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Bolt Hunter Gems: 6158
#1 Posted: 13:13:00 12/07/2011 | Topic Creator
This is pretty much a re-make of the other one, seeing as I had a new idea for it.

I finally got around to writing it! Yay. smilie

Prolouge
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The air was damp with the scent of water. She didn't care. Who cares if it rained on her? She certainly didn't, she had to get away as fast as she could in the cold, late Orange-Leaf weather. Her life was washing away from her, no-one cared about her anymore. But did the ever? She was an orphan after all, who cares about them? The grass was wet with water, brushing onto her glossy white scales. The stars shone in the drops like little suns shining at night. She walked through the long grasses of the forest floor, her legs freezing slowly.
She stopped to scent the air. Damper. Rain was coming, and she'll be caught in it. She couldn't see any good resting places in this dark forest, well, not in time. The rain will make her legs freeze in this cold night. It'll be no good, but she doesn't care. She needed to get as far away as possible for the night at least.
The first rain drop fell. Soon it got denser and soaked through her scales. She was starting to freeze, but it made her run faster, not caring where her legs took her. Her paws took her through puddles, freezing her toes and putting them through great pain. She kept running though, determined to find a resting place. Her life may be fading out, but it hasn't faded completely... yet.
She collapsed on the ground, face falling in a puddle. Her face stung of the cold. Her joints had frozen, every move hurt her. She lay in the puddle, getting more frozen every second. She had to get up, or risk dying in the cold. Frosting-Winds were close, but this felt like a true Frosting-Wind night. She pulled her head up from the puddle, neck stinging, but still keeping hold. It was hard holding her head up, almost collapsing every second. She painfully turned her head and looked around for a good resting place. Her eyes, felling like they were frosting over, spied a hollow in a great tree. She had to reach it, but climbing it would be the real challenge.
It was tough getting up, ripping herself from the puddle. She pulled out a leg in pain, but she ended up getting to the tree. Now she faced climbing it. She pulled up her front limbs, painfully extending her claws to grab holt of the bark. The searing pain struck he tendons like a lightning bolt. She growled in pain, but pulled her claws out and climbed up. The pain was unbearable, but she was able to make it up into the hollow. She was in luck because there was a layer of rotting leaves to keep her warm for the night, or most of it. She dug herself into the leaves, hoping to warm herself up.
Sleep eventually washed over her mind.
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you don't know me. i break things
I draw stuff.
Bolt Hunter Gems: 6158
#2 Posted: 07:59:40 25/07/2011 | Topic Creator
I'm doing a comic for this now too, want me to post that here too?
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PyroFox Green Sparx Gems: 297
#3 Posted: 22:06:00 31/07/2011
That would be cool if you posted the comic! and this story sounds sad yet super amazingly written im suprised no one else has commented smiliesmiliesmilie
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Angel220200 Emerald Sparx Gems: 4401
#4 Posted: 10:31:56 18/08/2011
Wow. Bolt, this is epic! You should continue! smilie
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daimondcynder21 Yellow Sparx Gems: 1218
#5 Posted: 07:50:32 11/10/2011
...That is awesome bolt, continue pleaz
i want to hear more!
Edited 1 time - Last edited at 07:55:21 11/10/2011 by daimondcynder21
Whitenoise24 Emerald Sparx Gems: 3079
#6 Posted: 18:17:38 07/12/2011
When is it going to be done? I can't wait to read it.


