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#51 Posted: 16:34:31 16/01/2010
Good chapter
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#52 Posted: 16:46:11 16/01/2010 | Topic Creator
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#53 Posted: 18:57:28 16/01/2010
i hope angelo is beginning to understand
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#54 Posted: 21:01:59 16/01/2010 | Topic Creator
yeah i hope so too.
Chapter 12, Vepar and Angie flew to the Temple,they landed in front of the Temple doors, Angie still had the flower Vepar gave her, Vepar looked to his right and saw Angelo standing in the distance with a female angel, Vepar let go of Angie's hand. Angie walked over to Angelo and the female angel. Angie: "mom, this is Vepar. i met him at school..." the angel looks at Vepar. angel: "oh you must be the friend Angie keeps talking about. my name is Angela." Vepar waved a little. Vepar: "hi..." Angela looks at Angie. Angela: "your friend seems nice... oh and who gave you this flower?" Angie: "Vepar did." Angela: "oh he's quite a gentleman." Angie: "come on mom the worship service is about to start..." Angie and Angela walked toward the doors of the Temple, Vepar came in front of the doors and opened one of them. Angela: "oh he's so polite..." Angie and Angela walked through the door that was opened for them. Vepar was about to go in the Temple himself. Angelo: "wait... come here i want to talk to you." Vepar turned around and looked at Angelo. Angelo: "look you seem to make my daughter happy... in fact i never saw her this happy since the time when i first took her to worship... but my point is you make her happy so i won't bother you anymore... i won't interfere with your friendship with her anymore..." Vepar: "thank you..." Angelo walks over to the Temple doors. Angelo: "now let's go into the Temple we're a little late." Angelo opened the door and walked inside the Temple, Vepar walked in after him. angels filled the Temple. they were kneeling in front of Jesus and singing. Angie and Angela were in the front row singing to Jesus along with all of the other angels, Angelo and Vepar made their way to the front, Angelo kneels next to Angela and sings with the others. Vepar kneels next to Angie. she looks at him for a moment then continues singing. Vepar sings along as well. after worship is over the angels begin to leave the Temple. Angelo is still in the Temple, he is kneeling before Jesus. Angelo: "Master please forgive me for trying to kill Vepar..." Jesus: "of course i forgive you... and i understand your reason for doing it..." Angelo: "thank you Master..." Angelo bows down. he gets up and leaves the Temple, Angela meets up with him outside. Angela: "why did you stay longer?" Angelo: "i asked the Master for forgiveness for trying to kill Vepar..." Angela: "did he forgive you?" Angelo: "yes... our Master is good... he's not like lucifer who beats his servants to a bloody pulp every time they mess up..." Angela: "yes thank goodness our Master is forgiving... come with me i have some thing to show you." they walked over to the playground, there were many children playing there. Angelo: "why are we at the playground?" Angela: "look toward the swings." Angelo looked toward the swings and sees Angie on the swings with Vepar pushing her, Angie was having fun and laughing. Angie: "higher Vepar." Vepar: "ok but i don't want you to fall off now..." Vepar pushes harder and Angie swings higher. Angelo and Angela sit down on a bench watching Vepar and Angie play. Angie stops herself from swinging and gets off the swing. Angie: "ok Vepar now you get on." Vepar gets on the swing, Angie pushes him and he starts swinging, they are both laughing. next chapter coming tomorrow. |
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#55 Posted: 22:39:27 16/01/2010
Good chapter
Now their friendship is really unfolding now
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#56 Posted: 16:01:17 17/01/2010 | Topic Creator
yes... thanks,
Chapter 13, 6 years later... Vepar and Angie were now 10 years old, they spent most of their time together. they went to school together. they played together and they enjoyed each others company. they were in school now, they were in the classroom, sitting in desks listening to Dina teach. Vepar was sitting in the front row, he felt something tap his shoulder, Angie was sitting in a desk behind him and she had a note in her hand. Vepar took the note and read it. Vepar: *reading* "can we hang out after school today?" Vepar took out a pencil and wrote something on the note and gave the note back to Angie. she read the note. Angie: *reading* "yes we can." Dina stopped teaching the class and looked at Vepar and Angie. Dina: "are you 2 passing notes in class again?" Vepar: "no we weren't... i was paying attention." Dina: "what did i just say?" Vepar said nothing. Dina: "you lied to me didn't you?" Vepar nodded. Dina: "you can stay after class... i can't believe you just sinned." Dina continued teaching the class. after school was finished everyone left the classroom, Vepar stayed behind. Dina: "Vepar do you know what the 9th commandment is?" Vepar: "yes..." Dina: "say it." Vepar: "thou shalt not bear false witness against thy neighbor." Dina: "yes... now take out the part about your neighbor what does it state now?" Vepar: "thou shalt not bear false witness." Dina: "yes... and what does that mean?" Vepar: "don't lie?" Dina: "that's right... and you broke that commandment..." Dina took out a packet of papers and put them on Vepar's desk. Dina: "fill up all those papers front and back with the 9th commandment." Vepar took out a pencil and started writing. it took him 2 hours but he finished. Vepar: "done..." Dina took a look at several papers. Dina: "oh so you are... well i hope you learned your lesson." Vepar: "yes..." Dina: "well you may go..." Vepar got up and walked out of the classroom. he walked to where his locker was and saw that there was a note sticking out of it, he pulled out the note and read it. Vepar: *reading* "liars like you go to hell." Vepar crumpled up the note and threw it on the ground. a male angel about his age walked toward him. angel: "oh so now you're going to add littering on your list of sins demon?" Vepar: "are you the one who put that note in my locker?" angel: "yeah the name's Appoloin." Vepar: "well Appoloin. i've got no time to talk i have to got to get home." Vepar starts to walk away. Appoloin: "too bad Jesus is going to throw you into hell for sinning." Vepar turns around. Vepar: "Jesus loves me... he would never throw me into hell." Appoloin: "you're a demon i'm an angel... who do you think Jesus loves more. an evil demon? or a heavenly angel?" Vepar: "Jesus loves us both equally..." Appoloin: "he would throw you in hell in an instant when you get to the Temple. he doesn't tolerate sin. especially sin from a demon!" Vepar was getting angry. he walked toward Appoloin. Appoloin: "don't even think about hurting me... you're already going to hell for sinning." Vepar smirked. Vepar: "then i've got nothing to loose." Vepar punched Appoloin in the face, Appoloin fell and slammed into a locker, he got up. Appoloin: "oh now you're in for it demon!" Vepar: "bring it!" Vepar growls at him. they circle each other waiting for the right moment to attack. a crowd gathered around them watching. Appoloin kicked Vepar in the stomach, Vepar fell on the ground. Appoloin stood over him. Appoloin: "had enough?" Vepar tripped him with his tail, Vepar got up, Appoloin stood up as well. Vepar claws him in the chest. Appoloin punched him in the jaw, Vepar staggered back a bit and then bit Appoloin's arm and twisted it. Appoloin fell to the ground, Vepar pins him to the ground. Appoloin headbutted Vepar off of him. they both stood up and ran at each other. someone picked them up by the back of their robes. it was Jesus. Jesus: "what is going on here!?" Appoloin: "this devil attacked me for no reason. he was trying to kill me." Jesus: "Appoloin don't try to play innocent i know it was you that provoked him." Vepar: "so does thins mean i won't be punished?" Jesus: "no... you fought back. you know very well fighting is wrong." Appoloin looks at Vepar. Appoloin: "HA!... you're going to hell serves you right!" Jesus: "i have half a mind to send you to hell!" Appoloin: "no no!... please don't!" Vepar: "are you going to send us to hell?" Jesus: "i'll decide what your punishment is when we get to the Temple." Jesus walks out of the school still carrying Vepar and Appoloin by their robes. Appoloin was crying and begging not to be sent to hell. Vepar just kept quiet silently regretting what he had done. next chapter coming today. |
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#57 Posted: 16:57:48 17/01/2010
Good chapter
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#58 Posted: 16:59:19 17/01/2010 | Topic Creator
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#59 Posted: 17:08:19 17/01/2010
appoloin is just a spoiled brat
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#60 Posted: 22:48:35 17/01/2010 | Topic Creator
agreed.
Chapter 14, at the Temple, Jesus was sitting in his throne, Vepar and Appoloin were standing in front of him. Appoloin looked really nervous and worried about what's going to happen, Vepar stood silent with his head held low and his eyes shut, he was silently regretting his sin. Appoloin: "are you going to send me to hell? i don't wanna go to hell!" Appoloin drops to his knees and starts crying. Appoloin: "please don't send me to hell!... it wasn't my fault i sinned.... it was his fault!" Appoloin points at Vepar. Vepar didn't move, he was silently repenting. Jesus: "unlike you Vepar is repenting for his sins... and you're just afraid of punishment." Appoloin: "what are you going to do to us?" Vepar stepped forward. Vepar: "i know i deserve to be punished for my sins and it is just for you to do so... but i am truly sorry for what i've done... i'm sorry for lying, i'm sorry for fighting, i'm sorry for stealing a cookie from that kid that one time..." Jesus looked at Appoloin. Jesus: "you see... Vepar is repenting of his sins... and what are you doing?... you're whining about being punished..." chains came around Appoloin's body. Jesus: "maybe i'll let you face your fear of hell." Appoloin was shaking in fear. Jesus: "Vepar... you will not be punished..." Vepar: "thank you Master..." Vepar kneels in adoration, then he stood back up. he looks at Appoloin. Vepar: "i will pray for you..." Appoloin: "oh shut up!... you should be going to hell instead!" Jesus: "you see this is the kind of thing that gets people sent to hell... hatred. i taught you to love not hate." Appoloin: "how can i love a demon?" Jesus: "acceptance is the first step... and you're not accepting him..." Vepar: "Master please have mercy on him..." Jesus: "his punishment won't be that painful." the ground in front of Appoloin opened up, there was a large opening in the ground, it looked like a pit, Appoloin looked at Vepar. Appoloin: "this is all your fault..." Appoloin fell into the pit, he landed at the bottom, he layed there as it started to get unbearably hot. the ground above him closed up and he was in darkness. the chains around him got hot and they were slightly hurting him, he groans in pain and discomfort. 