. He turned to see a dirt infested egg with slight cracks on the end. Murri held his tears back and rushed over to the egg and caught hold of it in his claws in high protection. Suddenly Murri himself perked up as a voice whispered.
"Murri," The voice repeated once more, Murri swifted himself towards the left and right in a total of two times, clashing his large teeth. Murri turned one last time to see a faint figure of a tall purple dragon behind him. Murri looked up. He would do anything to pay back for why his wife died. Anything.
"I can take you to a land of likeness, for I know exactly who preformed to kill your wife," Annouced the dragon with a nasty smirk on his jaw. Murri followed.
"What should I do?" He asked, mocking his recent perked up expression.
"No fee, I'll telport you their in no time," The faint figure said. Before anymore words could be said, with a blasting noise Murri was sended off rapidly into the area. It wasn't what it was though. They were dead trees and dust infested land everywere. Murri bobbed down, noticing he still had hold of the egg. The faint figure didn't appear again, so Murri's objections were blindfolded.
"I shall call you by the name of Szarotka, No fears to attack," Murri said clearly to the egg. The egg glistened as another crack appeared.

Is this like Szarotka's origns
Interesting start

(( A bit of a remake ))

Chapter two

That was years ago, Szarotka was now fully hatched at the age of Eleven. She skidded across in the dusty waste land knocking herself onto a dead tree. She yelled and scooped herself up quickly. Szarotka was a future Dark Warrior like most Dark dragons raised in Darkness. Her ebony black scales were shaded in the red and orange clouded sky. Far off in the distance with the brown blurs the clouds suddenly clouded together.

What is the story about?

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Chapter three

Today was Szarotka's first training day for being a Dark Warrior expecting Sir Gralin to scatter towards Szarotka with his Dark Warrior trainees slobbing behind his shadow. No tall dragons stomped towards her. No one. But her father Murri suddenly came gliding towards her.

Good chapter
If possible, could you make the chapters longer?

(( Yes, sorry not much time to make longer chapters,))

PART 2

"Father?" Szarotka said. She looked up as he skidded on the dusty floor towards her.
"Szarotka,"
Szarotka looked suprised before she could ask Murri explained his entrance.
"Malefor has fallen," He said. He drooped down and looked onto the floor.
"Malefor?"
"The Dark Master, he has just recently been killed by the other purple dragon," Sighed Murri, taking a second glance at Szarotka.
"But who will rule the Dark Kingdom then?" Szarotka howled slowly with her head slighty moving to the right.
"That's the problem. No one is signed in Malefor's family. Malefor put it to his will that only a member of his family can be the next Dark master. And Malefor has no family," Replyed back Murri, looking puzzled.
"That greedy squirt!" Hissed Szarotka with fire in her eyes. Her eyes were almost like billions of fire furys.

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PART 3

"Watch out, the guards could be watching," Said Murri, looked to the left and right. Szarotka's piercing amber eyes bulged at the ground.
"Crof et onece, bari," Hissed Szarotka, her eyes slighted shut. She lifted her head up fast glazing into the far away distance.
"No curses, remember the guards?" Remarked Murri. Murri panicked and perked up, but drooped down with it's answers.
"I'm sick of this, with no ruler, no purpose,"
"Guards!" Snapped Murri, he looked panicked in matter. Murri then stopped his spluttering and began a long silence. Suddenly someone spoke up.
"I think is getting late," Said Murri, his voice all muffled up. Szarotka herself drooped down.
"Fine,"
"You won't stay up too late will you?"
"I won't,"

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PART 4

Szarotka scampered away into the distance. The navy blue sky was painted above her dull grey horns as the moon was burried into the darkness of the sky. Szarotka looked up. Hours had past. Szarotka had walked far. She looked back. Long way. She glided off back to save a few time but lands in the dust infested land, her claws have burried in the dust as she landed. She then scuttered fast like a small beetle hunched down as her black and gothic red streaked tuft of hair flopped over. She finally got their. But they was no sign of Murri. Murri had gone to the poorly shaped cave, in other words 'home'. Szarotka was their now. She stopped directly at the entrance with a time of panting. She then stopped, looked up and entered the darkness of the cave. The candel wasn't lit. Szarotka suddenly stumbed onto a sharp cone and tripped. She grunted and bopped up to see a ghastly dead dragon. Murri was dead.

Chapter four

Szarotka drooped down as a silent tear rushed down from her eye and down to the floor of the cave. Szarotka slowly walked out one of her claws lifting up one at a time. She looked up the sky. A shooting star suddenly shot out. Szarotka closed her eyes and made a wish.
"I wish to see the real world," She whisper, she then opened her eyes to find herself in the same old place.

That was last night, Szarotka had taken a long slumber into the night. Her eyes fluttered open. She woke up in a strange place. No cave behind her and strange thin green spikes brustling her scales. She lifted herself up and looked around. Strange bright dots were also on the ground. Szarotka dizzed around confused.

