darkSpyro

I wanted to write something, because I was bored. And this will be my first story here.




Again, I was really frustrated. Grilla Drilla wanted to bash me. He was really annoyed to me. First he was my real best friend, but after that one weird night, he started to hate me.
I was going home when I saw a small apple tree. In fact, it wasn't an apple tree. It was Camo. (Yeah, I am little blind at night.) Camo was reading a book (I wonder what book that was...) Then Camo saw me. He looked a little dubious.

"Oh, hey, Rattle Shake", Camo muttered.
"Hai, Camo", I said. My voice sounded really annoying.
"Can you help me?", Camo asked. (ah <3)
"Maybe.", I answered.
"Give me some of your poison", Camo started to giggle.
"WHY?!", I shouted.

Camo wasn't so amazed anymore. He grabbed my hand and started to bite it. I slammed his face. Camo didn't care about it a lot.

"What the cheese are you doing?", I asked.
"I want to get your poison", Camo replied with a big smile.
"I don't have poison in my hand, idiot", I shouted when Camo tried to chew my hand again. Maybe he ate too much sugar. I grabbed Camo's long green tail.

"Tell me. What are you going to do with my poison?" I wanted to know.
"I want to be rich", Camo laughed.
"......."
"Yeah. If I sell your majestic posion, I will get more GOLD!", Camo continued.

How he thought that he can be rich if he bites my hand? Anyways, he was REALLY crazy. I wanted to leave him alone with his strange money problems. I went away from him.
I was in a big jungle. There were many big trees and beautiful places. It was like a dark paradise. Then I saw my friend, Grilla Drilla. (<3) He was sleeping on top of a cliff. I didn't want to wake him up, because he was so cute, (ah <3) Wait... what? Anyways, I still wanted to talk with him.

"WAKE UP!", I shouted with no reason.
"I am here", I heard a strange voice. It wasn't Grilla Drilla
"Who the cheese?", I asked. (Not again...)

Then Grilla Drilla woke up. "WHO IS TRYING TO DISTURB ME?!", Grilla Drilla raged. I had a problem. Two problems. I heard voices and Grilla Drilla wanted to bash me.

"You are an idiot", I heard that strange voice again. But Grilla Drilla didn't hear that voice.
"Who is an idiot?!", I asked.
"What?", Asked Grilla Drilla. He stared at me like a crazy monkey.
"No one", I lied.
"IDIOT IDIOT IDIOT", I heard those voices AGAIN.
"SHUT UP", I shouted.

Grilla Drilla thought that I am nuts. He hugged me. (The fu?)
"I like you", Grilla Drilla said.
"...." (I had nothing to say.)
"?", Grilla Drilla stared at me.
"........" (ah)
"I HATE YOU", Grilla Drilla started to rage.
He hit me so fast, that I fainted. I woke up in my house. Camo was in front of me.

"I MISS YOU ALOT!", Camo cried.
"Where is Grilla Drilla?", I was confused.
"He is KO'd", Camo smiled.
"Why I am here?", I continued.
"I wanted to save you!", Camo giggled.
"I don't get you", I said.

Camo jumped out of the window and ran away. What was that? I don't want to know anymore...

(This is just a start. :3 This will be more interesting later )

there is too muc dialouge..... Its confusing me

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there is too muc dialouge..... Its confusing me

Don't worry. You will understand the idea when I do more.

no, that's not it, I understand the plot
but

Quote:

"...."
"?"
"........" (ah)

you got what I mean

its confusing who's talking, got it?

Quote: NINJAsk11

no, that's not it, I understand the plot
but

Quote:

"...."
"?"
"........" (ah)

you got what I mean

its confusing who's talking, got it?

Ooh. Okay I will fix it

Thanks, now I understand!

That's cool! What do you think about it?

Its funny, but there's one thing I want to point out

Quote: original

I went away from he.
I was in the big jungle. There was many big trees and beautiful places

Quote: new

I went away from him.
I was in a big jungle. There where many big trees and beautiful places

check grammer....

It is not "where"
It is "were"
I fixed it x3

Mistake....

Where?

No... NVM....

Okay. I will continue, if I get readers.

You got one
At least!