10 minutes later he appears back in Heaven. Vepar goes over to Appoloin and begins to unchain him. Vepar tries to help him up, Appoloin pulled away. Appoloin: "don't touch me you filthy demon!" Vepar backed away. Jesus: "Appoloin i called your father and told him what happen." Appoloin: "you told my dad?" suddenly a male angel came to Appoloin. Appoloin: "oh dad... hi..." angel: "don't you hi dad me!... how dare you sin!?" Appoloin: "it wasn't my fault... it was his fault." Appoloin pointed to Vepar. angel: "don't blame it on him!... it was your own fault!... the Master may have punished you but i'm going to finish what he started!... you're grounded!... and you're going to apologize to Vepar." Appoloin: "no!" angel: "apologize to him... NOW!!" Appoloin: "i'm sorry Vepar..." the angel led Appoloin away. the next chapter is coming tomorrow. |
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#61 Posted: 05:25:16 18/01/2010
he he, he sure is regreting that now
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#62 Posted: 13:51:03 18/01/2010 | Topic Creator
yeah he is,
Chapter 15, Angie came into the Temple and saw Vepar knelt down in front of Jesus praying. Angie walks over to Vepar. Angie: "Vepar why are you praying?" Vepar: "i'm praying for someone." Angie: "oh well i can come back later." Angie looks at Jesus. Angie: "my apologies for interrupting." Angie started to walk away. Jesus: "Vepar why don't you go with her. you can always pray at night." Vepar: "alright." Vepar stood up and went after Angie. Angie looked at him and smiled. Angie: "want to go for a flight?" Vepar: "yes..." Vepar and Angie went out of the Temple, they flew up over the clouds, they flew for quite a long time, Angie knew that something was bothering Vepar. Angie: "Vepar what's wrong? something's bothering you." Vepar: "well it's just that angel Appoloin... he said bad things to me. he got me in trouble for fighting and whenever i do something nice for him he hates me even more. i have no grudge against him though." Angie: "well some people still haven't excepted you." Vepar: "i know. why can't they look beyond what i am to see the good inside me?" Angie: "i don't know... but i do know this i looked beyond what you are and i see a lot of good in you." Vepar looked at Angie and smiled. Vepar: "thank you, you are a true friend." Angie held Vepar's hand. they flew close to each other, Angie: "want to watch the sunset together?" Vepar: "yes..." they flew down and landed on top of a big hill, they sat close to each other and watched the sun go down. Vepar's hand was on top of Angie's hand, Vepar gently wraps his tail around Angie. Angie put her head on Vepar's shoulder. Vepar wrapped a wing around her, Angie: "isn't the sunset in Heaven beautiful?" Vepar: "yeah and look at all those colors." the sun went down and night was coming. Vepar: "come i'll take you home." Vepar helps Angie stand up and they fly to her home, they land in front of the door. Angie: "thank you for a wonderful evening Vepar." Angie hugged him and kissed him on the cheek. Angie: "well goodnight." Angie went into her home. Vepar stood there for a moment and then flew back to the Temple. he walks in the Temple and up to Jesus. Vepar: "Master i had the best day ever." Jesus: "it looks like you and Angie are becoming really close." Vepar: "we are, she just kissed me..." Jesus: "that's a sign that she really cares about you." Vepar: "i know... i'm going to sleep." there was a giant pillow by the throne, Vepar layed down on the pillow and fell asleep. next chapter coming today. |
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#63 Posted: 16:17:17 18/01/2010
Good chapters
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#64 Posted: 16:19:14 18/01/2010 | Topic Creator
thanks
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#65 Posted: 19:12:49 18/01/2010
Jesus is cruel... You don't torture kids.
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#66 Posted: 19:18:07 18/01/2010 | Topic Creator
relax Appoloin wasn't harmed that badly.
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#67 Posted: 19:18:09 18/01/2010
just shup your face observer. get out
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#68 Posted: 19:23:56 18/01/2010 | Topic Creator
hey be nice... we're supposed to love our enemies...
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#69 Posted: 19:30:39 18/01/2010
I'm sorry, but i aint the greatest Christian around. to me, there are still flaws in the bible.
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#70 Posted: 19:34:58 18/01/2010 | Topic Creator
ok, well just try to not argue.
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#71 Posted: 20:03:55 18/01/2010
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#72 Posted: 20:05:39 18/01/2010 | Topic Creator
i wasn't saying that.