She suddenly heard a noise. Another dragon. Szarotka looked up stable to see a young red fire dragon coming her way. Szarotka gasped into sight of the red dragon.
The dragon bumped into her. Szarotka fluttered her winged as she was hit by the dragon a fell back onto the floor. She then dizzed upwards and glazed at the dragon.
"You ok?" Asked the dragon. Szarotka smiled.
"Yeah, I'm fine," Replyed Szarotka as she fell over onto the strange green things.
"Whar... What is that?"
"Pardon?"
"This green stuff!"
"Oh it's grass,"
"Why did you ask," Added the dragon. Szarotka spluttered and then answered. The red dragon didn't glaze at all, he stared at her open eyed. Szarotka dizzed and smiled as she swirled up high.
"Just, I'm... From..." She stopped with a long time of slurring her words.
"Warfang?"
"Err... Yep," Said Szarotka, she didn't know what Warfang was.
"Where are we?" Asked Szarotka, then adding.
"Your in Avalar, wanna go for a walk?"

Chapter five

Szarotka plodded up smiling and scampered behind him. Gamith started his walk with small trodds, later on turning into slighty medium sized steps. Gamith soon came towards a cave shaped from thin but tall stones. Crowded with small crooked stones spread around the bald pacth of grass around it.
Szarotka buldged her piercing amber eyes at it.
"What is it?" She whispered. A shadow shaded Szarotka and Gamith.
Gamith moved his head side to side as he bit his bottom jaw. He then stopped and looked up at the small cave.
"Some-thing... Is not rii-ght," Gamith said. He slurred his words and spluttering in the shade chasing after them.

"We should check it," Suggested Szarotka. Gamith slowly walked inside while Szarotka followed the entered the cave. The cave was infested with shadow and only a little beam of weak light to see. A tall green dragons was hunched up in the corner of the cave with his huge crooked wings over his face.

I've missed a lot but this is as good as ever

He peeked from his wings.
"Who are you?" Spluttered Gamith. Szarotka looked up at the dragon open wide.
"Thou should'ent be'ere young ens, twas very calm an quiet as noarmal, until ther horrifiy'yin monster of fiendish Biribaeaks came en tried to kill me! Dey tried ta stabbed meh but I quickly hid, dey gon for now. I war idin for a while, took meh lon time to see norra to com hout or not," He explained.
"Whats happing?" Asked Szarotka

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"The expire is happenen youn'en, the end. Moxone ain't holdin it forever," He snapped. Szarotka peered at his wings.
"We can," She annouced.

"Warhar! Har...ha! You carn't! Moxone is angry, he is unstopar-ble! Wen Moxone angrie, ye carn't stop him! You aren't comin back alive ar ya? I tell ya once, Moxone is powerful n e could eaisly kil yars. Thou you norra purpal drag-an?"
"We will kill him, your just to afraid of what the future holds. Your afraid of exiting your cave. Your afraid of the world," Snarled Szarotka looking up glumfully.
"Arr... So we hav won of em who has dar fire in de eyes eh?" He laughed. Gamith stepped further.
"Don't make fun of my friend," He growled. The dragon weeped.
"I srow sworry! Name Gremfel, yurs?" He cried. He hid his head behind his wings again and cringed.
"Szarotka,"
"And I'm Gamith, err... Grenfel?"
"Yar! Ello! Ya betta set off den, but ers ma ad-vice. Look out fer armies and always stick tagatha," He adviced. Gamith watched him warely.
"Come on!" Szarotka said quickly. They both leaped out from the cave.

Good parts

"Where shall we turn?" Gamith asked. Szarotka looked into the distance.
"I don't know," She replyed.

Nice part

Szarotka frowned and flicked her red streaked hair back.
"What about Warfang?" Suggested Gamith. Szarotka looked up hopefull.
"Where is it?" She asked, she then remembered that she was from Warfang.

Good part

"Just follow me, I know a secret tunnel that leads to Warfang," He said. Szarotka followed him towards a cave like tunnel in the cliff. It was beside a water fall. The azure water streamed out quickly. Szarotka stepped further away from it.
"Down here," He then added disappearing in the cold, deep, dark cave. Szarotka followed him in.

Good part

The darkness soon ended as the beam of faint light was only in the short distance. There it was. Szarotka's claws hit the detailed path of strange symbols each burnished auburn and foliate boasky gussy patterns. Each one of the tiles were bordered with a magenta red with small bright brown squares cornering it. Szarotka scanned the area. Pearly white statues of fearsome and wise dragons in courageous poses were mounted onto fancy beige greek posts. A beautiful fountain like pond stood nearby. Szarotka stared at the deep blue foam water swaying in it's rightful place. The glittering liquid caught Szarotka's eye fast. Gamith turned his head to Szarotka. Szarotka still glared into the water.
"Thirsty?" Gamith guessed. Szarotka nodded her head, her eyes still gaping at the mouth-watering water.

Good part

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