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Cynder134 Gold Sparx Gems: 2061
#7 Posted: 04:41:42 08/12/2011
This is great can't wait till the next post
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Why am I back
daimondcynder21 Yellow Sparx Gems: 1218
#8 Posted: 22:03:26 09/12/2011
bolt, are you still doing this?
Whitenoise24 Emerald Sparx Gems: 3079
#9 Posted: 05:27:23 10/12/2011
I hope she is.
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daimondcynder21 Yellow Sparx Gems: 1218
#10 Posted: 09:27:36 10/12/2011
she told me that she lost the vibe for the story, but that wa a while ago,
Whitenoise24 Emerald Sparx Gems: 3079
#11 Posted: 04:52:59 11/12/2011
NOOOOOOOOOO

smiliesmiliesmiliesmiliesmiliesmiliesmiliesmiliesmiliesmiliesmiliesmiliesmilie
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Whitenoise24 Emerald Sparx Gems: 3079
#12 Posted: 04:56:50 11/12/2011
Tell her that she should write it like the warrior books she's reading. Her story reminded me of the warrior books when I read her story.
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daimondcynder21 Yellow Sparx Gems: 1218
#13 Posted: 06:01:48 11/12/2011
same, she inspires me when I do my stories
She said another thing, but I wont spoil the suprise
Whitenoise24 Emerald Sparx Gems: 3079
#14 Posted: 05:28:02 12/12/2011
I like surprises!

smilie
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daimondcynder21 Yellow Sparx Gems: 1218
#15 Posted: 05:42:11 12/12/2011
thats good smilie
Whitenoise24 Emerald Sparx Gems: 3079
#16 Posted: 12:45:17 12/12/2011
When am I going to get it? Christmas? LOL
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daimondcynder21 Yellow Sparx Gems: 1218
#17 Posted: 04:40:40 13/12/2011
dunno smilie
Whitenoise24 Emerald Sparx Gems: 3079
#18 Posted: 19:10:12 13/12/2011
Awwwwwwww.

smilie
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daimondcynder21 Yellow Sparx Gems: 1218
#19 Posted: 08:38:51 15/12/2011
you wanna know, dont'cha?
Whitenoise24 Emerald Sparx Gems: 3079
#20 Posted: 19:18:26 15/12/2011
Most quite indeed.
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daimondcynder21 Yellow Sparx Gems: 1218
#21 Posted: 11:48:04 16/12/2011
can't tell though -^-
Whitenoise24 Emerald Sparx Gems: 3079
#22 Posted: 18:58:29 16/12/2011
You're enjoying this, aren't you?
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daimondcynder21 Yellow Sparx Gems: 1218
#23 Posted: 22:02:41 16/12/2011
no, i dont like keeping secrets from people, but i said i wouldn't tell
Bolt Hunter Gems: 6158
#24 Posted: 20:35:45 18/12/2011 | Topic Creator
Oh, sorry, I just realized people actually wanted to read this. smilie
I will write chapter 1 today. :3
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I draw stuff.
Whitenoise24 Emerald Sparx Gems: 3079
#25 Posted: 05:15:20 19/12/2011
Yay, thank you!

smiliesmiliesmiliesmiliesmiliesmiliesmiliesmiliesmiliesmiliesmiliesmiliesmiliesmiliesmiliesmiliesmiliesmiliesmiliesmiliesmiliesmiliesmiliesmiliesmiliesmiliesmiliesmiliesmiliesmiliesmiliesmiliesmiliesmiliesmiliesmiliesmiliesmiliesmilie
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#26 Posted: 05:33:17 19/12/2011 | Topic Creator
No problem. smilie

I've got some good ideas for it too. :3
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I draw stuff.
daimondcynder21 Yellow Sparx Gems: 1218
#27 Posted: 05:40:04 19/12/2011
Thats alot of smileys O.o
Bolt Hunter Gems: 6158
#28 Posted: 05:45:03 19/12/2011 | Topic Creator
...Yes.... smilie
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I draw stuff.
daimondcynder21 Yellow Sparx Gems: 1218
#29 Posted: 06:12:38 19/12/2011
lots...
Whitenoise24 Emerald Sparx Gems: 3079
#30 Posted: 06:13:13 19/12/2011
I was just really happy.

smilie
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#31 Posted: 06:13:59 19/12/2011 | Topic Creator
And when I write the next chapter you'll be more happy, yes?
Well, I'll start writing it now. :3