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#73 Posted: 20:05:52 18/01/2010
You dam well know there was a hidden intention
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#74 Posted: 20:07:26 18/01/2010 | Topic Creator
guys stop arguing if you want to argue start PMing eachother.
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#75 Posted: 20:15:11 18/01/2010
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#76 Posted: 22:25:15 18/01/2010 | Topic Creator
of course not.
Chapter 16, Vepar was having a dream, *dream* a female demon and a male demon were quickly running through Heaven, it was night and they were running towards hell. a group of angels were flying after them. male demon: "come on Lilith. they're gaining on us!" Lilith: "Aym we're not going to make it!" Aym: "we must hurry!" the 2 demons continued running. the angels captured Lilith and pinned her to the ground, Aym turned around. Aym: "Lilith NO!" Lilith: "Aym! save yourself!" Aym tried to run away but some angels pinned him to the ground too. the 2 demons were chained up and dragged into the Temple. the angels threw them in front of Jesus. the demons looked at him. Aym: "please have mercy-..." Jesus: "SILENCE!" the 2 demons flinched in fear. Jesus: "why have you come back!? you were banished from Heaven!" Lilith: "please... all we wanted to do was bring our child to you so he wouldn't have to grow up in hell." Jesus: "you lie!... i see no child!" Aym: "we put him in a basket and he's going upstream in the river of life." Jesus: "one of you bring me the child..." an angel left. Jesus: "and as for you 2!" the demons cowered in fear. Jesus: "angels feel free to kill them slowly..." the angels took Aym and Lilith away. they were screaming and begging for mercy as they were being dragged away. *end dream* Vepar wakes up in shock. he's breathing heavily. Jesus: "Vepar are you alright?" Vepar looks at Jesus in fear for a moment but then Vepar calms down, Vepar: "Master you weren't the one to kill my parents. were you?" Jesus: "of course not. why would you ask me that?" Vepar: "because i have a nightmare where angels captured my parents and you told the angels to kill my parents." Jesus: "i would never do that... don't believe that dream. you know me too well to think that i killed your parents." Vepar: "i'm sorry for accusing you Master." Jesus: "that's alright. i forgive you." Vepar went back to sleep. next chapter coming tomorrow. |
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#77 Posted: 17:59:01 19/01/2010
OK...
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#78 Posted: 22:21:25 19/01/2010 | Topic Creator
Chapter 17,
the next day Vepar and Angie were walking to school together. Angie noticed that Vepar looked pretty tired. Angie: "Vepar you look tired... how come?" Vepar: "i was plagued by nightmares all night." Angie: "about what?" Vepar: "they were about my parents being captured by angels and tortured to death." Angie: "i know what happen to your parents. the Master told me the the other demons tortured them to death." Vepar: "yeah that's what i was told too..." they walked into the school and went down a few hallways. Angie: "so see you in class." they both went their separate ways. Vepar went to his locker and there was a note sticking out of it. Vepar: "oh great. i hope this is a letter of apology from Appoloin." he took the note and read it. Vepar: *reading* "meet me at the back of the school at the end of class. you're going to pay for what happen to me you evil demon... P.S. i'm glad about what happen to your parents. the same thing is going to happen to you once i'm through with you." Vepar looked to his left and saw Appoloin standing there. Appoloin: "you are going down. you better watch yourself." Appoloin walks away. Vepar growled and crushed the note in his hand and threw it to the ground. he walked into the classroom and sat in his seat. Dina began to teach the class. a few hours later Dina notices that Vepar was asleep. Dina: "Vepar, wake up." Vepar was snoring now. Dina: "VEPAR!" Vepar woke up startled. Dina: "well i'm glad you are awake." Vepar: "i'm sorry. i didn't get much sleep last night..." Dina: "well don't fall asleep again." Vepar: "yes sir." Dina continues teaching for a few more minutes. Dina: "ok well it's time for you all to go home... don't forget your homework tonight is to memorize one verse from the Bible and tomorrow you will say it to the class." everyone walked out of the classroom. Angie noticed Vepar was going in another direction. Angie: "Vepar where are you going?" Angie follows him. Vepar: "i'm going to the back of the school to fight Appoloin." Angie: "a... a fight?... Vepar no... you don't want to fight him..." Vepar: "why Angie? why shouldn't i?" Angie: "because you'll upsent Jesus." Vepar: "right now i'm not too concerned about that... all i want to do is crush that little son of a gun Appoloin for what he said to me!" Vepar walked outside to the back of the school, he saw Appoloin standing there. next chapter coming tomorrow. |
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#79 Posted: 23:00:18 20/01/2010
Hmm, I don't think Vepar should do that
and to think that this topic was moved. Vepar was a demon but in a dragon form right? Well, I guess that's not a big enough reason why.
