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Chapter 1.

Hero

It happened. Malefor had been looking after me for years, ever since my egg was left half in the deep white blanket of the snow in Winter. My mother had left me on my own, I was clearly an orphan. Malefor picked my egg up in his arms, he did it steady and tryed not to smash the egg. That was as far as Malefor told me, before his death. I'm thirteen now, Malefor had passed away a year ago by now. He brought me up to be a dark dragon and to wipe out every single light dragon their is living and breathing, including the purple dragon. When he made this deal with his friend Gaul, he sended me to the Light dragon world. He last told me, If I die Kenec, you do everthing I told you to do. I treasured thoose very words as if they were like real treasure shimmering in a golden chest with a lock and key. Malefor had taught me how to catch prey and how to survive. I thanked him hard for that, I'm living on scraps of meat now.

I had never killed a Light dragon before. I can't stand killing a dragon. They would probally call for friends or other light dragons to fight back, or kill me even. Suddenly I heard someone yelling. I followed the sound. I rushed through the green grass. The noise got louder and louder, until I got to a small ebony black egg, with a small baby female dragon's head popping out. The baby dragon had purple scales and yellow eyes, I knew I had to kill all purple dragons as Malefor said, but I didn't want to kill any dragons. It cried and howled as I stared at it. I didn't blame the little thing though. I look very evil, although I don't like the sound of being evil. I have milky white horns, ebony black scales, a pure white tringale like shape at the end of my tail, amber eyes and black and red wings, which are some pretty evil colours. Stick some red glowing eyes on me and I'll look extremly evil. So I made the decission to pick the young dragon out of the egg and comfort her. I patted her slowly in my arms. The baby dragon yelped weak and helpless.

Suddenly a red female dragon around the age of sixteen came rushing towards me. She stared at me comforting the dragon.
"You saved the new purple dragon!"She cheered. I was confused. I sighed and put the baby the dragon down.
"Huh?" I said. I was hoping for an explaining answer. The red dragon sighed as if I was from another planet.
"The purple dragon egg was missing for two months, now it's hatched, it's a girl and your a hero!" She explained. I gave her my 'oh' expression on my face. I then was about to ask her a question.
"Who are you?" I asked. The red dragon looked at me that same way again.
"I'm Rofes, The temple messanger," She hissed. She then looked at me sarcasticly. She sighed.
"Follow me," Said Rofes. I grabbed the baby dragon and followed her. She turned her head round every few mintues to check if I was still following her. We soon came to 'the temple'.

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Chapter 2.

The temple

The temple door was wide open, Terrador was standing tall in front of me.
"A hero, Master Terrador, the purple dragon," Spluttered Rofes. Terrador looked amazed on his face when he saw me holding the purple dragon. The purple dragon squirmed.
"Ah, the lost warrior," Said Terrador to the purple dragon. The purple dragon looked up at Terrador. I frowned.
"Come in," He said. We walked inside the temple slowly, carefully scanning every detail.
"Welcome to the temple," He said. He then called for Cyril and Volteer. I heard that Ignitus was dead.
Cyril and Volteer came rushing in.
"Who found the dragon, I shoud have found it easy," Said Cyril
"This young dragon, what is your name?" Annouced Terrador. Cyril and Volteer stared at me.

"Kenec," I said quietly. Cyril sighed. I frowned.
"We shall name the purple dragon, Warrior," Said Terrador. Cyril glared at Terrador.
"No, we shall call it Cyril Junior," Said Cyril
"No way! We shall call it Raincherry Baroness Tobias the Second," Annouced Volteer. Cyril and Volteer began to argue. Suddenly Terrador spoke up.
"We shall let the finder of this dragon name it," Annouced Terrador. Cyril and Volteer stopped fussing. They all looked at me.

