darkSpyro

PART1



PART2



PART3


Thanks if you watch these videos!

Cool!

yeah...they are cool!

Just the music...

Thanks. I try other music in next episode

Can I make some spelling and grammar suggestions?
1: Ten years ago...Two young dragons were trapped in Crystal..."Get close to me, now!"
2: They will begin again, in new danger.
3: This si their story.
4:They go to stop Malefor, but first they must team up.

Pt2:
1: "Malefor was...dead"/"Malefor...Died"
2: They find the Mountain of Malefor. They saw big, wonderful gates, which they broke.
3:"Come on, Malefor must be here" (no "to")
4:And Malefor is on the floor. He isn't alive.
5:"He's dead"
6:"This isn't true/right. Malefor was dead. We killed him, do you remember?
7: But then the earth started to rumble.
8:"This cave is caving in" Cynder flew out of the cave, but Spyro didn't move.
More corrections need to be made; I'll post them another time if you want.

Great job!

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Great job!

Reveal Spoiler

That Legend dragon gives me the creeps!

Oh really? I don't think he is THAT scary...

Quote: Spyro LUVA

Can I make some spelling and grammar suggestions?
1: Ten years ago...Two young dragons were trapped in Crystal..."Get close to me, now!"
2: They will begin again, in new danger.
3: This si their story.
4:They go to stop Malefor, but first they must team up.

Pt2:
1: "Malefor was...dead"/"Malefor...Died"
2: They find the Mountain of Malefor. They saw big, wonderful gates, which they broke.
3:"Come on, Malefor must be here" (no "to")
4:And Malefor is on the floor. He isn't alive.
5:"He's dead"
6:"This isn't true/right. Malefor was dead. We killed him, do you remember?
7: But then the earth started to rumble.
8:"This cave is caving in" Cynder flew out of the cave, but Spyro didn't move.
More corrections need to be made; I'll post them another time if you want.

Oh no ...
Well then I give you also useful advice:

1. Before we come to''correct''in other writings, it pays to take his life and the home country.
2. If you understand the language, but they are not as correct as, for example, spoken English, it should not interfere.
3. It is my opinion, a little witty writing: More corrections need to be made, I'll post them another time if you want.

Answers:
1. I am a young 12-year-old girl from Finland. (but I put my life to YouTube incorrectly by mistake, but I have my parents' permission)
2. I understand that the others on this subject are written by well understood the intention.
3. I do not need more proofreading, the dictionary has been invented.

And if you want me to come to you to correct the Finnish language skills, so just ask ... -.-

I'm impressed. (And i'm a pretty tough cridict...) Anyways, if only you could have moving pictures. Ik you're doing you're best and that would be impossible, but it would be cool if you had that!

Put this in fandom, unless you really wanna make it obvious that this isn't original and you're just retelling DotD.

Quote: Shrazer320

Put this in fandom, unless you really wanna make it obvious that this isn't original and you're just retelling DotD.

WHAT isn't original?!

Quote: ConvexitySpyro

Quote: Spyro LUVA

Can I make some spelling and grammar suggestions?
1: Ten years ago...Two young dragons were trapped in Crystal..."Get close to me, now!"
2: They will begin again, in new danger.
3: This si their story.
4:They go to stop Malefor, but first they must team up.

Pt2:
1: "Malefor was...dead"/"Malefor...Died"
2: They find the Mountain of Malefor. They saw big, wonderful gates, which they broke.
3:"Come on, Malefor must be here" (no "to")
4:And Malefor is on the floor. He isn't alive.
5:"He's dead"
6:"This isn't true/right. Malefor was dead. We killed him, do you remember?
7: But then the earth started to rumble.
8:"This cave is caving in" Cynder flew out of the cave, but Spyro didn't move.
More corrections need to be made; I'll post them another time if you want.

Oh no ...
Well then I give you also useful advice:

1. Before we come to''correct''in other writings, it pays to take his life and the home country.
2. If you understand the language, but they are not as correct as, for example, spoken English, it should not interfere.
3. It is my opinion, a little witty writing: More corrections need to be made, I'll post them another time if you want.

Answers:
1. I am a young 12-year-old girl from Finland. (but I put my life to YouTube incorrectly by mistake, but I have my parents' permission)
2. I understand that the others on this subject are written by well understood the intention.
3. I do not need more proofreading, the dictionary has been invented.

And if you want me to come to you to correct the Finnish language skills, so just ask ... -.-

Even if it can be understood, it is still quite annoying to read things that aren't written correctly... :/

Plus, I don't get why you mentioned the dictionary. O.o What has it got to do with someone correcting you?

^YES! Thank you, I agree TOTALLY!

Quote: ConvexitySpyro

Quote: Shrazer320

Put this in fandom, unless you really wanna make it obvious that this isn't original and you're just retelling DotD.

WHAT isn't original?! >:(

The majority of this; you're telling the story of DotD again AND what every fangirl/boy does. It doesn't help to add Dark Spyro and call him something else, either. And y'know, this is near impossible to read; not only is the text and size and color bad, but the grammar and spelling is too.

lol i like cynders eyes in part 3 lol


tis a fish ><> lol

COOOOOOOOOOOOOOL!!!

Wicked good job

Are going to make another one soon?

Quote: Spyro LUVA

Are going to make another one soon?

Yes, PART4 is coming out maybe on next week.

Quote: i love cynder

lol i like cynders eyes in part 3 lol


tis a fish ><> lol

I know, I must to did some big eyes, 'coz she is amazed

Spyro's big purple eyes,he's handsome horns,he's sparkling theet........