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#80 Posted: 23:18:45 20/01/2010 | Topic Creator
yes Vepar is in a dragon form
i know Chapter 18, Vepar walked towards Appoloin in anger. a crowd started to gather around them watching. Appoloin: "demon you are going to pay!" Vepar: "pay for what!? you started this whole fight!" Appoloin: "demons belong in hell! because that's where the lowest of the low are supposed to be!" Vepar: "i tried to be nice to you but now you're going down!" Appoloin: "HA! i'd like to see you try!" Vepar punched him in the jaw. Appoloin got up. the crowd started to chant. crowd: "fight, fight, fight, fight, fight..." Appoloin threw a punch but missed, Vepar clawed him in the shoulder tearing skin. Appoloin gripped his shoulder in pain, he took his hand off and saw that he was bleeding. Appoloin ran at Vepar and tries to punch him, Vepar dodges and hits Appoloin in the back with his tail. Appoloin lays in the ground. Vepar: "had enough?" Appoloin gets up and tries to punch him but Vepar bit Appoloin's hand. Vepar's sharp teeth and fangs going deep into Appoloin's hand. Appoloin screams in pain. Appoloin: "let go!.... LET GO!.... I GIVE UP!!" Vepar let go of Appoloin's hand. Appoloin looked at his hand, it was bleeding badly. Vepar goes over to Appoloin and punches him knocking him out. the crowd is silent. Angie was in the crowd too, she was shocked to see what Vepar had done. suddenly some people in the crowd stepped aside to let someone through, it was Jesus. Jesus: "Vepar i can't believe you went through with this. how could you not care about upsetting me?" Vepar said nothing. Jesus went over to Appoloin and healed him, Appoloin gets up. Appoloin: "Master that demon should be sent to hell for what he did to me." Jesus: "i am not sending him to hell. now both of you come with me..." Jesus walks through the crowd and towards the Temple. Vepar and Appoloin follow him. next chapter coming tomorrow. |
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#81 Posted: 05:23:49 21/01/2010
if anyone of them is going to be sent to hell its Appoloin, not vepar
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#82 Posted: 19:49:44 21/01/2010
Good chapter
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#83 Posted: 00:03:05 22/01/2010 | Topic Creator
thanks,
Chapter 19, at the Temple, Jesus sat in his throne. Vepar and Appoloin were standing in front of him. Vepar: "Master are you going to send Appoloin to hell?" Jesus: "no... but you both will receive the same consequence for your sin." Appoloin: "what are you going to do?" Jesus: "since you both have a problem with being around eachother i'm going to put you in the same room until you 2 learn to get along and tolerate one another." Vepar: "alright Master. all i want to do is get along and be accepted..." Jesus: "i know.... you both aren't coming back here unless you learn to get along." suddenly Vepar and Appoloin were in a white room. Appoloin: "where are we?" Jesus' voice: "you are in purgatory." Vepar: "but i thought purgatory was supposed to be bigger." Jesus' voice: "it is... but this is a smaller version. now don't expect me to let you out until you 2 settle this quarrel." Vepar and Appoloin sat down on opposite sides of the room. Appoloin: "this is all your fault demon." Vepar: "my fault? i just wanted to be friends but then you attack me with words." Appoloin: "you don't deserve respect. you're a demon. the lowest of the low!" Vepar stood up enraged, he walked towards Appoloin, suddenly chains came out of the wall and came around Vepar's wrists and the chains pulled him back near the wall. Appoloin stood up and walked towards Vepar in an angry way, chains came out of the wall and wrapped around Appoloin's wrists and pulled him near the opposite wall. Jesus' voice: "no fighting... i sent you 2 here to stop the fighting." Vepar: "he's right Appoloin. we should stop fighting." Appoloin: "maybe you're right demon. fighting you has brought me nothing but trouble." Vepar: "yeah... so how about it. are we friends?" Appoloin: "yes..." Appoloin smiled warmly at Vepar for the first time. Vepar smiled back. the chains around their wrists disappeared and they were back in Heaven. they were back in the Temple. Jesus: "well i'm glad you have settled this feud." Vepar: "yes... fighting got us nowhere." Appoloin: "yeah but this whole friend thing is going to take some getting used to." Vepar: "i'm sure we'll make it work." Appoloin: "well i have to go home now... see you around." Appoloin walked out of the Temple. Vepar looks at Jesus. Vepar. "i'm glad that fight between me and Appoloin is over." Jesus: "me too. i really don't like to see fights especially when you're on the same side... now don't you have homework to do?" a Bible appears floating in the air in front of Vepar. Vepar took it. Vepar: "thank you Master..." Vepar sat down on the pillow next to Jesus' throne and began reading. next chapter coming tomorrow. |
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#84 Posted: 05:19:17 22/01/2010
that was a quick change but i think that he will get more trouble soon
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#85 Posted: 13:06:06 22/01/2010 | Topic Creator
why do you think that?
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#86 Posted: 13:07:49 22/01/2010
i dont know, i just have a felling of it, and it wouldnt be a good story without some trouble anyway
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#87 Posted: 14:46:29 22/01/2010 | Topic Creator
i think i have an idea on how i could make that happen...
