darkSpyro

StarFyre and I apologize for taking so long, I'll post the third chapter tonight or tomorrow.

alright, awesome.

alright bro take your time.

yeah.

I've sent the draft to startfyre... *taps foot* (JK starfyre, lol)

Chapter Three: The Other World

A small creature---if you could call two feet ten inches small---scampered through a desert city's streets. His soft pads on his feet were noiseless on the sand and rock. Weasels were known for their cunning and quietness. But this was no pure weasel. Half weasel to be precise, the other half being otter. He didn't have much for camaflage, his fur being bright orange with a tan underbelly and two tan rings around each of his forearms. His bright beady blue eyes darted back and forth, searching the sandy streets. His four inch ears listened for the sound of his human comrade, who should be close behind. "Are you coming?" He called back to his comrade loudly.

"Yeah Daxter, keep your fur on." The human, maybe an elf with longer ears, was moving at more of a slower pace, in no hurry. His cerulean eyes watched his rodent friend scamper onward toward the hugh city gate that leads to a vast wasteland desert. The wind couldn't do much to his short blonde hair, that had a few streaks of green. He wore a simple tan tee-shirt with a dark brown strip across the chest horizontally, with brown pants that stopped at his knees. Dark blue boots with metal soles covered the rest of his legs. As well as a cloth that sat at his waist---a typical wastlander garb.


Lately the Metal Head population had been growing exponentially. More and more wastelanders had come from outside the desert city reporting herds of the filthy animals appearing more often. Jak and his Orange furry friend had been assigned to eliminate a portion of this visious species.

"Come on! We ain't got all day!" Dax complained. "I smell a sandstorm coming on by nightfall."


The tiny sand particles of this desert sand storm was enough to eat at your flesh, causing a slow death. Which is why no civilians were allowed outside the city walls during one. The all-terrain vehicle Jak was driving was kicking up sand. He slowed. "Well well well... what do we have here."

A herd of raptor-like metal heads were stopped in the shade of a small oasis. Some looked lazily over at the vehicle as they came to a stop. Others stood up. The alpha male snorted and bellowed a challange.

"Oooo, he's getting feisty." Dax commented as he jumped up onto his friends left shoulder as Jak was getting out of the vehicle.

Jak stopped 100 feet from the leader. His eyes were red, his scalely skin was whitish---an uncommon color for a metal head. They were usually dark blue with yellow eyes. But the bright yellow skull gem was the same as the others. He snorted and stamped impatiently, putting on a territoroal threat display, slapping his tail on the ground. Jak took out his blaster, a rifle with a beam sight and strode forward.

The leader bellowed and charged. Jak brought his gun up and sighted the animal in the head. The distance was closing... 80 ft...50 ft... 40ft...
"Take out the leader, the pack scatters..." he muttered as he put pressure on the trigger. 20 ft... 10 ft...

The animal lunged and opened it's maw, long sharp teeth dripping with saliva. Jak pulled the trigger. It stumbled back, shoulder wounded.

"You missed at that range?" Dax asked incredulously.

The metal head suddenly dropped over, dead with a hole blown through it's head. The pack was on alert now, and got up fast, scattering in different directions.


About an hour later half the pack had been exterminated. The wind started to pick up. Jak pulled his red bandana over his face and put his googles down to keep the sand out.

"This storm's getting worse. I don't think we could make it back even if you floored it!" Dax yelled above the wind's howl. The storm was coming on faster than normal, causing Jak to bolt back to his vehicle.

"We're not gonna Dax. We need to find shelter." He switched the power on just as the sun's last rays disappeared from the horizon and drove off.

Several minutes later Jak turned a corner around some rock at high speed. "What about that!?" He pointed to a cave that had an unnatural bluish-purple glow coming from it.

"It's gonna have to do, hang on!" He took a hard left, and drove into the tunnel of the cave for about five feet, then took a right and came to a stop. Dax hopped out, beating the sand out of his thick fur. "Yeesh, this stuff keeps coming and coming." After about five minutes he would be done. Jak ducked under the metal overhaed frame of the vehicle to get out. The same bluish glow shone ahead to the left and around another corner. Jak narrowed his eyes curiously. "Hey Dax..."

Daxter looked up. "Whoa... what IS it?" He crawled forward slowly.

The vehicles radio crackled to life. '...Jak? Jak, come in.' It was a female voice. He quickly stepped over the stones in the cave and bent into the vehicle.

"Jak here." He waited for a response.

'Oh thank the precursors! I heard there was a violent sandstorm. Are you alright?'

Dax jumped into the vehicle. "Yeah, WE are alright!"
Jak shot an irritated look at Dax. 'Where are y----' The female voice crackled over the radio, then suddenly loud static came through as the bright light blinded both boys in the cave. Jak shielded his eyes, and approached the corner. Dax pattered over to him and peered around the corner.


