darkSpyro

Hello everyone, welcome to my story topic. Everytime i finish a story, i will change the title to the name of the newer story. Its a way of starting more than one story without filling up The Fan-Fiction with to many topics. Enjoy

CHAPTER 1
First Frost

A Black figure crashed through the forest, a winged creature, like none other on earth. Animals fled as the Winged shadow charged past, leaving a foul strentch behind, a stentch so foul that even the flowers of sweet aroma would die. It was a dragon, a purple one too. It had Pure purple scales, and Pink feathered wings. 3 long, jagged claws on each paw. A toxic like stinger on the end of it's long, which had on orb floating between it's 2 stingers. 2 pink horns on each side of the head, and very long, yellow fangs which hanged out of it's jaws, which were slightly opened. 2 pink spikes under its chin, and a cluster of pink spikes on the back of it's jaw. 4 knife like pink spikes on the back of it's neck. It had Spikes on it's arms and legs too, 3 pink spikes on it's back legs and 2 on it's front legs. And it always seemed to stand on 2 legs. The dragon's eyes glowed red as it lumbered through the dark forest. A tiny speck of moonlight shone through a clearing and the dragon was revealed. It was dead scar, a hideous, agressive she-dragon who used to work for malefor until he was killed by Spyro and cynder. Ever since Malefor died, she had nothing to do but to kill. She was no ordinary dragon too, she was a vampire dragon, a cretaure which lives off blood. Dead scar looked up at the beam of moonlight coming through the clearing of the trees, before letting out a low hiss and carrying on. She then heard a shudder of thunder in the distance, and rain began to pour down fast. Vampire dragons hated rain, it dampened their scales and made them lose their bright colour glow. She looked ahead, seeing a small cave which led deeper into the ground. Dead scar quickly scrambled into the cave. The cave was wide, despite who tiny it looked from the outside. Dead scar tucked her wings in, because she was suck a big dragon, it was hard to squeeze into spaces like this. The Vampire dragon looked ahead, seeing a slight glow in the distance, she narrowed her eyes, and crawled deeper into the cave. The cave was dark, and she could barely see, the orb between her pinchers began glower, and she crawled on, soon reaching the source of the glow at the other end of the cave. Daed scar closed her eyes, waiting to feel the sun on her scales, but it was not the sun, dead end!
Dead scar then looked down, seeing a small, oval, glowing object. Dead scar toke a claw forwards and picked up the glowing oval. It was another dragon egg! She looked at the cave walls, around where she had found the egg was crystal, glowing crystals, all different shapes, sizes and colours. Dead scar was hungry, she was about to bite into the egg when she suddenly felt a close bond. She lowered the egg away from her head, and placed it back in the space she had found it in. The egg felt cold, it needed warmth, so dead scar gathered straw from the corner of the cave and created a straw nest, before picking up the egg and placing it in the straw nest. The egg was glowing white, but was a pure black egg with tiny white spots. Daed scar some how reconised this egg, she lay down and wrapped her tail around the egg, before lying down, and closing her red eyes, letting sleep take over.....

Thanks for reading!

Dead scar
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Pretty good, exept for the grammar.

Sorry, i type fast I make a lot of typo

There are two, right now!! lol, no problem reading it if you use your brain.

What brain?

lol, Cynder 9999, just lol.

Hehehehehe

awsome

So, does Dead Scar want to feel the sun on her scales, or not?

Because vampires buuuurn.

Chapter 2
Dusk and Dawn
A young black dragon with large scaley wings padded through the distance. The black dragon had a purple underbelly, and purple shading on its back, running from tip of its tail to its snout. The dragon had horns, but not the usal horns, more like moose antlers, but had a single horn on the end of it's snout. Its eyes were a glittering a deep, dark purple, which stood out in the dark scales. On the end of it's tail was a large cluster of spikes, and it's wing membrane was dark purple. It also had a purple pearl on it's chest, and it's claws were sharp, but not to long. The Black dragon was named dusk, a she-dragon which was only 12 years old. She stalked through the bushes, and came to a clearing. A white dragon, the same age as dusk, sat in the claring, munching on some apples which had fell from a nearby tree. The white dragon had a pearl on the end of it's tail, and it's horns were like dusk's, but slightly shorter, with a tiny horn on the end of it's snout too. This dragon had feathered wings instead of scaley wings, and slightly blunt claws, and had pale blue eyes. The White dragon was named dawn, Dusk's sister, a she-dragon. Dusk let out a playfull shriek and lept out on Dawn, Dawn saw dusk coming, and let out a surpirzed yowl, before turning to run. Dusk soon outran dawn
"You cant escape me!!" Dusk cried playfully, she ran on, leaping over a falling log, which dawn simply swerved past. Dusk lept up and landed on fours infront of Dawn, Dawn reared up and turned to run the other
"Dusk!! Your not playing fair!" Dawn cried, joking. Dusk lept up again, and flapped her flightless scaley wings, trying to atleast glide above dawn. Dawn ran faster, and Dusk missed in pouncing, and crashed to the ground, smashing head first into a tree
"Ow..." she muttered, Dusk got up, and shook her scales off. Dawn Laughed playfully and was about to throw herself on Dusk, when there was a deep voice
"Dusk, Dawn, its time to get back to hunting" A large black dragon stood in a clearing. The black dragon was, male, with red shading on his back from tip of his tail to his head, like Dusk. He also had scaley wings, and had 4 long horns on his head, with a single horn on the end of his snout. His eyes glinted emerald green, and his underbelly was also red. His scaley wings were wide and the membrane was red. On the end of his tail was 6 spikes, inbetween the 6 spikes on his tail was a large red crystal shard, which glinted in the sunlight. This dragon was Dusk and dawn's father, Night, whoses partner was day.
"Coming, dad!" Dawn smiled, padding up to night and nudging his bulky chest. Dusk clambered to her paws after slipping over from dizziness again, and ran after dawn.
Both these dragons had hatched from the same egg, an egg with black shell, but glowed white......