(Sorry short one this time,)

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Chapter 3

Names

I thought of as many names as I could. Purple? Too short and plain. Gail? Too random. I thought harder and harder, suddenly I relaxed my mind. The ideas were flickering around in my head and rushing out of my jaw, But one stayed in there.
"The mother should call it a name," I said. The elders began to whisper, I didn't quite get what they were saying, but I picked some of it up. I heard Terrador say 'Tell' and that's about it. I figeted bored and confused. I even began to think they were just being plain rude, but suddenly Cyril cleared his throat.
"Kenec, Her mother had died," Cyril said. Cyril's voice was low and soft for once. I suddenly feeled a warm feeling inside, a feeling like the baby dragon was a sister to me. I understood what it was like for her, she had never seen the face of her mother. Her mother's warm soft soothing voice, her mother's soft face, her mother's so-. I suddenly burst into tears. The tears rolled down my face, spilling right down. I wanted to see my mother so bad.

"What ever is the matter?" Terrador asked. My teeth clashed together, I bit my jaw. I was worried they would find out about Malefor. Maybe they were spying on me. Maybe someone was watching me. Oh please, please, don't cry! I told myself. I had to push the tears from my face, but my face was white.
"I'm fine," I mumbled. Terrador mouthed to Cyril.
"What are you going to name it then? Cyril Junior?" Cyril said, I noticed the little hint. Rofes sighed.
"Come on! Think of a name, Flame, Fire, Fury, Ignite," Suggested Rofes, she was never really impressed with me as i've found out. I snarled at her. Rofes glared at me, the elders didn't notice.
"Sister," I said. I thought it was perfect, although I wasn't sure if they would agree.
"Sister? What a silly name!" Rofes burst out laughing, I blushed. The elders smiled.
"Well, that's a nice name," Commented Terrador. Suddenly Cyril stood in front of Terrador.
"Rofes, Look after Kenec," He said. Suddenly I feeled worthless.

Very nice narration and good chapter
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Chapter 4

Bullied

I followed Rofes outside the temple, feeling cold and stupid as she hissed and twisted her head and glared at me as if I had done something wrong, I stared at her wondering, suddenly she snarled at me. Maybe she was getting her own revenge on me. She didn't stop walking, her red scaled slender legs moving fast and quicky, while my legs just rolled slowly, stopping at points to examine the place more, although I have seen plenty of grass and trees for as long as I've been here, but I still had a strong feeling everytime I passed the trees and grass, I had to scan and check them. I followed Rofes, twisting and turning as she turned directions, she soon came across two other female dragons, about the same age as her. I tittered nervous, I thought they looked as if they hated me so much.
"Who is that?" Asked one, she said as if I was a crawling bug, scattering across the grass. I think if I was a bug I would be running away from Rofes giant claw, stomping on the grass.
"Oh, some kid," Said Rofes, Rofes said it so cool and casual, I wanted to be like her and be cool, but I can't by the looks of it. They sighed as if they were bored of me, suddenly one of Rofes friends, a pink and white scaled dragon spoke up.
"What is your problem?" She asked me. I was doing it again, scanning the dragons, checking their appearences. I frowned.
"She has plenty of problems, watch this," Said Rofes, she ran up to me and kicked me hard, I skidded back hurt.
"Creep," Said the other one, an azure like green scaled dragon. I feeled unworthy and silly, maybe everyone though that about me, maybe that's why my mother left me cold, maybe Malefor feeled sorry for me, maybe everyone did, mayb-. Tears rolled down my amber eyes slowly, dripping and tapping. I missed my Mother again. Maybe all this was true. No, I don't know the truth or the lies. Maybe I don't exist.
"You stupid rat," Hissed Rofes pushing me, I hit against a tall tree, I howled hurt and sad. They didn't care.
"Get a life," Growled the pink and white dragon, her headspikes wobbled as she turned round at me. I cryed harder. The blue and green dragoness rammed me with her sharp acute horns, stabbing me on my claw, I yelled.
I was so upset, maybe I could turn into another person, like Rofes, who was cool and casual. Maybe there is someone within me, I wiped the tears away with my claw and stood up tall.

