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#201 Posted: 20:00:33 30/12/2009
MORE CHAPS OR I WIIIIILLLLLLLL KELLLL HER....unless you dont have much imagination today like i did when i was writing a chap in one of my fan fics ^.=.^ lol
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#202 Posted: 20:19:12 30/12/2009 | Topic Creator
Chapter19
Keira walked over to the book, the front cover read 'Destinys' witch made her wonder if she could find hers. She was about to open it but beof she could even touch it it opend to the page, it wanted Keira to read. There was a pichture of her with her eye bright, fire and dragons running for there lives. Keira's heart punded, she was scared to read what was on the page but she had to now. It read:The ruby dragon is one of the most powerfull dragons in the world. There has been many through out the years but are forgotten about because they come every 1oo generations, they are so powerfull because of the link they share with nature. It is time for the ruby dragon to come again and destroy. It is destined to kill al in sight when gotten all ability's. The ruby dragon apon us today is Keira, she will first kill Terrador, then.... There was a blank spot but after that it kept going, The ruby dragon has the elements of ice, earth, wind, shadow, and blind eye. These are all elements that have to do with nature, and are most important to the dragons attacks. Keora was shocked she couldn't take her eyes, of no matter how hard she tried. She read it over and over again, then a dragon walked in to her chamber. "Ware've you been? I was out thare for fifeteen minutes." Cody asked, kinda worried about Keira, she looked at him then the book again she didnt' know if she should tell him or not. "Cody, can iu talk to you in privet?" Keira asked in a worried tone, Cody looked at her wondering what was happening.
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#203 Posted: 20:20:54 30/12/2009
Awsome. Poor Terrador tho.
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#204 Posted: 20:22:07 30/12/2009 | Topic Creator
Tanks.
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#205 Posted: 20:22:36 30/12/2009
No prob.
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#206 Posted: 20:57:01 30/12/2009
OMG!!! PAGE 5!! and good chap.
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#207 Posted: 21:26:50 30/12/2009 | Topic Creator
Thanks!
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#208 Posted: 03:32:22 31/12/2009
This is getting really interesting.
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#209 Posted: 12:54:51 31/12/2009 | Topic Creator
Thanks ppl!
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#210 Posted: 17:07:57 31/12/2009 | Topic Creator
Chapter20
"What do you want to talk about?" Cody asked. "Well you now how i have to elements, uh....I'm a ruby dragon that is..." Keira swallowd, back her wirds, then kept going on. "I'm...I'm destined to kill all, and i didn't think it was true at first but.....but it's in this book." Keira said, looking at Cody, with pure dread. Cody looked at her in disbelife. "I have to see this." Cody said, walking to Keira's side. "Lets look up every one elses destiny, it will tell us if every one is destined to be killed by you." Keira noded and looked through the pages, then she saw Spyro and Cynder's page. She read out loud. "This is a mignifesent creature, the purple dragon. The one amung us today is Spyro, he is destined to save the word from decrtion and evil, such as Malefor. But he can not save the world from evil, with the great evil he is faced up with next.....The ruby dragon." Keira said, her eye widen terrified, then she read Cynder's. "This is a comen balck draogn. This one in partivclure, Cynder, was destined to be Malefors puppet untill Spyro saved her, and became a girl freind to Spyro. She too, is destined to be killed by the ruby dragon." Keira said, her eye widen even more. Cody looked at hte pages reading it over, and over. He was shoked yet he didn't belive it. "Lets look at mine." Cody suggested. Keira relucklently changed the page to Cody's. She read out loud. "This is a very comen ice dragon, named Cody. He is destined to be a boy freind to Keira, who is a ruby dragon, that kills him in the long run." Keira said, a tear ran down her cheak. "I don't belive this, it's happening. I know it's not, a book can't tell the future. Your destiny changes from the actoins you make. Keira you may be the ruby dragon, but you are not destined to kill." Cody said, more trying to convince himself then Keira. "But I already, almost killed Terrador! I.." Keira was cut off by Cody. "As you said almost killed him, he's still alive. Let me see his coditon." Cody said, Keira stared at him but thought he was right, so took him to the chambet Terraodr was in.
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#211 Posted: 17:09:47 31/12/2009
Awsome!
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#212 Posted: 17:15:57 31/12/2009 | Topic Creator
Thanks!
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#213 Posted: 17:16:19 31/12/2009
No prob.
