

Cynder 19000
Yellow Sparx
![]() |
#151 Posted: 23:56:39 28/12/2009 | Topic Creator
Thank you!
![]() ![]()
---
I'm batman!! Shh... |
CinderLover
Emerald Sparx
![]() |
#152 Posted: 23:59:40 28/12/2009
WOW!! FOUR pages! cool!
|
Cynder 19000
Yellow Sparx
![]() |
#153 Posted: 00:00:48 29/12/2009 | Topic Creator
Oh, ya! First time that happend on one of my story topics. Hehehe!
![]()
---
I'm batman!! Shh... |
IsisStormDragon
Platinum Sparx
![]() |
#154 Posted: 02:53:42 29/12/2009
Good ones.
|
Samius
Hunter
![]() |
#155 Posted: 10:44:39 29/12/2009
Quote: CinderLover
By action, I don't mean in-story fighting or something that the characters do. I mean something that has a great effect on the story (like someone important dies, etc.) Quote: Me
Yes, I said that too.. ^ |
Cynder 19000
Yellow Sparx
![]() |
#156 Posted: 14:15:54 29/12/2009 | Topic Creator
Samius yes someone important is going to die, but not ight now he might get hurt in the next chapter that leads on to it, but you can't have the clymax(i know spelling) right at the beggining. I'm trying to make this story long so the clymax has to be around the middle to the end, and if you don't think so (i wish you could) just ask my teacher. You can't have the exciting bit right at the beggining you have to build up to it. Is that ok with you?
![]()
---
I'm batman!! Shh... |
Edited 1 time - Last edited at 14:29:22 29/12/2009 by Cynder 19000
|
CinderLover
Emerald Sparx
![]() |
#157 Posted: 17:09:36 29/12/2009
I agree and I learned about this last year in school, so I totally know what she is talking about! and I think "clymax"is spelled climax I THINK.
|
ravenouscynder Ripto Gems: 864 |
#158 Posted: 18:27:45 29/12/2009
omg is sparx gona die?
|
Cynder 19000
Yellow Sparx
![]() |
#159 Posted: 19:35:06 29/12/2009 | Topic Creator
Im not telling! You have to wait and see.
---
I'm batman!! Shh... |
CinderLover
Emerald Sparx
![]() |
#160 Posted: 20:23:36 29/12/2009
Okay. I will wait. *sits and waits*
|
Cynder 19000
Yellow Sparx
![]() |
#161 Posted: 20:58:28 29/12/2009 | Topic Creator
Chapter16
Keira slept good that night, no dreams no nothing. But she felt differnt, stronger, like in her dreams. She ran to the training grounds ware Spyro and Terrdor was waiting. "It's about time, i can't wait to see how strong it is!" Spyro said, in exsitemnt. "Spyro, don't get your hopes to high. She might of just been lucky the last time." Terrador said, then nodded at Keira. She didn't say a word, just attacked. The ground shook, bits of rock and soil came flying at Keira but stoped a foot away, she smiled, grunted, and noded then shot them all at the dummies. Spyro and Terrador was amazed they never seen anything like it. Terrador couldn't even master the suff she was doing. Then she used fury, Spyro hid behind a rock, Terrador stood ware he was but then saw the danger...he was too late, the fury got him. It knocked him back, the wounds made a puttle of blood. Keira smiled, Spyro saw a little of it but wasn't sure if he really seen one. The Keira snaped out of it, and relized what she has done. "Terrador!" Spyro yelled running towards him. Keira also ran, she couldn't talk she was to frightend, that what she had feared most has happend. "Go get help! He's still breathing!" Spyro yelled.
---
I'm batman!! Shh... |
Night Owl
Yellow Sparx
![]() |
#162 Posted: 21:01:16 29/12/2009
ooo. Poor Terrador. D: More please.
![]()
---
Back from hibernation. |
Cynder 19000
Yellow Sparx
![]() |
#163 Posted: 21:14:22 29/12/2009 | Topic Creator
Soon, i might have another today.
---
I'm batman!! Shh... |
CinderLover
Emerald Sparx
![]() |
#164 Posted: 21:14:46 29/12/2009
AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA!!! TERRADOR!!!!!! AWESOME!!!
|
Night Owl
Yellow Sparx
![]() |
#165 Posted: 21:15:26 29/12/2009
Yay! D: But what about Terrador?! Oh noez.
![]()
---
Back from hibernation. |
Cynder 19000
Yellow Sparx
![]() |
#166 Posted: 21:15:46 29/12/2009 | Topic Creator
Thanks!