Chapter 20, Appoloin walked through the city. Appoloin: "i've got to get rid of that demon. but how? i can't just kill him... i've got to take a different approach..." Appoloin walks out of the city and looks toward the gates of Heaven. Appoloin: "maybe i could give him back to his own kind where he belongs." Appoloin walks toward the gates of Heaven, he walks through them and enters hell. he walks through hell nervously, suddenly a demons comes out of nowhere and pins him to the ground and chains him up. demon: "the master will be pleased when i bring you to him." the demon drags him into lucifer's lair, the demon enters lucifer's room. lucifer: "you better have a good reason for disturbing me!" demon: "i do... look." the demon throws Appoloin in front of lucifer. lucifer: "a young angel... i'm going to have fun extracting information from you... take him to the torture chamber!" Appoloin: "NO!... wait!... i am willing to give you information!" lucifer: "you're willing to betray Heaven?" Appoloin: "yes..." lucifer: "well what is it you'll tell me?" Appoloin: "there is a demon in Heaven... he's a child and his name is Vepar... his parents sent him to Heaven while he was only an infant..." lucifer: "let me see for myself..." a crystal ball appears in lucifer's hand, an image of Vepar appears in the ball. Appoloin: "yeah that's him..." lucifer: "hmmm you appear to be telling the truth..." suddenly angels came into the room and one of them grabbed Appoloin and the angels flew away with Appoloin. they went back to Heaven, the angels walked into the Temple. they threw Appoloin in front of Jesus. Jesus: "i cannot believe you would betray me and Vepar all because of hatred!" Appoloin: "wait i can explain." Jesus: "well explain yourself." Appoloin said nothing. Jesus: "i thought so..." Appoloin: "are you going to send me to hell?" Jesus: "no... but i am going to punish you..." Appoloin: "how?" Jesus: "i can't think of a more horrible punishment than to transform you into the creature you despise the most." Appoloin: "no..... you don't mean that!?" Jesus: "yes... that!" Appoloin: "no... NO!... please anything but that!" Appoloin was engulfed in light, the light disappeared and Appoloin was transformed into a demon. the chains that were around him disappeared and he stood up, he looked at himself. Appoloin: "i'm a demon!... no!..." Appoloin kneels in front of Jesus and begins to cry. Appoloin: "please change me back!... i can't live like this! PLEASE!!!" Jesus: "i'm going to change you back once you live life as a demon for a while... take him to his parents and tell them what happen." an angel took Appoloin away. Jesus looked at the other angels. Jesus: "make sure Vepar has a body guard at all times. he's in danger now." Vepar: "what kind of danger?" Jesus: "demons could come to Heaven and kidnap you. but as long as you have a guard watching you at all times you should be alright." Vepar got up and hugged Jesus in fear. Vepar: "i'm so scared..." Jesus picked Vepar up and sat him down on his lap and hugged him. Jesus: "it's alright nothing is going to happen to you." Vepar hugs Jesus. in hell, lucifer looks into the crystal ball and sees Vepar in Jesus' arms. lucifer: "oh look at him cuddling up to that tyrant. it's disgusting. he has no idea what it means to be a demon...but i'll get him onto my side one way or another." the image in the crystal ball disappears. next chapter coming today or tomorrow. |
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#88 Posted: 16:38:26 22/01/2010
Nice chapters
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#89 Posted: 16:41:14 22/01/2010 | Topic Creator
thank you.
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#90 Posted: 17:10:03 22/01/2010
i hope appoloin has learnt a lesson now, a fitting punishment too
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#91 Posted: 23:24:55 22/01/2010 | Topic Creator
yeah, i know.