A tall cat-like creature, standing on two legs was on the other side of a watery portal, glittering with blues and purples. A black dragoness looked straight up into the sky and fell over in a dead-faint of shock.

Daxter bristled up and fell over backwards, stiff, fainting.

Gr8 chap!

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LOL!......

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Well? Feedback? Comparing to the other chaps, that is?

Quote: Cynder 19000

Gr8 chap!

agree with this!

Nice one ace! *tackles dax*

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I am a metal head hear me rawr! Meow...

No spamming my topic !

What do you think your doin' then? Decorating it?

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Fourth chapter is under construction.

Chapter Four: Part One


Hunter gazed in awe at the mezmerizing portal before him. Sparx flew up. "This thing is... wierd."

"It is something we may want to avoid. I get an ill feeling from it. Come, we must leave." He turned.

"What about Spyro?" Sparx flew down to his fallen friend.

"I will carry both dragons back to the village. Sparx, I need you to warn them that we may have trouble in the near future."

Sparx nodded and flew off, his wings wirring in the same annoying fashion they allways did. Hunter knelt and pick up Spyro carefully, then walk over to Cynder and picked her up in his other arm. He took a faint path back to his village.

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Good chap.

That's only part of it
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Chapter Four: Part Two


Jak looked down at his Orange friend. "Dax... Daxter, come on." He shook him out of his stiff condition.

"Is it just me," the furball said, "or did I see creatures WITH SHARP TEETH on the other side?!" He walked behind his friend's leg, timid about the swirling portal.

Jak saw the cat-like creature pick up some burdens, then walk off. I wonder what's on the other side?... He walked forward.

"Uh, Jak, remember last time this happened?!"

He didn't respond, but reached out and put his hand into the portal. It felt like warm water. Odd. No water was on his hand after he took it out. He looked up at it, then stepped through....

"YYYYUUUuuooohhhh... why did he have to do that!?" Daxter sighed with frustration, then bounded forward, jumping through.


No, it wasn't a thin portal. It felt like suffocating water. Neither could breath, and the movement was restricting.

The way back closed behind them.

Dax started to panick, but then followed Jak to the other side.
Both leapt out onto the soft green grass, not a bit wet. Dax panted heavily from lack of air. When both boys recovered, they moved to the cover of the bushes...

Quote: darkfurydragon

[/b]That's only part of it
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[b]Chapter Four: Part Two


Jak looked down at his Orange friend. "Dax... Daxter, come on." He shook him out of his stiff condition.

"Is it just me," the furball said, "or did I see creatures WITH SHARP TEETH on the other side?!" He walked behind his friend's leg, timid about the swirling portal.

Jak saw the cat-like creature pick up some burdens, then walk off. I wonder what's on the other side?... He walked forward.

"Uh, Jak, remember last time this happened?!"

He didn't respond, but reached out and put his hand into the portal. It felt like warm water. Odd. No water was on his hand after he took it out. He looked up at it, then stepped through....

"YYYYUUUuuooohhhh... why did he have to do that!?" Daxter sighed with frustration, then bounded forward, jumping through.


No, it wasn't a thin portal. It felt like suffocating water. Neither could breath, and the movement was restricting.

The way back closed behind them.

Dax started to panick, but then followed Jak to the other side.
Both leapt out onto the soft green grass, not a bit wet. Dax panted heavily from lack of air. When both boys recovered, they moved to the cover of the bushes...

no wonder it was so short. XP

Complaining, are we? XP

Oh. Good chap!

Chapter Four: part Three

Spyro's eyes snapped open, looking into the fire he was lying next to. He stood up quickly. Cynder jumped up. "Whoa, Spyro, what's wrong?"

"Something's not right." He looked at her, a dark glint in his eye. "Can you sense it?"

She raised her eyebrow, confused. "Sense what? Spyro, you took a bad fall, maybe you should just rest."

"No, I can't. This..."

I warned you, Spyro. I warned both you and Cynder...

Spyro stopped. Then turned around and ran out of the cheetah village.


He paced the grassy fields. I feel restless... I haven't felt this since Ignitus died. He looked up, gazing on the peaceful fields...

What is that? He spotted bright rays of light from the portal. Then went off to investigate.


It took about an hour to get there. He gazed at it with wonder, the bright light reflecting in his eyes. This wasn't here before... Then he recognized it. We trained here! How did this get here?

He suddenly felt the same restless evil he'd felt in the village. A pull. Without realizing it it at first, he transformed into his dark form, and slunk into the bushes.

The only thing that could be seen in this dark night was his bright white eyes.

Holy Moley! Is there anymore parts to it?! Anyways good PART.

Last part for Four.

I only separated it because it bounced between Spyro and the boys.

Ohhhhh Ok. So when are you posting the next part?

