darkSpyro

Saw a book idea thread, so why can't I make mine? So I'm writing a few short stories, they all have to do with animals I'll sum them up, enjoy!

Canned:
A hunter traps 100 deer, wild goats, and wild sheep, he holds them captive and later saws off their antlers or horns then kills them one by one, everyone he kills, he traps another. The animals want to find a way out, but they keep arguing on the way of getting out, or what animal is superior. One of them explains how arguing won't help, and that they'll only get out if they actually settle on an idea, they settle on all ramming at the gate at once, which succeeds, the remaining animals survive.

Wolf:
A dog with show lineage escapes accidently. She realizes that almost being a show dog means nothing, and she could live among the wild dogs. After hunting her first deer, she decides that she'll turn back from going home, and decides that being wild is better than wasting your life winning medals with no real value.

These are the ones I've written so far, your opinion on these stories judging by the short summaries?

They'd make great children's stories.

That's not an insult btw. If that's the kind of thing you're interested in, I say go for it.

Sounds interesting. I'd go for it, if I were you. What's to lose? I think both could be successful stories if you put your mind to it

kinda sterotypical imo

In Beverly Hills, California, wealthy heiress Vivian "Viv" Ashe leaves her richly pampered pet chihuahua, Chloe, with her irresponsible niece, Rachel, while she embarks on a business trip for ten days. Papi, the gardener Sam's pet Chihuahua of Mexican descent, has an unrequited crush on Chloe, by which she is disgusted. Rachel decides to go to Mexico with her friends and stay at a hotel by the beach. When Rachel leaves Chloe alone in the hotel room to go dancing at a club, Chloe goes looking for her. Chloe gets dog-napped as she tries to find Rachel and is sent to the dog fights in Mexico City. There, she meets a street-smart German Shepherd named Delgado. Rachel comes back to the hotel and is frantic when she finds Chloe missing.

Chloe is picked to fight in the pit against El Diablo, a fierce Argentinean-Bolivian Doberman Pinscher. Delgado helps her escape the dog fights, unleashing the other dogs from their cages and unlocking the ring to allow both Chloe and himself to flee. After several arguments, he then decides to return her to Beverly Hills safely.

Meanwhile, Rachel and Sam go to the Mexican police and offer rewards in an effort to find Chloe. El Diablo is sent by the dog fight ringleader, Vasquez, to capture Chloe and obtain the reward f: the border, but they are caught and are forced to jump out, eventually arriving in the barren deserts of Chihuahua, where Delgado explains that he was a former police dog; he was retired after he lost his sense of smell during a raid and a sneak attack from El Diablo.

Rachel and Sam are in Puerto Vallarta and find that Chloe was spotted in the state of Chihuahua. After tracking Chloe and Delgado from Mexico City, El Diablo arrives in Chihuahua and attempts to capture Chloe, but Papi saves her and ends getting captured in a cage inside an abandoned Aztec temple, but Delgado comes to rescue the two and is briefly defeated. Chloe then rescues Papi, but Delgado discovers that El Diablo had vanished. Rachel finds Chloe, and Vasquez get arrested by the police. Chloe returns safely to Beverly Hills without Vivian finding out what happened and accepts a romantic relationship with Papi, as well as Rachel with Sam. The characters' fates are later revealed:

Delgado returns to being a police dog in Mexico.
El Diablo is recaptured by Delgado and is adopted by a rich lady who "had a passion for fashion".
Chico and Manuel move to Beverly Hills and become rich.
Papi and Chloe have their first date.

Quote: StriderSwag

In Beverly Hills, California, wealthy heiress Vivian "Viv" Ashe leaves her richly pampered pet chihuahua, Chloe, with her irresponsible niece, Rachel, while she embarks on a business trip for ten days. Papi, the gardener Sam's pet Chihuahua of Mexican descent, has an unrequited crush on Chloe, by which she is disgusted. Rachel decides to go to Mexico with her friends and stay at a hotel by the beach. When Rachel leaves Chloe alone in the hotel room to go dancing at a club, Chloe goes looking for her. Chloe gets dog-napped as she tries to find Rachel and is sent to the dog fights in Mexico City. There, she meets a street-smart German Shepherd named Delgado. Rachel comes back to the hotel and is frantic when she finds Chloe missing.

Chloe is picked to fight in the pit against El Diablo, a fierce Argentinean-Bolivian Doberman Pinscher. Delgado helps her escape the dog fights, unleashing the other dogs from their cages and unlocking the ring to allow both Chloe and himself to flee. After several arguments, he then decides to return her to Beverly Hills safely.

Meanwhile, Rachel and Sam go to the Mexican police and offer rewards in an effort to find Chloe. El Diablo is sent by the dog fight ringleader, Vasquez, to capture Chloe and obtain the reward f: the border, but they are caught and are forced to jump out, eventually arriving in the barren deserts of Chihuahua, where Delgado explains that he was a former police dog; he was retired after he lost his sense of smell during a raid and a sneak attack from El Diablo.

Rachel and Sam are in Puerto Vallarta and find that Chloe was spotted in the state of Chihuahua. After tracking Chloe and Delgado from Mexico City, El Diablo arrives in Chihuahua and attempts to capture Chloe, but Papi saves her and ends getting captured in a cage inside an abandoned Aztec temple, but Delgado comes to rescue the two and is briefly defeated. Chloe then rescues Papi, but Delgado discovers that El Diablo had vanished. Rachel finds Chloe, and Vasquez get arrested by the police. Chloe returns safely to Beverly Hills without Vivian finding out what happened and accepts a romantic relationship with Papi, as well as Rachel with Sam. The characters' fates are later revealed:

Delgado returns to being a police dog in Mexico.
El Diablo is recaptured by Delgado and is adopted by a rich lady who "had a passion for fashion".
Chico and Manuel move to Beverly Hills and become rich.
Papi and Chloe have their first date.

10/10

Awful

Quote: Alydol

Saw a book idea thread, so why can't I make mine? So I'm writing a few short stories, they all have to do with animals I'll sum them up, enjoy!

Canned:
A hunter traps 100 deer, wild goats, and wild sheep, he holds them captive and later saws off their antlers or horns then kills them one by one, everyone he kills, he traps another. The animals want to find a way out, but they keep arguing on the way of getting out, or what animal is superior. One of them explains how arguing won't help, and that they'll only get out if they actually settle on an idea, they settle on all ramming at the gate at once, which succeeds, the remaining animals survive.

Wolf:
A dog with show lineage escapes accidently. She realizes that almost being a show dog means nothing, and she could live among the wild dogs. After hunting her first deer, she decides that she'll turn back from going home, and decides that being wild is better than wasting your life winning medals with no real value.

These are the ones I've written so far, your opinion on these stories judging by the short summaries?

Animal Farm anyone?