Chapter 21, Vepar fell asleep on the pillow near the throne, Vepar was having a dream, *dream* Aym and Lilith were standing in front of Vepar. Aym: "Vepar it's us your parents. we're alive." Lilith: "Jesus didn't want you to know this because he wanted to keep you away from the truth and your destiny.." Vepar: "how can i find you?" Aym: "find us in the highest room in the tallest building in hell..." an image of lucifer's lair appeared *end dream* Vepar woke up. it was morning. a big strong looking angel was standing in front of him. angel: "good morning Vepar. i am Micheal. the Master commanded that i be your body guard." Vepar looked towards the throne, Jesus wasn't there. Vepar looked at Micheal. Vepar: "where is the Master?" Micheal: "the Master had to go to earth to heal an ill child. he'll be back." Vepar stood up, Vepar: "are you going to be following me around all day?" Michael: "yes. that's what the Master told me to do." Vepar: "i'm going to school now..." Vepar walks out of the Temple, Micheal follows him. Vepar walks into the school and into the classroom, Vepar sits down at his desk, Angie is sitting right behind him, Angie: "why did Micheal come to school with you?" Vepar: "the Master commanded him to guard me." Appoloin came into the classroom wearing a paper bag over his head, the horns that he had were sticking through the bag. Vepar: "Appoloin. why are you wearing a bag over your head?" Appoloin: "because i don't want anyone to see me as a demon." Appoloin walks over and sits at his desk at the back of the room. Vepar: "poor angel, he's embarrassed..." the school day went on as usual, except Appoloin wasn't that talkitive and didn't bother Vepar at all. when it was recess everyone went outside to the playground. Appoloin was sitting by himself on a bench. Vepar walked over to him, Vepar: "Appoloin. can i borrow that paper bag for a while?" Appoloin: "why?" Vepar: "if you give it to me i may go away forever. you see my parents came to me in a vision last night and told me to meet them in hell-..." Appoloin stood up. Appoloin: "say no more... here." Appoloin gave Vepar the bag. Vepar: "thanks... now walk by Micheal, he'll think i'm you and i can sneak away." Appoloin walks by Micheal, Micheal follows him, Vepar sneaks out of the playground wearing the paper bag. he goes towards Heaven's gates. next chapter coming tomorrow. |
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#92 Posted: 14:49:42 23/01/2010
nice chapter
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#93 Posted: 19:27:12 23/01/2010 | Topic Creator
thanks,
Chapter 22, Vepar walks into hell, he takes off the paper bag and drops it onto the ground. he walks farther into hell. he sees some fire pits as he walks past them. Vepar: "why would my parents live down here i will never understand. Heaven is a much nicer place." he sees a giant tall building in the distance. Vepar: "that must be the building my parents were talking about." he walked towards it and went inside. it had a lot of room but it was almost empty. Vepar walked farther in and saw a staircase, he walked up the stairs. there were many floors but Vepar went to the highest floor, he walked down a long hallway and saw a door. Vepar didn't see any other doors in that hallway, he opened that one door and looked around the room. there was a bed which was a big stab of rock, there was a large table made out of stone with a bunch of stone chairs around it, and on the table was what appeared to be a map of Heaven. Vepar looked at the back of the room and saw a large throne with a big red dragon sitting in it. Vepar: "excuse me... i'm looking for my parents. do you know where they are? they told me to meet them here." dragon: "come in child. and close the door behind you." Vepar came in the room and closed the door. he looked at the dragon. Vepar: "where are my parents?" dragon: "your parents are dead child." Vepar: "but... i saw them in a vision... they told me to meet them here..." dragon: "no.... i gave you that vision so i can bring you here." Vepar: "who are you?" dragon: "i am lucifer... i was your parents brother and their master." Vepar: "who killed my parents?" lucifer: "Jesus... he killed them and kept it secret all these years." Vepar: "what?... no he couldn't have killed them." lucifer: "he did!... and he lied to you... but instead of telling you the whole story i will show you what happen..." a crystal ball appeared in lucifer's hand, lucifer: "come closer so you can see." Vepar slowly walked towards lucifer. lucifer: "look into the crystal ball and see the truth about what really happen on the day you were brought to Heaven..." Vepar looks into the crystal. i'm too lazy to write more now, so next chapter coming sometime today or tomorrow. |
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#94 Posted: 15:01:48 24/01/2010
lucifer is a liar, lucifer killed his parents, jesus didnt
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#95 Posted: 18:16:24 24/01/2010 | Topic Creator
yes that's true.
Chapter 23, an image came in the crystal. *image* Aym and Lilith were in chains in front Jesus in the Temple. Aym: "please have mercy on us. all we wanted is to bring our child here so that he'll never have to grow up in hell." Jesus: "where is your child!?" Lilith: "we sent him afloat in a basket down the river of life." the ground in front of Aym and Lilith opened up into a deep pit and flames shot out of the pit. Jesus: "throw them in!" some angels dragged Aym and Lilith towards the pit. Aym: "please have mercy!! we're sorry for everything!!" Lilith: "just spare our child if not us." Jesus: "oh don't worry your child will be in safe hands." Aym: "please don't throw us in there! have mercy!" Jesus: "throw them in!!" the angels threw Aym and Lilith into the pit, they landed in the flames and screamed in pain. they begged for mercy. Jesus looked down at them. he then looked at an angel. Jesus: "come let us find their child." the angel and Jesus left the Temple. they found a basket by the river bank. a demon baby was in it. angel: "should i kill it Master?" the angel got out his sword. Jesus: "no!... i will raise it. then when it's