darkSpyro

You need to work on your spelling a bit, try an online spell checker if you havn't got word. Intresting storyline, although I'm not sure about Keria...one mistake and she might topple over to Mary-sueness. I'm glad you use grammer right though.
"Hi" said me
"Hi" said someone else
Instead of "hi" said me "hi" said someone else. I like the story so far and I think I'll continue to read. (Your privileged, I hardly ever read stories on this site because most of them are rubbish XD)

EDIT: Omg...I spelt spelling wrong...

Hm, don't flatter yourself too much, Tango... and, I do not mind the:
"hi" I said. "Hi" said some other person. But some people do prefer the:
"hi" said I.
"Hi" another person said. But it is up to her.

Quote: Cynder 19000

Quote: MinM20

"U said every1 had a choice!
But Keira was never given a choice!"~ Spyro, TEN.

(Changed to acomodete story!)
Why have some1 who is good turn evil!?

Because in realitity she isnt.....also get the clue! PURPLE DRAGON! I will give you another:Remember the first chapter, with the male dragon.... I said so many times, will ANYONE get my for-shadowing?! It will make sence through out the story...i hope.

To everyone else: Thanks! I will wite a chapter soon.

Then if she isn't good, why is she being good????

Because she THINKS she is good!

Quote: Tango

You need to work on your spelling a bit, try an online spell checker if you havn't got word. Intresting storyline, although I'm not sure about Keria...one mistake and she might topple over to Mary-sueness. I'm glad you use grammer right though.
"Hi" said me
"Hi" said someone else
Instead of "hi" said me "hi" said someone else. I like the story so far and I think I'll continue to read. (Your privileged, I hardly ever read stories on this site because most of them are rubbish )

EDIT: Omg...I spelt spelling wrong...

I know i have spelling mistakes, and im sorry about that. No i dont have online spell checker or word, i do have a dictionary beside me though.

Don't worry about the Mary-sue thing, there might be little more of that(im sorry for that, but its part of the story line, it's what going to make the end really uh...could i say heart breaking at the end. Or maybe, sad....never mind), but soon (well as soon as i can, for the story line), she wont be so mary-sueish. But if it doesn't happen soon unuff please continue to read, because she WILL get out of that i promise.

I forgot to say: Thanks It's good to know im privliged and do you really think this is good? Anyways, i'll tell you now im doing this for my teacher,(Weird i now, but he reads my storys i put on here. Im also doing this to improve on writeing tecniqes ect.) but he says i have a great and imagitve mind, that will go far in writing. (witch i think he means i could be a auther, or something i don't know)

Anyways, it's good to know that i have gotten more readers To have new readers to (one) of my storys, it means im getting better So thanks to any new readers

P.s: I probally have ALOT of spelling mistakes in the message above

Quote: MinM20

Quote: Cynder 19000

Quote: MinM20

"U said every1 had a choice!
But Keira was never given a choice!"~ Spyro, TEN.

(Changed to acomodete story!)
Why have some1 who is good turn evil!?

Because in realitity she isnt.....also get the clue! PURPLE DRAGON! I will give you another:Remember the first chapter, with the male dragon.... I said so many times, will ANYONE get my for-shadowing?! It will make sence through out the story...i hope.

To everyone else: Thanks! I will wite a chapter soon.

Then if she isn't good, why is she being good????

GET THE CLUE PUPLE DRAGON! YOU CAN ONLY UNDERSTAND THROUGH OUT THE STORY! OR IF YOU SEE MY FOR-SADOWING! Sorry for yelling, but did you read the chapter that read: You are going to slowly turn insane because you are fighting your destiny.? I have to say If you dont see my for-shadowing it will be hard to get my story untill every thing explans itself. It will be deep into the story though, but have you ever heard of when you think your good, but from all th loneyness, and from THE PURPLE DRAGON you mind start reavilling your true self. Do you get now?

Chapter6

Keira and Cynder followd behind. When they were at least half way there they finnally started to talk.
"So, I was wondering whats your element?" Cynder asked.
"Element? What on earth is a element?" Keira, asked in great confusen.
"It's kinda like a special ability that shoot out of you mouth. I have fire, earth, electricity, and ice. Cynder has poison, wind, sadow, and fear." Spyro explained.
"I wonder why your parents havn't tought you or even tell you about elements, all dragons have them..." Cynder was cut off by Keira.
"Do all dragons have four?" Keira asked.
"No, I do because im a purple dragon" Spyro explained, Keira was about to say something but Cynder interupted,
"And i have four because, i was exsposed to the dark side" Cynder explained. Keira sundenly blacked out, then plunged down to the ground.
"WE HAVE TO GET HER!" Spyro and Cynder yelled, diving down to her, but was too late she hit the ground long befor they got to her. She landed a patch ard thick ice.

OOOH!! is her element ice then!? and OUCH!! that HAD to hurt! GOOD chapter!

Maybe?

*shrugs*

*shrugs*

-laughs at title because of somethig xD- I might get to reading this later.

okay...

Great story so far, but I'm going to shut up from now on!