WOW! that story is really good! i think that in the future you should be an author!

You think so? Next chapter tommorow, if not tommorow, then monday. If not monday, then.....I dont know when to do it

that's really good!

Chapter 3
Foes

Dusk and Dawn had returned back to their den with Night. They had caught a fresh Elk, which had been hard to carry because of it's size. Dusk and Dawn sat in the cave, munching on the elk. Night sat at the back of the cave with a blue dragon. The blue dragon was called, a beautiful blue dragon with black patches all over her perfect Aqua scales. She had 2 normal dragon horns instead of antler, and 3 Horns on the end of her snout. On the end of her tail was a cluster of Black crystals. She had beautiful Golden Yellow eyes, and her wings were feathered. Night and day were sharing part of the elk Dusk and dawn had caught ealier. Outside the cave was a clearing, filled with dragons. Night, dusk, dawn and day were not a small family of dragons, but a big pack. Day and Night had asked their far-away realitives to join their pack. This gave them an adventage for living a safer life. The Cave and The clearing were settled on a high cliff, with a fast flowing river at the at the foot of the cliff. Prey for them was good, and the trees in the surounding area grew healthy purple fruits which the herbivore dragons in the pack ate. Day and night were alpha of this pack, this pack was called the Frozen Valley clan, that was the name of the cliff. There were rankings in this pack too, Fighter, hunter, Hatchling, Hatchling Sitter dragon, Dragons in training and Alpha. Dusk and Dawn were still Dragons in training. There were smaller hunters den,caves which led into the deep ground, like burrows, but made of stoone to keep out the mud. There was a fighters den, an Hatchling sitters den where they would care for the hatchlings and look after eggs, and then the Alpha den, where only The pack eladers and their sons/daughters were stay. Life seemed good in this pack, the only problem was the rival pack. It always raided their clan, trying to take their territory and all the good food. The rival pack was called Claw forest clan. They were settled in a dense forest where the fog was so thick, that it was so hard to catch Prey. And the sun never shined on the trees, so no fruit grew. The Claw forest clan were starving, with no food. They were being forced to live on Scraps, bones and dead fruit. Dusk had finished her part of the meal, she got up, and let out a loud yawn. Dawn continued eating. Dusk stepped outside into the sun light, The dragons in her pack were all together. Some sat in groups and told each other tales of hunts and mysterys in the valley. Others shared food together. Dusk smiled to herself as the sun shined on her dark scales. She then looked over the other side of the cliff, to see the claw forest. It was dark, and the clouds were covering the area from sunlight. Dusk turned, and heard Day and night speaking
"Do you think they are going to raid soon?" asked Day
"They will, they are leaving scent markers in our territory" Night expalianed "Looks like they are trying to take over our territory without even kicking us out" He went on
"Are our Fighters ready for another raid?" Day asked again
"No, they are too weak, they cant keep fighting off raids like this" Night replied. Dusk gasped, and turned to look at the warrior dragons sat under the shelter of a small cave. They were covered in scars and bite marks, and looking weak.
Dusk suddenly caught a scent. It was sour smelling scent, the stentch of scraps and bones. Dusk suddenly reconised the scent

Claw Forest dragons were coming to raid!

Nice.

one word

awesome!