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#214 Posted: 22:14:43 31/12/2009 | Topic Creator
Chapter21
They walked to the chamber, nobody was thare anymore, but Keira was still scard to bump into any one. Cody face changed from, worried to shoked he couldn't move, Terrador was in terrible shape he never thought it was that bad. He looked at Keira, and back at Terrador, Keira couldn't bare to look at at Terrador. "Yo'...you did this?!" Cody asked his eye wide. Keira noded and a tear went down her cheak. "It still doesn't mean anything, he just didn't move." "What ever you say, but the books not the only thing. I've had dreams....I repressed most of my memory's....untill the dreams, the chronical, My mom, and dad sre in them, and they all tell me im destined to kill." Keira said, then looked at the ground, Cody coludn't see her face but saw the tear hit the ground. "How about i sllep here tonight, if it will make you more comforble." Cody said, Keira looked up at him face wet and had a small smile. "Sure. And thanks." Keira said, rubbing her haed agenst Cody's sholder, he smiled.
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#215 Posted: 22:53:05 31/12/2009
awwwwwww... that is sad and cute. i like it. The chapter was very good.
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#216 Posted: 23:56:39 31/12/2009
Hoh, okay..
So, She just suddenly finds a book in her personal chambers that has everybody's destinies written on it's pages?.. (lulwut?) Plus, you fail at saying "The ruby dragon apon us today is..", when the book, no doupt, contains prophesies.. You're my friend, and I wouldn't like to give you any bad comments. I really wouldn't.. But this, is just.. *sigh* Look, I don't know how old you are, so I can't tell if you are already doing your best, or if you just made a simple mistake by not thinking about that one too much.. So, I'm just going to sit back and see where this leads.. Please, continue.. |
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#217 Posted: 00:20:58 01/01/2010 | Topic Creator
Well, im glad you wont give a bad comment becuase im your freind and thank you for that.
I wont tell my age but i am a few years yonger then you and, thats all i'll say. And ya, the " The ruby dragon apon us today is.." I saw the mistake after I re-read the chapter. But i was to lazy to change it so im leaving it like that. I will type up another chapter tomorrow. EDIT:When are you going to type a chapter in your story? Also, what i find funny is, that in your story topic, you didn't know what for-shadowing is and im younger then you. Sorry i just had to metion it.
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#218 Posted: 00:32:51 01/01/2010
Well, that might have been because I don't care..
I'll post another chapter tomorrow, right now I'm too tired, I'm just biting my time here at the computer.. One thing I can't help to wonder, Is there any point in this story now that we all know what's going to happen?.. |
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#219 Posted: 00:35:57 01/01/2010 | Topic Creator
Well.*shrugs* Who know there might be a unexpected twist.
EDIT: What would a story be, without some sort of unexpectid twists?
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#220 Posted: 00:46:35 01/01/2010
Yeah, but the ending is the same anyway..
Well, not if Keira somehow manages to evade her dark destiny, in witch case I would be very, very disappointed.. Such cliche would be just.. Plain stupid.. An outrage.. I hate it how the "light" always wins in the end.. |
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#221 Posted: 01:03:29 01/01/2010 | Topic Creator
But will it?
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#222 Posted: 01:16:14 01/01/2010
I don't know, that's why I haven't dropped this story already..
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#223 Posted: 01:21:54 01/01/2010 | Topic Creator
Well im FULL of unexpected twist and turns. But I have to work up to it, just like anygood story teller. (Im just doing what tmy fav auther do, make the story seem not to great untill POW Some thing i REALLY didn't expect to happen, happens.)
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#224 Posted: 01:46:12 01/01/2010
Have you ever concidered the fact that that kind of writing style will only disappoint some readers?..
Climax is a feeling, it's partly anticipation, partly intencity and exitement. Not a part of a story that always necessarily has to stand out by it's quality, thus making the rest look bland.. Do you understand what I mean?.. |
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#225 Posted: 01:48:50 01/01/2010 | Topic Creator
Ya, i understand.
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#226 Posted: 01:52:58 01/01/2010
Yeh, that's why I think that one should always do the best he/she is capable of when writing stories..
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#227 Posted: 01:58:05 01/01/2010 | Topic Creator
No. (post too short)
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#228 Posted: 02:04:21 01/01/2010
Quote: Cynder 19000
And.. Quote: About hurt/comfort fictions
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#229 Posted: 02:09:28 01/01/2010 | Topic Creator
Oh....
EDIT: So what, this is my story and i can do what i want. As long as some my freinds read im fine with it, and as long as they like i truley dont give a...i dont care. But i have something planed for the end, hopefully you will like it.
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#230 Posted: 02:32:07 01/01/2010 | Topic Creator
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#231 Posted: 02:32:27 01/01/2010
Well, this is interesting... But the book...
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#232 Posted: 02:35:00 01/01/2010 | Topic Creator
What you talking about!
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#233 Posted: 02:51:32 01/01/2010
The book she found is...odd, to say the least.
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#234 Posted: 02:54:29 01/01/2010 | Topic Creator
It's suppossed to be!