Flatter myself? How dare you! I don't flatter my brilient, amazing, awsome, creative, imaganitive, inspiring, great self! XD Lol. (Joke)
I havn't seen many stories this good for a while on DS.
Yes I do think it's good, the story is uniqe, the charactors are intresting and I think it's going to get better the more you write.

MinM20, you dont have to shut up, but just dont question my metheds, deal? You will undersatnd whats going on through out the story, when i type i like to have the readers confused and asking questions(but not, about the plot of the story).

Quote: Wild

-laughs at title because of somethig xD- I might get to reading this later.

Odd....

Chapter7

"The first sign of the ansesters, blood kicking in. How i've been waiting for this. It is now time to unleash the world to a living hell!" A deep male voice said, then his figure apeered. Keira was terrified of she saw, her dad stood over her, his eyes were deep into hers. Keira walked back words tail in between her legs, she was breathless, his stare made it her scarcly breath. His stare saw the future, the fire, all the death, the bodys.
"I...I..." She couldn't finish she was balling.
"YOU ARE THE RUBY DRAGON!" He yelled, at Keira. Then for a second she felt adrenallin and shot ice at her dad. They all hit him, and they made deep wounds.
"WHY MUST YOU TORCHER ME!? WHY DID YOU ABANDED ME AS A BABY!?" Keira yelled, she didn't feel right but she liked it, her eye's glowed it coud blind anyone for as far as thee eye can see. Then the stoped and she felt normal again, her dad smiled.
"Alass! Your growing into the dragon you are destined to! Soon you will be your true self!" Her dad yelled, then faded away.
"Keira! That was a hard hit! Are you ok!" Cynder yelled gliding down to her side, Spyro followd in behind. When Keira lifted her head, she blasted ice.
"Whoa! That some powerfull ice!" Spyro said, amazed. It was almost as strong as his. "Are you sure you were never tought your element?"
"I..I don't know" Keira said, standing up.
"That sure is strong! But how's your head? You got two hard hits in to days." Cynder said, happy yet concernd.
"It's fine" Keira said, rubbing her head. "I think we should take flight again, i'll be fine to fly." I hope.

Quote: Tango

Flatter myself? How dare you! I don't flatter my brilient, amazing, awsome, creative, imaganitive, inspiring, great self! Lol. (Joke)
I havn't seen many stories this good for a while on DS.
Yes I do think it's good, the story is uniqe, the charactors are intresting and I think it's going to get better the more you write.

Thank you, it really means alot.

Well, anyway, Tango, i am glad you like the story. and Cynder 19000, good chapter, I liked it!

Awsome!

Thanks everyone! i might write another one today.

Ooh yay! *waits*

Night Owl, i eneterd Keira to the best fandragon contest, and if ANY of you want to know a little more about her, you can go to the contest page.

Ok. *goes*

Hehehe! I gtg soon, so there might be another chapter tonight....maybe...

Ok. When will you judge the Xna art contest?

Quote: Cynder 19000

MinM20, you dont have to shut up, but just dont question my metheds, deal? You will undersatnd whats going on through out the story, when i type i like to have the readers confused and asking questions(but not, about the plot of the story).

Quote: Wild

-laughs at title because of somethig xD- I might get to reading this later.

Odd....

Okey dokey!

Quote: Night Owl

Ok. When will you judge the Xna art contest?

Tomorrow.

Chapter8

"Why don't we just walk it's not to far away" Cynder said, giving Spyro a look.
"Uhh....Ya, we don't want another hit to the head, next time it might kill you." Spyro said, deserving a look of gratitude from Cynder.
"No. I don't want you two to slow dow...." Keira was cut off by Spyro.
"But the Warfang is right over thare" Spyro said pointing. It was only a kilometer away.
"Ok" Keira said. They walked for half an hour when they reached the temple, but Keira saw something that spoked her. There was a painting on the wall of Ignitus.
"Who's that?" Keira asked.
"Thats Ignitus...he...he sacrificed himself for me and Cynder." Spyro said, close to tears, and his liped quizerd. You could also hear in his voice he was about to cry.
"Whats rong with Spyro?" Keira whisperd to Cynder.
"Ignitus was his father figure in his life. Alot happend between them, so when he....well...died, Spyro was crushed." Cynder said, full of pity for Spyro.
"Can...can i have a moment to myself?" Spyro asked, a tear ran down his cheak.
"Yes." Cynder said, starting to walk away. Takeing the hint, Keira followd, I knew i saw him befor, but he called himself the chronical. Whats going on? But if he did live...could the dreams been right?

Awsome. I got to go now. Bye.

Thanks Ok bye!

keira's eeevil/good lol omg what if she tries to kill spyro? how will cynder react to that? I GOTTA KNOW I GOTTA KNOW I GOTTA KNOOOOOOOOOW!!!!!!!!!!!! sorry force of habit.

Well keep on reading

Good, chapter. Also ravenouscynder, WE ALL DO THAT AROUND HERE!!

i dont caaaaaaareeeeee ITS MY HABIIIIIITTTT

I WANNANN\ANANANANANA KNOOOOOOWWWWWW (sorry i cant help itttttttttt) (oops there i go again) *eats her lemony sweet AKA. her ''medication'' oh wait citrus sets me off damnit i took the rong meds!!! *goes crazy*
i have ADHD a hyperactive disorder
now back to topic
i like the story

Thank you! there MIGHT be another one tonight.

