darkSpyro

I work on this story

character:









and his army

new characters:

craft

zorro

myself<--has three form

ice golem

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part 1

light egg start to hatch."look small dragon still fell faint"cynder said."small dragon?"spyro,malefor in shock.lately soon,unknown dragon will capture malefor."you will never see your master"unknown dragon said.unknown dragon fly away.

an interesting start, but you've really got to work more on your sentences

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an interesting start, but you've really got to work more on your sentences

Garys not English, but after a while you get used to his style of writing... Most people on here knows what he says now a days... But I don't blame you for not understanding at first... Anyway, good start. I like it...

Okay, thanks

What origin is Gary?

you like my story.no problem


part 2

hour lately,he find malefor."I going to find malefor"I said."wait,gary"spyro said."spyro,you need follow"I said continue.I and spyro fly to valley of avalar.

interesting
keep it up

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part 3

"here we fly down"I said.unknown dragon walk beside."where our master,malefor?spyro and I said."your master,he was my shadow army,you are too late and I am ice golem "he said.

part 4

"ice golem,you turn him back normal"I said."you want him turn back normal"he said.I turn dark form."I will using my brearth shadow earth on you,ice golem"I said continue.

Great stuff here

I write my story later,maybe soon.

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read some part 4.

part 5

"my melee also use much scratch"ice golem said.soon later,shadow army turn back normal."try use your shadow form to change"malefor said."malefor,you return"I said.

part 6

"do your unleased brearth dark poison"malefor said."right,I doing my unleased my brearth"I said."ok,now rise up"malefor said continu.

Nice parts

thanks

some parts my story later

like story keep go, gary :P

thanks

part 7 coming soon

here part 7.

part 7.


"you wouldn't see first of me"ice golem said."let ice golem go"malefor said."I don't let him capture you,malefor"I said.

Nice part

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part 8

soon,I should chase ice golem and malefor wouldn't stop chase me."stop,gary,let him go"malefor said.

Nice part

I doing my story later.

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part 9

ice golem send shadow army to capture craft and zorro."you two should turn dark form,ha ha"ice golem evil laugh."craft and zorro has been capture by ice golem himself"malefor said."hold on,two eggs has hatch because you hatch first before second egg late hatch"cynder said."me was hatch?two egg"I said

Good part

part 10

"he should find you and I won't turn darkness,ice golem"zorro said.grr,he wouldn't find me anyway"ice golem said."here your new armor bracer and back your tail plus your pink helmet too"cynder said."here your sword,gary"spyro said."I feel sleepy"I said.after that,I went into dream."you haven't use your fear brearth but still,you need learn"igintus said."o.o igintus,I haven't use my fear brearth....hold on,I still wake up in dream"I said." hehe,you were my dream"ignitus laugh.

part 11

"my dream"I said."wait,your armor and helmet"ignitus said."it is time to wake up,cynder call you"ignitus said continu."wake up,gary"cynder said.

Nice parts
your sentences are definately getting better

yeah,I would thanks to you,even more story of part 12 to come.

part 12

"you look your dark form in river"cynder said."I am you"dark gary said."o.o....you were me in my dark form but you still inside my normal form"I said."yeah,malefor told you that you went well of darkness soul and you fell it"dark gary said"oh really"I said.

Nice

(filler)

would continue or I write my story later.part 13 coming soon.

part 13

"ice golem send shadow army in dragon city,hurry up"dark gary said."follow me"malefor said."I heard on ground too and spyro,cynder need protect the gate now"I said."we handle this,take your new helmet"terrador's army said."ahh,I been trap,quick and save me"malefor said

Good part

part 14

"soon,I turn you into your dark form and you should my darkness,gary"ice golem said."dark gary was me,so bring in"I said,"right then,I would use my melee"ice golem said continu.not later,ice golem fell down on ground."how strong you are?I would take zorro"ice golem said.

part 15

I grab ice golem's hand went spinning."ooohhh,you make me dizzing"ice golem said.you turn me back to my normal form"I said."ice golem,you would turn shadow form"malefor said."nnnooo"ice golem said.


I shall continue of part 15 my story.

Good parts

part 16

"I did turn ice golem into shadow golem and he was all yours,gary"malefor said."I would take him"I said.soon after,cynder told me that ice golem turn shadow form."good,craft and zorro can turn dark form"cynder said.

Nice part

part 17


"I going grab you"ice golem's shadow army said."grab me,so bring it on"I said."wait,ice golem's shadow army would catch you,gary"cynder said."yeah,his shadow army should catch you"spyro said.just short later,shadow golem turn normal form."my shadow army would catch you"ice golem said."ah,too late and his shadow army going grab me"I said comtinue.dark gary appear and say."!! my dark form start appear again,rrraaahhh"I said."ice golem,you don't grab me"dark gary said and rise up to unleased shadow earth brearth.

Good part
Getting better

part 18

just short later,ignitus appear."I got my dark form too" ignitus said."really,you got your dark form,ignitus"I said."ignitus,you haven't gone yet and I was very sad,so I turn dark form like you two"spyro said.shadow army got jump on me and capture."aahh,I been capture"I said continue.ignitus would't stand see me and he turn dark form."let him go"dark ignitus said.

Nice

(filler)

would like more story.I need to put song to my story.

part 19

dark ignitus use light poison brearth."let see how you feel faint with my light poison brearth ,ice golem"dark ignitus said.

Nice

(filler)

part 20


"would your dark form and you should turn,gary"cynder said."I turn my dark form"I said.

Nice part

thanks

part 21

"use your ice brearth"malefor said."using your ice brearth,gary"cynder said."I use my melee"spyro said."ok,I using my ice brearth"I said.

part 22

"not later soon,you need me"dark gary said."probobly not too late and you turn dark form"cynder said.

Good parts

part 23

"I going to valley of avalar and look new armor bracer"I said."come on,open chest"cynder said.