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I know it is laid out weird but I put this in the wrong forum...but still pls enjoy

1 Posted: 05:07:24 08/05/2009
hi this is about Cynders legned hope u enjoy ---
Hi I am Cynder hear me roar!!! search Cynders legned to see my story.
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#2 Posted: 05:11:59 08/05/2009
5 years after the defete of evil Cynder

Cynder-awww shes so cute what should we call her??
Spyro-hmmm how about Cyndro???
Cynder-ok, what about this little fella???
Spyro u choose I choose Cyndros name.
Cynder-Spyder... I know its a bad name.
Spyro-no thats good
Cynder-lets put them to bed

to be continued ---
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#3 Posted: 05:29:05 08/05/2009
//www.darkspyro.net/image...6B4A-Cyndro.jpg
Cyndro is Cynder and Spyros child same with Spyder
//www.darkspyro.net/image...111A-Spyder.jpg
//www.darkspyro.net/image...1150A-Spyro.jpg ---
Hi I am Cynder hear me roar!!! search Cynders legned to see my story.
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#4 Posted: 18:54:22 08/05/2009
All storys should be in the fandom section.... ---
Who ever said that nothing is imposible never tried slamming a revolving door.
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#5 Posted: 07:14:52 09/05/2009
sorry

a year later

Cyndro-I wana be like mom and dad when i am older, dont u?
Spyder-of course I do sisey
Cyndro-Shut up
Spyder-no
*they start fighting*
both-ow
Cynder-calm down u two ---
Hi I am Cynder hear me roar!!! search Cynders legned to see my story.
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Samius

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#6 Posted: 21:09:15 09/05/2009
This story has some major fails..

1. Failiness! Was it that dragons have offspring every 10 years or something? Correct me if I'm wrong, I don't really know about that..

2. Hastiness! I don't really think that Spyro and Cynder would choose their beloved child's names just like that.
"SNAP! you are Cyndro and you are Spyder, now let's get to the part where you grow up!"

3. Messiness! You can't really get any sense out of the story.. It's written randomly, and the storyline just suddenly jumps forward a year or so..

4.Growuppiness! Yeah.. They're year old now, and they fight and talk? Shouldn't dragons grow up slowly..

5. Purpliness! Cyndro seems to have a notorious purple dragon cyndrome!
Purple dragons are born once, in every generation.. What a luck that purple dragon like Spyro just happened to have a purple child. It's not a heritage I tell you!

7.Last, but not least.. As already mentioned, this story should be in the fandom section. But you can't change it so I guess this will have to do..

Sorry for the negative opinion, hopefully it'll help you make your story better in future.

Edit: Oh yeah, you should give some information of the enviroment and the situation of the world. The whole story is not just talking, is it? ---
War.. War never changes..
Thou shalt click..
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#7 Posted: 22:39:19 09/05/2009
Ah, I just recalled. Dragons can have offspring anytime, but purple gragons are only born every ten years.. My mistake..

Sorry 'bout that, foolish me.. ---
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Thou shalt click..
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#8 Posted: 03:04:32 10/05/2009
thats ok
I am pretty bad at writing....I am just not a school girl. ---
Hi I am Cynder hear me roar!!! search Cynders legned to see my story.

spyder and Cyndro-ok mum
Spyro-we know u just want to be like us
Cynder-but u wont be doing that in a long time
*it started raining*
Cynder-better get u two in
Cyndro and Spyder-aww.

that night

Cyndro-I cant wait till we are older
Spyder-well why dont we go and save the world?
Cyndro-the now????
Spyder-yes!!!!
Cyndro-I dont know...we are not aloud.
Spyder-so *as he climbed out the window*
Cyndro-wait 4 me *follows him*
day and night they walked and walked intill they came to a dark spooky palace

???-who dares to come in here
Spyder-me and my sis and I am not scared of any thing.
??????-is that so???...well try this 4 sise*leeps to start a fight

so on at the house
Cynder-spyro!!!!
Spyro-What is it cynder dear???
Cynder-its the kids!!!!
Spyro-what are the flying???
Cynder-NO.....there gone!!!
Spyro-WHAT LETS GO QUICK!!!!!

Cynder-but we dont know were they are.
Spyro- we will fly

ok :/

Cynder-there they are
Spyro-lets go
????-ahhh Spyro.....and Cynder
Cynder-I know u
????-ahh yes u do.....its me Malefor!!!
Cynder-what no!
Malefor-yess hm hm hm hm hm
Spyro-drop dead creep
Cynder-lets fight
Spyder-mom and dads fighting lets join in
Cyndro-wait bro no!
*malefor smacks Spyder and kills him*
Cynder-nooooooooooooooooooo!!!!!
*turns evil*

Awsome a Hatchling died!

sorry......but this is getting anoying, go complain about some 1 elses story.

what if some 1 was asking if i wanted to come out or my dinner was ready or some 1 else wanted on the computer!!!serisly this is getting anoying!

and thank u FireBall

*kills malefor*
Cynder-no.
Spyro-my...good...strong...kid hes d..d...d...dea...d
Cynder-*crys and hugs in to Spyro*
Cyndro-what happened dad...was he sleep fighting
Spyro-no.....what is sleep fighting anyway.
Cyndro-its when u fight while u sleep....can u get him to wake up.
*Cynder flys home still crying*
Spyro-I will explain it on the way home.
Cyndro-ok dad
Spyro-he wont be with us any more
Cyndro-how come
Spyro-hes went up in the sky to be with ignightus
Cyndro-whos he?
Spyro-hes a nice dragon....if it wasnt 4 him i would not be here and i would not have my powers.

PC!!! Now to get rid of Cyndro! l-l-l->(Knife) + *Dragon* = X-X

:L
no Cynders going to live

Cyndro-Will I ever go with iggy
Spyro-whos iggy
Cyndro-a nick name I made 4 ignightus.
Spyro-oh.....
Cyndro-will I???
Spyro-I hope not....well you will have to die at old age.
Spyro-lets got home.

*at home*
Cyndro-night mum and dad.
Cynder and Spyro-night
Spyro-u ok?
Cynder-OF COURSE I AM NOT!!!
Spyro- sorry dear....but u know I am up set too.

PC!!!

Cynder-yeah I know


The end

HA HA HA HA VERY SHORT I KNOW

Wow.
Cynder- I know............. this is short.

Not to be mean or anything, but you should have made it longer than that.

yeah but there is going to be chapter two each chapter is one whole big story