And I'll make a cover thing for it too. :3
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I draw stuff.
daimondcynder21 Yellow Sparx Gems: 1218
#32 Posted: 06:15:38 19/12/2011
wasn't judging smilie
Sounds awesome smilie
Whitenoise24 Emerald Sparx Gems: 3079
#33 Posted: 06:17:09 19/12/2011
Oh, and I see that you have been reading the Warriors. What book are you on?
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daimondcynder21 Yellow Sparx Gems: 1218
#34 Posted: 06:17:52 19/12/2011
Who to?
I'm reading Moonrise
Bolt Hunter Gems: 6158
#35 Posted: 06:18:41 19/12/2011 | Topic Creator
Well, I've finished Sunrise and I'm waiting to get The Fourth Apprentice.
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I draw stuff.
daimondcynder21 Yellow Sparx Gems: 1218
#36 Posted: 06:19:15 19/12/2011
ohh, sounds interesting
Whitenoise24 Emerald Sparx Gems: 3079
#37 Posted: 06:25:00 19/12/2011
Well crap. I'm still on the first series. I started 2 years ago and stopped on book 5 because I was busy with school and band. Then last week I found were I left off and now I'm half way through book 5.
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daimondcynder21 Yellow Sparx Gems: 1218
#38 Posted: 06:26:24 19/12/2011
I actually found moonrise in our small libary, bout the size of my bedroom, and I've only ever read part of the first book smilie
Bolt Hunter Gems: 6158
#39 Posted: 06:26:26 19/12/2011 | Topic Creator
Oh, that's A Dangerous Path isn't it? They are really good books. :3
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I draw stuff.
Whitenoise24 Emerald Sparx Gems: 3079
#40 Posted: 06:29:27 19/12/2011
Quote: daimondcynder21
I actually found moonrise in our small libary, bout the size of my bedroom, and I've only ever read part of the first book smilie


You haven't read all the books up to that one? You need too.
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#41 Posted: 06:31:18 19/12/2011
Nice new avatar Bolt.
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#42 Posted: 08:08:57 19/12/2011 | Topic Creator
Thank you. :3

And finally, guess what I've got?