More tommorow

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Chapter 4
Raid and Killers

Dusk peerched on a large boulder just outside the Frozen valley Territory. She looked around, she had caught Claw forest clan scent, but there was no sign of them. She looked around, the valley was quiet, too quiet. Her tail twitched has she heard some rustling from a nearby berry bush, and lept off the rock to investigate. She was approuching the bush, when there was suddenly a fury of claws, and she was scent flying abck and smashdd into a tree. She looked ahead, a huge bulky, but thin dragon stood over her, nostrils flaring. It was the Claw forest clan leader, Darkfire. Dusk growled, she ahd to escape. She was no match for this dragon. Dark fire was a huge dragon, with pure night blakc scales, red stripes and red feathered wings. He had horns as long as swords, and his teeth were as sharp as knives. He had a large boulder on the end of his tail, and the horn on his nose was broken and blunt. Dusk scrambled to her paws, and turned to run, when 2 green dragons lept out the bushes to Darkfire's side. There was no escape now. Dusk's claws unshealthed, and she was ready to battle. There was suddenly a shriek, the 3 claw forest clan dragons turned, Dawn, Night and day raced out of the bushes, at them.
"You've really done it this time kid, i would have had pleasure in killing you and scorching your wings for lunch!" Darkfire hissed, he turned and snarled at Day, dawn and night
"Get out of here, Darkfire, this is not your territory" Snarled night
"Oh, but it will be soon" Hissed darkfire, she turned and fled into the bushes with the 2, scrawny green dragons. Day ran to Dusk
"Are you alright?" she asked
"Im fine, mum" Dusk replied
"What were you doing way out here?" Asked night
"I caught Claw Forest dragons scent in our territory and decided to go see what was happening" Dusk explained
"We only saw you rush off into the bushes and wondered where you were going, its lucky we got here fast too. Darkfire would have made Food out of you if we had not had seen you" Dawn said
"We better get back, before anymore Claw forest dragons attack" Dusk said, the 4 dragons turned and padded back towards Frozen valley territory. Then soon reached the camp, and all gasped in shock! There were big scrabbles going on, Claw forest dragons versus Frozen valley pack dragons. The Claw forest dragons had attacked while Day and night had gone to help dusk!......

at the start you included Dead Scar. Where is she now?

Oh, she appears later..

Chapter 5
Strange Presence
Dusk batted off a claw forest dragon with her front claws, scaring it's eye and blasting it with a dusk beam, which sent it rolling abckwards into a tree, then fleeing, hssing in pain. Dusk turned, to see another claw forest dragon charge at her, she whipped it away with her tail. Dusk turned and half expected a claw forest dragon to charge at her, but nothing ran at her. She turned and saw night, who was surounded and fighting off the claw forest dragons. Night hissed, and blasted Moon fire at the dragons, they hissed and lept backwards. Night slowly backed off, leapingfuther back as the dragons swipped at him, spitting and hissing. Dusk saw her chance, she flew up, above night and the claw forest dragons, then shot a black dusk ball down at the claw forest dragons. The dusk ball hit the ground infront of them and exploded, Night quickly lept out the way, while some of the claw forest dragons fled, flying off back towards their territory. Night swipped 2 remaining Claw forest dragons, and knocked them off the the edge of the cliff their territory was built on, the 2 dragons unfolded their wings and flew back towards their territory before they could hit the cold water at the bottom of the vally
"Claw forest dragons!! Retreat!" That was Darkfire who was flying over. The rest of the claw forest dragons turned to face darkfire then flew up, flying off towards their territory. Darkfire gave one final glance back at Dusk and night, and flared his nostrils, before flying off. The dragons frozen valley charged and roared in victory
"Dusk!!" Cried Day "Are you okay?" she asked running to dusk and dragon-hugging her.
"Im fine" Dusk replied
"That was rather good fighting, dusk, you got me out of that one" Night said, padding over to Dusk "You will grow up to be a fine warrior" he added
"Thanks dad" Dusk smiled
"What if we had a brother? He would be a great fighter!" Dawn cried. Day and night glanced at each other, both looking worried
"Its time they knew" Night muttered to day
"Your right, we can hide it from them any longer" Replied day
"Uh, Dawn, dusk, we need to talk to you in our den" Night rasped, Dusk and dawn looked at each other, then followed Day and night into the den..

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wat do they want to talk about

This story is just way too slow and boring to grip anybody in deeply. The storyline is linear and I can see right now it isn't going to connect back to itself at all, and you describe the characters too much. There are also many grammar and wording mistakes.
Same situation as your art as well, if you aren't original with it then nobody will publish this.

And please make some new characters. We're all sick of seeing these cliched dragons and wolves.

I tried as hard as I could to be nice. If you don't like this post, you'll have to deal with it.

Quote: GamingMaster_76

This story is just way too slow and boring to grip anybody in deeply. The storyline is linear and I can see right now it isn't going to connect back to itself at all, and you describe the characters too much. There are also many grammar and wording mistakes.
Same situation as your art as well, if you aren't original with it then nobody will publish this.

And please make some new characters. We're all sick of seeing these cliched dragons and wolves.

I tried as hard as I could to be nice. If you don't like this post, you'll have to deal with it.

^THIS.

Quote: Thunderdragon14

Quote: GamingMaster_76

This story is just way too slow and boring to grip anybody in deeply. The storyline is linear and I can see right now it isn't going to connect back to itself at all, and you describe the characters too much. There are also many grammar and wording mistakes.
Same situation as your art as well, if you aren't original with it then nobody will publish this.

And please make some new characters. We're all sick of seeing these cliched dragons and wolves.

I tried as hard as I could to be nice. If you don't like this post, you'll have to deal with it.

^THIS.

This again