![]()
---
I'm batman!! Shh... |
Night Owl
Yellow Sparx
![]() |
#167 Posted: 21:16:44 29/12/2009
No problem.
![]()
---
Back from hibernation. |
CinderLover
Emerald Sparx
![]() |
#168 Posted: 21:18:24 29/12/2009
HOORAY!!
|
Cynder 19000
Yellow Sparx
![]() |
#169 Posted: 21:21:24 29/12/2009 | Topic Creator
What?
---
I'm batman!! Shh... |
CinderLover
Emerald Sparx
![]() |
#170 Posted: 21:26:33 29/12/2009
New chapter! YAY!
|
Cynder 19000
Yellow Sparx
![]() |
#171 Posted: 21:33:18 29/12/2009 | Topic Creator
I will soon, ok?
---
I'm batman!! Shh... |
Night Owl
Yellow Sparx
![]() |
#172 Posted: 21:34:02 29/12/2009
Yup.
![]()
---
Back from hibernation. |
Cynder 19000
Yellow Sparx
![]() |
#173 Posted: 21:37:44 29/12/2009 | Topic Creator
I'll start typing in half an hour.
![]()
---
I'm batman!! Shh... |
Night Owl
Yellow Sparx
![]() |
#174 Posted: 21:39:57 29/12/2009
M'kay. I may have logged off then though. D:
---
Back from hibernation. |
Cynder 19000
Yellow Sparx
![]() |
#175 Posted: 21:41:20 29/12/2009 | Topic Creator
Oh then i'll start soon.
---
I'm batman!! Shh... |
Night Owl
Yellow Sparx
![]() |
#176 Posted: 21:42:45 29/12/2009
Thankies!
![]() ![]()
---
Back from hibernation. |
CinderLover
Emerald Sparx
![]() |
#177 Posted: 21:44:06 29/12/2009
okay, soon another chapter, good for me.
|
Cynder 19000
Yellow Sparx
![]() |
#178 Posted: 22:02:44 29/12/2009 | Topic Creator
Chapter17
Keira was shocked she couldn't move. Then a voice came into her head,the ruby dragon has striked! Are you still sure your not what you are destined too?It was her dad voice. "Go get help! Now! We can save him if you go!" Spyro yelled at her. Keira then ran looking for any one that could help. The bad thought sticked in her head,what if she wasn't what she thought she was? She took flight hopeing that would be faster. Volteer saw the young dragon fly right past his face, she then landed. "Whats for thr rush?" Volteer asked. "Terredor!" Keira gasped for air "He..he just come!" She started to run for the training grounds, Volteer ran after her. When they got thare Volteer gasped of the horrid sight, the blood puddle got bigger, it coverd Spyro's paws. "Ok, you two stay here and wait for Cyril! I will get some villagers to bring red crystles!" Volteer yelled, then took flight, Keira walked into the puddle ware Spyro was. "When he said your fury was strong....I didn't know it would kill him." Spyro said, his face wet from tears. "Don't say that! He's not dead yet, he may live!" Keira yelled a tear went down her cheak. The word 'may' ecohed in her head.
---
I'm batman!! Shh... |
CinderLover
Emerald Sparx
![]() |
#179 Posted: 22:19:51 29/12/2009
KEIRA! HOW COULD YOU!!?? That will be Spyro's reaction.
|
Cynder 19000
Yellow Sparx
![]() |
#180 Posted: 00:13:37 30/12/2009 | Topic Creator
How do you know?
![]()
---
I'm batman!! Shh... |
CinderLover
Emerald Sparx
![]() |
#181 Posted: 00:35:33 30/12/2009
I don't It is just a pretty high Hypothesis.
|
Cynder 19000
Yellow Sparx
![]() |
#182 Posted: 00:36:08 30/12/2009 | Topic Creator
Ya, i geuss.
![]()
---
I'm batman!! Shh... |
CinderLover
Emerald Sparx
![]() |
#183 Posted: 02:04:17 30/12/2009
![]() ![]() |
IsisStormDragon
Platinum Sparx
![]() |
#184 Posted: 03:50:38 30/12/2009
![]() |
CinderLover
Emerald Sparx
![]() |
#185 Posted: 13:18:40 30/12/2009
I mean, why didn't he duck or use Earth Sphere or something!? 'Cause he IS Terrador!!!! So that does not compute for me...
|
Cynder 19000
Yellow Sparx
![]() |
#186 Posted: 13:43:59 30/12/2009 | Topic Creator
Ya, but i did that becuase he's a togh guy and in Cyril didn't get hurt from her fury befor, so he saw no danger...Untill it was too late.