Yay! *waits*

There MIGHT be one. So don't keep your hopes to high....

I will not, and AAAAAAAAAAA! DRAGON ON A RAMPAGE!! AAAAA!!

Ok. I know what its like, people pushing you to do a chapter when you don't feel like it. D:

I feel like it, but im tired i just sate infront of a fire for 5 hours and im sleepy.

Chapter8

They walked around the temple. Cynder was showing Keira around, when a blue dragon walked past them.
"Whos the new comer?" Cyril asked Cynder.
"This is Keira me and Spyro found her out in the woods knocked out by a branch, and her parents wont be home for a week, so we invited her toto stay with us . Keira this is the ice gairdean Cyril, since you have the element ice he will be able to teach you how to master the ability." Cynder said.
"Oh, your a ice dragon. I will be able to teach you all you need to know about this amazing element. I will be able to each you to great hights...not as good as me of course." Cyril said, with great pride.
"Uh...ok." Keira said, unsure what to say. Spyro came in his face wet from tears he stoped crying but he still ahd a little sinffle.
"Spyro, we need to get a chamber for the new draogn. Please show her the emtey one down the hall. I expect it will be clean." Cyril orderd, but over looked that he just stoped crying.
"No, no i can do it myself i do it all the time at home, or we can all clean it up." Keira said. Cyril thought for a second.
"Yes, i will allow that. Keira i will meet you in the traind grounds tomorrow." Cyril said then walked off.
"So, can i see my chamber?" Keira asked.
"I'll meet you thare, it just the last chamber at the end of the hall. Me and Spyro will meet you thare. " Cynder said,
then Keira ran to her chamber. When she was out of hearing rang Cyndaer started to talk.
"Are you ok?" Cynder asked.
"Ya, i'm just a bit tired." Spyro said, he was about to walk off but Cynder kissed him on the cheak then, they walked together to Keira's chamber. Spyro went in his on the way to take a nap.
"So how do you like it?" Cynder asked.
" I love it!" Keira shreiked. "It's alot better then my cave."
"I have a idea! Since it's your first day well have a sleep over in here." Cynder shreiked.
"Yes! I would love that!" Keira replied, I hope i don't have another dream. I don't want to wake them up in the middle of the night. By the time it was bed, Keira met every one...even Sparx that charater.
"So you hit your head twice! Your no better then this purple putz of a brother i have." Sparx joked. Spyro looked at him. "Ok your better, your not a purple putz that i had to live with for the loungest time."
"Hey don't you be talking. You think it's easy living with a yellow, glowing, thing that follows me around." Spyro joked. Sparx crossed his arms.
"Time we al get some sleep, you have trianing to do young dragon." Cyril said, then Spyro, Cynder, Sparx, and Keira went in her chamber for the night. Then Keira fell asleep...._________________________________________________________ Phew! That was a LONG one! The next few chapter will be a bit boreing i'll try to get more action in as soon as i can.

OH NO!!! DO NOT GO TO SLEEP!!I think I see fore-shadowing....but whatever nice chapter!

Awsome!

Nice chapter.

Thanks everyone! There'll be one today.

Yay! (moar letters)

I'll start typing soon.

Chapter9

"Come out Ignitus! Why did you say you were the chronical?! Were you lying about other things!?" Keira yelled into the balck.
"Young dragon, yes i'm Ignitus but when i pasted away, i turned into the chronical. But young draogn, i do not lie. I can see the future, you are going to kill all. You are the rby dragon. I know you don't want to, but it's the ancestors blood, thats in you. " The chroical said. Keira thought for a second, ancestors blood. Dad said that.
"I...NO I DONT BELVE YOU!" Keira yelled then thought, do I. Then he fadded away and her dad came.
"It is time to master the ability ice, you'll never make it though you are PETHEDIC! THINKING YOU CAN FIGHT YOUR DESTINY! YOU HAVE NO CONTROLL!" Her dad yelled at her, trying to get Keira to her dark side.
"No....no....NO!" Keira yelled, at her dad, he smiled he has sucsefully made the ancestors blood kick in. Keira attacked him, with ice shards they all hit him once again, but this time the ice shards were sharper and made even deeper wounds, the blood gushed out. He smerked. Keira felt great, powerfull......herself.
"THE ANCESTORS BLOOD IS GETTING STRONGER BY THE MINUTE!" Her dad yelled. "YOU WILL BECOME A TRUE DRAGON" Keira snapped out of it.
"No! I'm not who you think i'am!" Keira yelled.
"You think so?" Her dad asked, then faded away. A bad feeling came over her. What if he was right?

"Time for training." Cyril said, wakeing Keira up.
"Wha- Ware is every one?" Keira asked.
"They've been awake for a while, now come come, time for your training." Cyril said, Keira got up and followed him into the training grounds.

WOW!
WOOOOW!!!
WOOOOOOW!!!!!