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#235 Posted: 02:59:20 01/01/2010
Okay.
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#236 Posted: 15:24:20 01/01/2010 | Topic Creator
Chapter22
Keira pulled away from Cody, worried about something. "But..what if i kill you?" Keira said, worried again. "It not going to happen! You are not a killer!" Cody yelled. Keira looked at him and then walked away with out saying a word. The day pasted on, Keira still lay in chamber, she looked out of the chamber door, and Cody stood thare. Keira didn't have to say, 'come in' he just walked in. They didn't talk didn't look at each other, it was almost time to go to sleep, and Cody already fell asleep. Keira lay awake, for hours then a voice in her head said, It is time you killed, the earth dragon. It is time you start your journey through your destiny. It ecod in her head, and the room, it was to quite, a feel of energy went through Keira, the ruby dragon must strike she thought, then went into the hall, and saw something glowing at the of it. It was Sparx, she down to the ground, like a cat stalking it prey, then Sparx saw her. "Hey, Keira! You couldn't sleep either?" Sparx, didn't noitece that he was in danger, untill Keir a puwned o him. "What are you doing!?" The she squshed him with her paw, thinking weakling, i wanted a challenge. But now it's time to get Terrador....for good. She walked, through the chamber door, and attacked. She bit his neck with her shap teath, and then thought something I'am the light, i'am the dark. I'am the sun, I'am moon. I'am life, I'am death. I'am the dark one, I'AM THE RUBY DRAGON! Then stabed Terrador in the heart with her tail, just like her dad did, when she was born. She flew out off the temple to wash her paws and tail from all the blood in the river. Every one was a still asleep, when she got back, she went into her chamber and fell asleep..."You make me prode! Now it's time you learn wind, and shadow." Her dad said. "Why should i learn from some cheap and weak, dragon, that has no chance from living from my attacks?" Keira asked sarcasticly. Her dad smerked then attacked, her with wind. All she did was step aside from the attack and said..."Oww...ow..Some attack. It really hurt me. Now i want a challenge" She once again said sarcasticly. Her dad looked at her, and turned invible. The 'WOOSH' something hit keria in the back, and again. It touch was icey cold, and stuned Keira. She tried to attacke but her dad was to strong, for her but then she had anuff. Every thing went silent, evry thing went pich black, untill she used twister, and blind eye, makeing the twister brighter then day, and blinding her dad. She then used shadowfire making him burn, and then ice and earth makeing him gush out bleeding also takeing him to the ground, but she was not satified. She used blind eye on him looking direcktly into his. He yelled in pain the laghed, Keira was confused. "You think you can take me down?!" Her dad yelled, then used shadow fury on Keira, it knocked her back. Her dad, ran to her, her eyes closed but still breathing. "You must learn that sometimes things don't apeer as they seem." Her dad said, then Keira opened her eyes, she once again used blind eye, but this time it nearly killed her dad, she went to his side. "You really think i didn't know that." Then stabed her dad with her tail.
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#237 Posted: 16:28:12 01/01/2010
yey she killed her dad! oh no what if she comes for me next? oh noooo!!!! everyone ruuuuun! *keira goes for me* AHHHHHH!!! *stabs keira with a knife* wooot im alive!! (i did not rlly kill keira)
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#238 Posted: 17:25:57 01/01/2010 | Topic Creator
Did she kill her dad? Remember those are just dreams....
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#239 Posted: 20:48:37 01/01/2010
Awsome chapter! I like it. Poor Terrador though.
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#240 Posted: 20:50:40 01/01/2010 | Topic Creator
Stop it with Poor Tery! And thatnk you!
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#241 Posted: 21:25:38 01/01/2010
Ok.Ok. I like terry though. XP
No problem.
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#242 Posted: 21:26:28 01/01/2010 | Topic Creator
I'll write another chapter later today.
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#243 Posted: 21:28:23 01/01/2010
I know terrador died but he didn't do much anyway... and good chapter.
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#244 Posted: 21:30:13 01/01/2010 | Topic Creator
What?
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#245 Posted: 21:30:56 01/01/2010
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#246 Posted: 21:34:06 01/01/2010 | Topic Creator
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#247 Posted: 22:42:34 01/01/2010
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#248 Posted: 23:57:19 01/01/2010
I'm really liking this story . Wonder what will happen next as she has killed Terrador and possibly her dad.
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#249 Posted: 01:23:24 02/01/2010 | Topic Creator
Thanks Solister. But don't forget she did kill Sparx too. And CinderLover, I KNOW!
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#250 Posted: 01:27:48 02/01/2010
yeah, hee hee hee, and I do not rely like Sparx and he is pretty much useless. so it was better for him to be the first victim.
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