Poor Kenec
Good chapter

Chapter 5

Element

I could never defend myself, stick up for myself or fight back. Malefor had taught me a few things in my life, but I didn't quite get them right. I don't even have a single clue what my element is. The dragons glared and me, sniggering, I tittered with them. I was still standing up tall, even though I didn't know how to fight back.
"What is up with you?" Giggled the pink and white dragon. The dragon had a sort of light rose pink scales, with bright white horns that shimmered in the sun. Her floppy white head spikes wobbled as she swifted her head. I frowned. I had to do something about this, this can't last forever.
"Shut up," I spat, the words flying out of the dragons rapidly. They looked at me sarcasticly.
"Whatever," Hissed Rofes, glaring at me angered. I could feel something in me. Something heating up inside me. My jaw burned up, suddenly a bolt of ebony black shot out of my jaw, going straight for Rofes and her friends. The yelled and yelped helpless and harmed. I think I learned my element. But what was it? I had to get away or I would get in deep trouble, I ran and ran toppling and tripping over the tallest stones. I suddenly thumped onto the hard ground, the pointy green grass tickling my face. I peered around. I didn't see any of the bright sunshined trees. At this point the grass was long and pointy, I'd never seen anything like this before. I was lost. I creeped around the place going further into the long dark green grass, the grass got longer each time. By now, the grass was up to my head. Where was I? Was I going to get back?

Nice chapter

Chapter 5

Lost

I rushed through the tall long grass, calling for help. Somehow I had the feeling that I didn't want to go back. Back to the short grass, back to Rofes. I would probally get in deep trouble if I wen't back, Rofes would tell on me. I gave up. The last help I yelped failed as I sighed. It was getting late, no stars shined in the sky, the moon just burried itself in the darkness and the wind whispered and moaned as the trees far away were nothing but dark and black blurs in the distance. I stared into the blurs, scanning them. Maybe that was the way home I thought, I scampered over towards the trees, running and running, sweat on my brow. I was running so fast, not checking the stones I was toppling over, but when I toppled over the rocks, my winding legs leaped further . Soon the blurs began to turn into dark green shapes, soon they began to turn into trees. I rushed into the trees, out of breath, shadows lurking behind me, shadows flying above my horns. The trees groaned as the leaned back, pushed by the wind. I heard a sudden flowing noise. I followed the noise as it got louder and louder, a flowing creek. I heard a crash and a bang, a bird flutter out of a tree as the leaves of the tree hovered down by my ebony black claws.

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Chapter 5

Lost

Something was going on. I could sense it right through my nose. My tail swifted behind swaying. That was the only noise. My tail swifting. No wind, no trees, Not even the sound of my weak claws trodding on the floor. I walked past the flowing creek, it bubbled and popped with a nasty croak. A croak of a frog. I guessed it that they was some small creatures here, but not dragons. But maybe I was mistaken, I lurked into the shadow infested woods until I saw a small bear cave. I thought they was maybe a dragon in their to help me out, but I didn't want to go back but somehow I had a feeling I had too. I stopped and thought, ideas flickering in my mug, my head slighty shaking. I made the decission, I continued walking towards the cave, past the slimy dark trees and past the flowing creek of swampy green water.

Chapter 6

I stepped into the cave. Upright, uproud with a silly smirk on my face. I wanted to look cool. I wanted to be the top. But I knew I wasn't, people were two-faced to me, some just told me. They hiss the horrid words like Stupid, Rat, Ugly, the list is never ending. But I will give the list a quick expire, tearing away. Suddenly, a blue claw holding a lantern showed up. The lantern jiggled and jangled onto my horns.
"Yer norra dra-agon are ye?" A old croaky voice croaked out. I didn't understand it.

The Hermit?
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Yep.

Chapter 7

"I sez yer norra dra-agon are ye?" He repeated. I nodded, still not understanding. The shadow revealed a blue cheetah, he cackled.
"Yer a dra-agon! Yer ar scail-ed dri-ed oute winged lizzardd aren-t ya?" Laughed the hermet. I frowned, feeling umcomfortable.
"Whez da matterz?"

Good first part