---
I'm batman!! Shh... |
CinderLover
Emerald Sparx
![]() |
#187 Posted: 13:58:46 30/12/2009
oh, DUMB TERRADOR! sometimes I fell like that about him. it is kinda sad.
|
Cynder 19000
Yellow Sparx
![]() |
#188 Posted: 14:00:33 30/12/2009 | Topic Creator
Ya, i geuss so.
---
I'm batman!! Shh... |
ravenouscynder Ripto Gems: 864 |
#189 Posted: 18:18:54 30/12/2009
NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO NOT TERRADOR!! HE'S MY FAVE GUARDIAN!!! HOW COULD YOU KEIRA!?? YOU ARE THE RUBY DRAGON!! YOUR EEEEEEEEEEEVIIIIILL!!! I HATE YOUUUUUUUUU!!!!!!! NOOO NOT TERRADOR¬!!!! *tries to kill keira*
|
Cynder 19000
Yellow Sparx
![]() |
#190 Posted: 18:25:43 30/12/2009 | Topic Creator
*SHE KILLS YOU* Bad Keira! Got o your room! *Keira walks to her room* Sorry about that...why am i talking to a dead body?
---
I'm batman!! Shh... |
Cynder 19000
Yellow Sparx
![]() |
#191 Posted: 18:53:00 30/12/2009 | Topic Creator
Chapter18
The day pasted, Terrador was still alive....but not in good shape. He couldn't move, speak, grunt for that matter, all he did was lay thare scarly breathing. The bleeading has stoped, but the wounds were deep. Keira stayed in her chamber for the day, to ashamed to come out, she thought about her dreams and how they might be true. Nobody came to see her, and she never came out to see them. She felt so guilty for what she has done, not knowing if she should leave right now. As the day pasted she fell asleep. "There is nothing that will help you young one. I'm....i'm terible sorry. I wish i could help, only if i could." The chronical siad, a tear went down his cheak. "But i didn't mean too. I dont know wh..." Keira was cut off by the chronical. "I know you didn't.... but thats how it starts." He shook his head, then faded away. Keira woke up, laying there tears went down her cheaks, she regreted it so much. What would happen if she strikes again? If so, who would it be? She walked around her chamber then saw something she didn't see befor, there was a hidden door at the far coner of the room. She walked up to it, and pushed hard it opend and there lay a book.
---
I'm batman!! Shh... |
CinderLover
Emerald Sparx
![]() |
#192 Posted: 19:39:10 30/12/2009
oh brother, a cursed book maybe..?
|
Cynder 19000
Yellow Sparx
![]() |
#193 Posted: 19:41:28 30/12/2009 | Topic Creator
*shrugs*
---
I'm batman!! Shh... |
Night Owl
Yellow Sparx
![]() |
#194 Posted: 19:47:37 30/12/2009
Awsome.
![]()
---
Back from hibernation. |
CinderLover
Emerald Sparx
![]() |
#195 Posted: 19:48:42 30/12/2009
NO idea what this "book" is, not me anyway!
|
ravenouscynder Ripto Gems: 864 |
#196 Posted: 19:50:46 30/12/2009
im not dead i am immortal!! bad keira!!! *walks to keira's room and knocks her door* mawhahahahahhaha its me im alive!!!! *kills keira*
|
CinderLover
Emerald Sparx
![]() |
#197 Posted: 19:52:12 30/12/2009
Quote: ravenouscynder
If you kill her we no longer have a topic do we? |
Cynder 19000
Yellow Sparx
![]() |
#198 Posted: 19:55:14 30/12/2009 | Topic Creator
Dont kill keira!
---
I'm batman!! Shh... |
ravenouscynder Ripto Gems: 864 |
#199 Posted: 19:57:57 30/12/2009
oh fine i wont but if she attacks me its go time baby!
|
Cynder 19000
Yellow Sparx
![]() |
#200 Posted: 19:58:40 30/12/2009 | Topic Creator
Ok...
![]()
---
I'm batman!! Shh... |
Please login or register a forum account to post a message.
Spyro and related characters are ® and © of Activision Blizzard, Inc. All rights reserved. Activision Blizzard has no association with and takes no responsibility for the community fan sites to which this site is linked or the content thereon.