darkSpyro

I thought I might make up a story.

Chapter1:Death Of The Purple Dragon [Spyro]
Spyro and Cynder were bandaged up after the fight with Malefor,Spyro said"Cynder I heard you say I, then everthing went mute"Um...:Cynder said "You'll have to be ready for this Spyro" " sigh" "I love you!" "I love you too Cynder!"...3 days later Cynder was lying near the lake of peace, saying to herself "Oh..."she said "Spyro fly out of the temple any second now on his mission.4 hours past she had fallen asleep, she was suddenly awoken by hunter "Wake up Cynder!" he said in a sad voice.Cynder said "What Hunter" "Um... i just found Spyro's body he wasn't breathing." "Sigh... Cynder he's dead..."WHAT!!!!!!!!!" Cynder said

To be continued...

Chapter2:The Funeral

Hunter said "Hey!, don't get you're tail in a knot Cynder!" "Why I'm aloud to!" Cynder yelled out! "Besides now that Spyro is dead, Sparx wil think I murdered him!" Cynder said "Hey Cynder, leave Sparx to me!" "Oh yeah they are holding a funeral for Spyro"Hunter said "THATS NOT GOING TO BRING HIM BACK IS IT HUNTER!" she yelled at him."Whatever"Hunter said.1 hour later the funeral was held Cynder was asked to come up and say things about Spyro "Loving,caring,serious,hansom,strong and always there when he is needed most." she said and whispered... "but he is not here when I need him."

To be continued...

Chapter3:The return of the purple dragon

Cynder had bought bottle of magic and started walking towards the purple dragons grave, she had been tought how to bring someone back to life.She sprinkled it on Spyro's grave, then purple beams flew out of the grave she started crying tears of joy."SPYRO"she screamed,"Cynder...but how" "Who cares, your BACK Spyro!" "We have to tell Terrador Spyro!" "okay Cynder."

Heh heh heh

Hard to read and the fact he dies was compleatly pointless because he only stayed dead for 1 chapter.
But coontinue, I can't really judge until you've done a couple more chapters.

ADVICE:
"What?" Cynder said"It's ok" Said Hunter.
That's hard to read.
It should be:
"What?" Cynder said.
"It's ok" Hunter said.

yes...
*lookes at username*
T_T joy....

Hey Tango I won't wright anymore if you keep that attitude UP!

I mean it!

Chapter4:The celebration

Spyro and Cynder walked towards the Temple, the local dragons were staring at Spyro amazed.Spyro wondered"Why are they all staring at me?" "Probaly because they are amazed to see you alive!, of course!" Cynder said in a sarcastic way.Terrador was sorting out the crystals of life, Terrador had seen Cynder walk in "Oh good morning young, WHAT THE!" "SPYRO" he said in a suprised way."Young Dragon I thought you were dead!" Terrador said "So did I!" Spyro said "But!, Cynder brought me back."There shall be a celebration in your honor for your return!" "Sounds great"Cynder blurted out.The next day the celerbration was held for Spyro, the entire civillization of the Dragon City was there they were shouting "SPYRO" "SPYRO" Cynder was called up Spyro as soon as she got up there she kissed him on the cheek and he blushed. Terrador yeld "QUIET!" "The festivities start!" There were games and stories for little dragons. The teen dragons talked to the old dragons, but Spyro had snuck away from festivities to be alone.Cynder said to Spyro"Lets leave Dragon City and live on some remote island!" "Why" Spyro protesed "I want us to live together with nobody around for miles." "Fine."

To be continued

awesome!!
do a serie of that i have to read it if you do that!!

Quote: Cynder11111

Hey Tango I won't wright anymore if you keep that attitude UP!

I mean it!

its called advise.
TAKE IT!!!!!!

jes, person. if you whant to be a better wrighter so people could read it without eny probs, take advise from the post.

Quote: Cynder11111

Hey Tango I won't wright anymore if you keep that attitude UP!

I mean it!

Question: Do I care?

You will never become even CLOSE to a writer if you don't take advice.

Quote: Tango

Quote: Cynder11111

Hey Tango I won't wright anymore if you keep that attitude UP!

I mean it!

Question: Do I care?

You will never become even CLOSE to a writer if you don't take advice.

isnt that what i just said

Okay Tango you asked for it I'm going to stop wrighting my story!

sorry everyone either people give me more good comments, NO ADVICE I WRIGHT ANYWAY I LIKE!, or say goodbye to SpyroXCynder!

I really mean it!

I can't help it if I'm 10!

Besides thats the way I was tought by my grade 4 teacher!

Quote: Cynder11111

Okay Tango you asked for it I'm going to stop wrighting my story!

sorry everyone either people give me more good comments, NO ADVICE I WRIGHT ANYWAY I LIKE!, or say goodbye to SpyroXCynder!

I really mean it!

I can't help it if I'm 10!