I'll be posting Chapter five next. Keep your fur on! Me and StarFyre have gotta have a break to think

Ok....

speaking of which, i forgot to include "great chaper". :3

What is GM_76 talking about?

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i've got nothing to say. XP

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RAWWWWR.

CONTINUE D:<

Keep your shorts on

I'm going to play AHT now, cya later X3

edit: i decided to turn it off because i got lost in dragonfly falls

Chapter Five: Stalker

Jak quietly crouched in the bushes, fifty feet from the glowing portal. This world was strange to him, yet almost felt like home. It reminded him of Haven forest, and he stole further from the bright light the portal gave off.

"Where exactly are we---"

"SHHH!" Jak said harshly yet quietly, putting his finger to his lips. Dax shut up. The bushes rustled quietly as he came out of them into a clearing, far from the watery portal. Not much was out at this time of night except a few owls, which sounded their lonely, hollow calls into the blackness.

"Eh, Jak, what's that?" Dax asked Jak very quietly as he took shelter behind his friends leg.

"It's just nocturnal birds, Dax."

Dax looked up sharply at his friend. "That's not what I meant. Look." He laid his ears back and pointed far off.

Two bright white, unfriendly looking eyes shone forth in the darkness ahead, then disappeared from view.

"Did you see them?" Dax asked, timidly.

Jak narrowed his eyes. "Yeah. Stay close."

Dax crawled up his friend and sat on his left shoulder. But the eyes didn't appear again for a while.


Day break was starting to come. A soft light filled the valley, but it was still very dark out. Spyro still stalked his elusive prey. I saw them, they're here somewhere. His eyes didn't show as brightly any longer because of the increase in light outside.

Finally he saw them. Dax was looking around, trailing behind Jak. I have to take the rodent out. It'll even the odds. He swiftly ducked behind some brush.

Dax's head snapped in Spyro's direction. "Jak? Was that you??" He didn't see his friend anywhere as he turned around. "Jak... old buddy old pal of mine... where did you go?!"

Spyro crept closer. Dax was unaware. That is, until Spyro put his mouth around Dax's neck and clamped down. Dax struggled, not able to breathe, then he went limp. Spyro dropped him, the dark arua hovering around himself giving the situation the look of pure evil, then silently stole into the bushes after the the human.

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Cynder had chased after Spyro, trying to stop him from dashing out of the village, but her pleas went unheeded as he had vanished into the brush. She sighed with frustration. "I guess I'll have to go after him." She said aloud.


"Spyro... Sssspyro... where are you!?" She said impatiently. She'd been searching for hours, and it was now dark. For goodness sake, he'd been thrown into a wall earlier and was not well. "When I find you... you...! UUoooh!" She growled. Then sat in thought for several seconds. "Maybe I should check that strange portal we saw yesterday." A strange feeling of forboding came over her as she remambered the Chronicler's words, but she forced her self to search for the glowing gate.

She did not have to search for long. In this black night, the radiant light was easy to see from far off, even through the trees. She strode forward. She could have sworn she saw white glowing eyes further back when she was searching.

She saw them again.

"Spyro? Is that you?"

No response. The eyes disappeared and rustling was heard in the brush as what ever she thought it was went off. She sighed again, turning her attention to the portal. She felt a strong energy come from it as she stepped closer and closer. The reflection of blue and prurple swirls among the white danced in her eyes. Slowly, curiously and timidly, she picked up her paw and reached out, trying to touch this beautiful phenomena.

She drew her paw back abruptly when she felt the touch of warm water. That's odd... She thought. But curiousity had gotten the best of her. She reached out again, and this time placed her paw in it, and felt it liquid. Suddenly she saw another world on the other side, it looked like a cave. Drawing her paw out, she quickly glanced around to see if anyone was watching. A thrill of excitment went through her body as she jumped forward into the suffocating watery portal, the way back closing behind her...

At the same moment, Spyro had gotten to Daxter.

Is Daxter dead?! NO NOT DAXTER!....Great chapter!

Wait and see...

NOT DAXTER! PLZ NOT DAXTER THE LITTLE DUDE!


(This is random but i want to know what he htinks of Cynder?)

Can you aske me via PM and not spam up the topic please?
EDIT: He hasn't seen cynder yet

ok. (Ill PM you but plz answer the qustion i asked you here)

Very Good, I'm impressed. I like the way that you two describe the details and the surroundings. Definitly a very nice story, keep it up.

catching up when im not so tired from reading dewey

Ahhrrg, I would give proper critique rught now but my brain isn't functioning.

Anway, AWESOMFULTASTIC chapter ZD Dax had better be fine...or Spyro is gonna get his ass kicked

just a few dratted gramatical errors

thanks.

wait and see about dax...

sorry for not responding earlier *bangs head against wall*

nice story