older i will force it to worship me for eternity." Jesus picked up the baby and held it in his arms. Jesus: "and if it refuses i will torture it until it does..." Jesus went back to the Temple with the baby, the fire pit was still open and screams of pain could be heard. Jesus walks over and looks into the pit, Aym and Lilith were still alive. Jesus: "look, your child is safe." Aym and Lilith saw the baby. Lilith: "please have mercy on him! he's just a baby!" Jesus let go of the baby and it fell towards the flames. but then it stopped falling and magically floated up into Jesus arms. Jesus: "don't worry he'll be safe as long as he worships me forever!... and this is the last time you will see your child again!" the pit closed up. the pit filled up with lava, Aym and Lilith suffered for a few hours before dying. *image disappears* Vepar: "was that really my parents?" lucifer: "yes... and that baby was really you." Vepar: "i... i can't believe this... Jesus really killed my parents!" lucifer: "he not only killed them. he tortured them for hours and they died a slow and painful death." Vepar: "can that crystal tell the future?" lucifer: "yes." Vepar: "show me my future if i stay with Jesus." lucifer held out the crystal and Vepar looked into it. *image* Vepar was an adult. he was bowing before Jesus. Vepar looked weak and he had horrible burn marks all over his body. he was slowly bowing before Jesus. Vepar looked skinny. Jesus: "bow faster!" Vepar: "i'm sorry. i'm just so weak and in pain." Jesus: "i don't want excuses! bow faster!!" fire came down and burnt Vepar's entire back and wings, Vepar screams in pain, the fire stops coming. Vepar lays in the floor groaning in agony. Jesus: "praise my name in prayer." Vepar starts to pray. Jesus: "not good enough!" chains come out of the ground and chain Vepar to the ground. fire comes out of the ground and burns Vepar's entire body. Vepar screams in pain. a big smile comes on Jesus' face as he sees Vepar struggle to get free, the flames become bigger and hotter. Vepar continues to struggle but the chains wrap around him tighter. *image disappears* Vepar takes off the diamond cross necklace he had on him and throws it on the ground enraged. lucifer: "you want revenge. you want to avenge yourself and your parents don't you?" Vepar: "i do." lucifer smiled at Vepar. next chapter coming today or tomorrow. |
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#96 Posted: 17:00:23 25/01/2010
Oh no, not good D8
Good chapters
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#97 Posted: 21:14:13 25/01/2010 | Topic Creator
thanks,
Chapter 24, lucifer: "i can help you." Vepar: "how?" lucifer: "if you join me and swear your loyalty to me." suddenly the door to the entrance of the room flew open and a bight light was shinning in the doorway. Jesus appears in the middle of the light. Vepar looks at him in anger. Jesus: "Vepar lucifer is a liar. he killed your parents not me. if your parents would have come to me i would have forgiven them." Vepar: "lucifer showed me proof that it was you who killed them!" Jesus: "that crystal is just a trick. lucifer tricked you... i would never do any of those things to you or your parents." Vepar: "no you tricked me. all these years you lied to me! GO AWAY! you murderer!!" Jesus: "fine... i'll go... but as soon as you're ready to come back i'll be waiting for you with open arms... and so will Angie." Jesus disappears. Vepar looks at lucifer. Vepar: "so how do we go about getting revenge." lucifer: "don't go thinking that you can accomplish this vengence without training. you need to learn how to be a demon." Vepar: "i went to school in Heaven." lucifer: "Heaven can only teach you how to be weak and to worship that tyrant." Vepar: "so when do i start my training?" lucifer: "right now. but i won't be training you." Vepar: "well who will?" next chapter coming tomorrow. |
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#98 Posted: 07:36:00 26/01/2010
Good chapter
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#99 Posted: 21:40:12 26/01/2010 | Topic Creator
thanks,
Chapter 25, lucifer stood up and walked to the door and opened it, there was a demon guard standing down the hallway. lucifer: "bring Deumos, Asmoday and Bael to me." the demon walks away. Vepar: "Deumos, Asmoday, Bael why do those names seem familiar?" lucifer: "they are the only demons that train young demons." Vepar: "i feel like i know them from somewhere but never mind." lucifer walked up to Vepar. lucifer: "since you joined me you'll recite an oath of loyalty to me." Vepar: "alright." lucifer: "repeat these words: lucifer you are my god and my master, i serve only you, i obey only you and if i stray from you you have the right to do what you will to me, for i am you humble servant, i am nothing compared to you my god." Vepar: "lucifer you are my god and my master, i serve only you, i obey only you and if i stray from you you have the right to do what you will to me, for i am you humble servant, i am nothing compared to you my god." lucifer: "good, and from now on you will refer to me as master." Vepar: "yes master." suddenly Deumos, Asmoday and Bael came into the room. Deumos: "you called us master?" lucifer: "yes... there is a young demon i want you to train." Bael: "great. where is the little guy?" Asmoday: "he's over there you dumb@$$." Asmoday points at Vepar. Bael: "Asmoday don't *****ING curse in front of children." Bael then sees Vepar. Bael: "oh. hey there young demon." Deumos walks over to Vepar. Deumos: "don't mind those 2. now come on let's go." Deumos led Vepar out of the room. Asmoday and Bael followed. In Heaven, Jesus was sitting on his throne thinking about what happen, then Angie walks into the Temple. Angie: "Master i can't find Vepar anywhere." Jesus: "Angie... Vepar is in hell. he joined lucifer." Angie began to cry, she hugged Jesus and sobbed. Jesus hugged her too. Jesus: "Vepar is just confused now. he'll come back to us don't worry." next chapter coming tomorrow. |
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#100 Posted: 16:26:45 27/01/2010
Good chapter
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