Besides thats the way I was tought by my grade 4 teacher!

k.
if people cant read it, then people whount injoy it.
Your chose.

well i'm thirteen and i could read it just fine and i really like it

Quote: goldengeye

well i'm thirteen and i could read it just fine and i really like it

"when"
"others"
"talk"
"you"
"do"
"this!"
she/he clearly dosnt do this. If they whanted it published, they whould need to know this. Fine, i dont care if they dont take the advise, but it whould make it esyer. Im used to reading storys that are vary well published.
NO, im not calling it a bad story ,i achally like it. But its hard to read and it theres a whoe lote of flaws. I dought your 4th grade teacher taought you to confuse people. Spelling, i dont mind, but still!!!.
i quit reading it after the third chapter since it got more confusing and i dont wish to put all my efforts into a mear short story, again, im not calling it bad.
If your 10, then arnt you suppost to be in 6th or 5th grade? Havent they taouth you something Better?

Quote: Cynder1

Quote: goldengeye

well i'm thirteen and i could read it just fine and i really like it

"when"
"others"
"talk"
"you"
"do"
"this!"
she/he clearly dosnt do this. If they whanted it published, they whould need to know this. Fine, i dont care if they dont take the advise, but it whould make it esyer. Im used to reading storys that are vary well published.
NO, im not calling it a bad story ,i achally like it. But its hard to read and it theres a whoe lote of flaws. I dought your 4th grade teacher taought you to confuse people. Spelling, i dont mind, but still!!!.
i quit reading it after the third chapter since it got more confusing and i dont wish to put all my efforts into a mear short story, again, im not calling it bad.
If your 10, then arnt you suppost to be in 6th or 5th grade? Havent they taouth you something Better?

i'm in 7th but still i do the same thing but i put the qoutes and periods and try to keep spelling and my written form has so many misspellings and i used comas or , those things and my writing is crappy trust me it is but still people understand

I like it.

Quote: goldengeye

Quote: Cynder1

Quote: goldengeye

well i'm thirteen and i could read it just fine and i really like it

"when"
"others"
"talk"
"you"
"do"
"this!"
she/he clearly dosnt do this. If they whanted it published, they whould need to know this. Fine, i dont care if they dont take the advise, but it whould make it esyer. Im used to reading storys that are vary well published.
NO, im not calling it a bad story ,i achally like it. But its hard to read and it theres a whoe lote of flaws. I dought your 4th grade teacher taought you to confuse people. Spelling, i dont mind, but still!!!.
i quit reading it after the third chapter since it got more confusing and i dont wish to put all my efforts into a mear short story, again, im not calling it bad.
If your 10, then arnt you suppost to be in 6th or 5th grade? Havent they taouth you something Better?

i'm in 7th but still i do the same thing but i put the qoutes and periods and try to keep spelling and my written form has so many misspellings and i used comas or , those things and my writing is crappy trust me it is but still people understand

*shakes head*
tut tut tut.
Fine.
Im leaving.

NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO SPYRO!!!!

Quote: goldengeye

well i'm thirteen and i could read it just fine and i really like it

No one will think your 13 if you type like that.
Not good a spelling? Use a spell check.
I'm 11 at the moment (Soon to be 12) If I gave two a incredibly mature person (Like Fishpaste) two pieces of writing, both exactly the same but one was written by me and the other by you, they would think I'm older.

Spell check: Use it.

Cynder11111: Well then you can kiss goodbye to your chances of ever becoming a writer.

Quote: Tango

Quote: goldengeye

well i'm thirteen and i could read it just fine and i really like it

No one will think your 13 if you type like that.
Not good a spelling? Use a spell check.
I'm 11 at the moment (Soon to be 12) If I gave two a incredibly mature person (Like Fishpaste) two pieces of writing, both exactly the same but one was written by me and the other by you, they would think I'm older.

Spell check: Use it.

Cynder11111: Well then you can kiss goodbye to your chances of ever becoming a writer.

My exact thought.

ok....... yeah the thing is i usally spell fine so but it's the fact i'm lazy

i dont care about spelling

I use Microsoft word while writing so I don't make any mistakes.

i dont have it so i just try my best

yeah i just write it out on the comment thing so any ways you can go back to edit. and i happend to do this a lot

i just leave it the way it is.
with all the grammer and spelling freks, you dont need it (btw i have a grammer and spelling frek in ma home>.<)

wow so a this might be a dumb question but ah do you want to friends

are you asking if i whould like to be friends?
ya

yup and is that a yes wait i think it is yay

it a mix

huh wat does that mean

ya
a mix between Yay and yesh :3 i juess

ohhhhh ok

lolz

Okay I'm sorta thinking of another chapter. Oh yeah if you don't like my story the don't read it! durr!

... Its a good story. This will be one that i will be looking forward to.

M3 L1k3 s70ry
Translation:
Me like story

Don´t complain on spelling. I´m not sure, but I dont think someone stands behind you and forces you to read it.

Once again, I like this story.

yup can't wait for more

Quote: Emberlore

M3 L1k3 s70ry
Translation:
Me like story

Don´t complain on spelling. I´m not sure, but I dont think someone stands behind you and forces you to read it.

Once again, I like this story.

Stands behind you... sounds scary.