Chapter One
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Dawns Zero awoke from her long slumber through the cold night. She could feel her scales as cold as the coldest snowflake. The leaves didn't warm her up that much. Well at least it was morning so it should be warmer than the past night. The white dragoness got up and get her body a big stretch. She could feel her muscles trembling from the stiffness they had been in last night. Zero stretched her neck out of her make-shift den and saw the cloud-dappled sun was already quite high in the sky.
I guess it'll warm me up on my way, she thought to herself, but she didn't know where at all she was going. Zero stood on the edge of the ledge and stretched her wings out wide, ready to fly off and into the air. Her wings were still from the cold eating away at them from the night, but she managed to leap off into the air and stay a float for a bit. As her wings started to give her pain, she slowly drifted towards the ground and landed with a stammer. Zero wasn't happy with herself today, she'd have to get used to this weather because Ice-Breath was coming and that would me much colder than this. She treaded through the long grasses of the forest, not much light was reaching her body.
Something caught her ear; a rustle. It was probably nothing she decided as she padded onwards. The forest was quite gloomy, she observed, nothing cold blooded- like herself- would be able to survive in here for long. Zero decided to take to the skies again with the hope of more sunlight warming her. It hurt her wings but she eventually got used to the pain seething through her muscles and they soon warmed up in the sun's rays. They didn't hurt her much anymore. Zero took a deep breath from the air, it still smelt damp from the night before but she could tell the rain clouds were heading in the opposite direction from her. That was good, the rain wouldn't chill Zero now and would slow her down by causing her to get stiff joints. Some strange... cloud passed over the sun. Actually, it didn't even look like a cloud, more like smoke. But it wasn't dense like that, it let the light pass through it and had some sort of an organic shape. How was that possible, unless it was some trick of the light. Maybe it was just a fine mist? Zero decided to ignore it as she flew onwards.
Suddenly Zero burst out in tears, she was remembering her time in her old, fake tribe. They didn't care about her so she ran away. Though what saddened her most was that she had left her life behind; she didn't know where to go or what to do. What other option was just to kill herself? No-one cared about her so what would it matter to any other soul out there if she was dead? Zero debated with herself about the matter, should she live or shouldn't she? She knew she'd never find anyone who'd actually like her, there was nothing about her to like. What kind of a dragon would like someone who was stubborn, quick to anger, disrespectful to others and a depressed psycho? No-one she knew, or could possibly imagine of. Zero was just not one of those dragons you could like she guessed.
She let out a long, weeping sigh as she soared across the warming atmosphere. Her soft tears drifted silently down onto the forest and collapsed in a small splash on the leaves and dripped onto the soil. Those tears would do nothing to help those plants grow. Zero was warm enough she concluded as she glided down into the trees. She would take it on foot now, after all her wings were starting to strain from gliding with cold muscles for so long. This time she didn't stammer as she landed on the ground, she was slightly proud of that. Zero could feel the grass and soil still went from the rain beneath her paws, but she didn't care- water couldn't kill you. Then she thought of drowning... yes, yes it could kill you. Meh. What does it matter? I know what I meant.
Her stomach started to grumble, she was getting hungry. Yes, she didn't eat anything at all yesterday so she thought that she should eat a bit at least. The white dragoness sniffed the air, searching for prey within the area. She couldn't find anything. Maybe her nose was full of mucus from her crying. Zero went over to a long stalk of grass and blew her nose on it. There, she could smell better now, but she'd better move because her blowing probably scared any prey that was near away. She stalked through the grass and scented for prey with her powerful sense smell. There, she finally found something in a near-by bush. It smelt like a canine, that would surely fill up her rumbling stomach. She got downwind of the dog and stalked the small animal until she was able to clearly see it. Then she sprung. As she was almost upon the canine, something hard but furry hit her head. It was another dragon head! Collapsing over, she rubbed her sore forehead and glanced at the creature that head-butted her. Then Zero heard it speak.
"Who in the name of the ancestors are you?!"


I could've made it longer but I was kinda rushing it. smilie
I hope you like it. :3

And if you guys haven't seen Zero, here is a few pictures of her. :3

An older picture of her, but showing her whole body.|A much newer picture of her, though not showing her whole body.|This is her new design though and what she will look like from now on, and in the story. Her colours have also changed slightly so when I get a new picture done of her new design in colour, I'll be sure to show you all. :3
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I draw stuff.
daimondcynder21 Yellow Sparx Gems: 1218
#43 Posted: 08:58:32 19/12/2011
nice chapter bolt!
Bolt Hunter Gems: 6158
#44 Posted: 09:03:38 19/12/2011 | Topic Creator
Thanx. smilie
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you don't know me. i break things
I draw stuff.
daimondcynder21 Yellow Sparx Gems: 1218
#45 Posted: 09:40:26 19/12/2011
your welcome
Bolt Hunter Gems: 6158
#46 Posted: 09:43:04 19/12/2011 | Topic Creator
Hehehe, I wonder what Whitenoise will do... smilie

I might have the next chapter up tomorrow, I dunno.
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you don't know me. i break things
I draw stuff.
Whitenoise24 Emerald Sparx Gems: 3079
#47 Posted: 19:30:47 19/12/2011
I will read it.
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Whitenoise24 Emerald Sparx Gems: 3079
#48 Posted: 21:18:21 19/12/2011
It was awesome. Keep up the the good work. The last picture looked the best. Can't wait to see it with color!
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Bolt Hunter Gems: 6158
#49 Posted: 21:55:32 19/12/2011 | Topic Creator
Thank you! I'm glad you liked it, and the pictures. :3
I will probably have it up the same time I did yesterday.
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you don't know me. i break things
I draw stuff.
Whitenoise24 Emerald Sparx Gems: 3079
#50 Posted: 22:43:36 19/12/2011
I can't wait!

smiliesmiliesmiliesmiliesmiliesmiliesmiliesmilie
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