darkSpyro

please read its good
(tell me how to spell arkaenyan)
if there are skylanders in this they will just be chop chop drill Sargent or fan skylanders.
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chapter 1
Fred had just finished his beta test it was working he tried it out he want to see how far it could dig
it couldn't he tried the jet pack it couldn't lift him he was to heavy he didn't want to destroy it though it was his first working invention he was far behind the other inventors.

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Alex wanted to be a knight to protect the arkaenyans but he had to make his own armor but he was rubish at making stuff he was going to ask his friend fred he was wasn't that good either but he was better then alex.

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Yeah I'll try to make it longer

Also need fan skylanders or chars

Chapter 2
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So Alex ran as fast as he could to Fred he got there knocked on the window ( it was like an elvator underground it moved up and down) it moved up
Fred opened the door
Yes said Alex
I thought I got bigger said Fred, so when did you install this
Today why
I haven't seen you for awhile I thought you where busy
It took me some time
you mean a lot of time
So do you want to see my new robot
Sure if it doesn't explode on me
It was just two wires mixed around
It still sent me to hospital
Ok but do you want to see my robot
Fine


So whats it name said Alex looking at the robot
I don't know let's make one
Ok you first
Iron driller
No what a bout red Sargent
Neh gold general
No what about hummm
Ehh
Humm
Ehh
Humm
Ehh
I ve got it drill sargent
Yeah so why did you come here

Thanks

Well I came here to tell you I need some armour can you make it said Alex
Ok arkeanyan red and gold or what said Fred
No can I have blue and gold
Ok
Thanks oh I got you a gift
What is it
A goldfish
Oh that's awsome lets see
Here it is
I don't think it has enough room in that bowl
Really its 20x bigger than it
Yes but not when I use my lazier to enlarge it
Ok why
Because I need to test my machine
Fine
See yah tommorow I might have finished your armor by then

Chap 4 tomorrow
Well have have you done my armor said Alex
Yep said Fred
Cool lets see
Here
Awsome
I know I think you need a knight name
Hmm let me think
Slicer
No
Diced
No
Thricer
No
Chopper
No but its close
Hmm chop
No
Chop chop
Yeah I like it
Ok I need a sword
Here take this it's not perfect though
I need a catchphrase
Hmm how about slice and dice
Yeah it works
Got any ideas for new inventions
Yeah a time portal
Okay I'll see what I can do
Thanks

5 to the future 5

I made the potal said Fred
Yay lets go forward to 2012 said Alex
Bit random but ok please pull that lever

boom
Ahh screamed spyro noticing a purple portal behind gill grunt
What spyro don't like my dancing shouted gill grunt

squash
Ouch I think we landed on a gillman

"Ouch, I think we landed on a Gillman".
LOL

Thanks

Thanks

Lol
Gillgrunt dancing

Thanks

Well at least It feels like a Gillman but it looks messed up said Alex
Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhh
Did you here that said fred
Yep It sounds like a good time to test out my sword and armor said Alex
Let's go then said Fred
They saw a green dragon getting beat up by some fire daemons they decide to help him
Slice and dice said Alex when he chopped the first one in half
Thanks chop-chop said the dragon
Your welcome ehh said Alex
Names whipvine said whipvine
Die said Fred as he killed the second
Slice and dice said Alex when he killed the last
Thanks said whipvine
Wait how did you know my nickname said Alex
Your chop chop the skylander right one of the last arkaenyans said whipvine

Poor whipvine!
:0!

glad you like it

whats the skylanders said alex
your kidding right said whipvine
no where from the past and we invented a time machine said alex
oh so i shoudnt tell you anything it might mess up your future right said whipvine
yeah said fred
wait i didnt notice you before you look like someone i know well at least your armor does said whipvine
a fire spirit jumped on fred

meanwhile

spyro was telling the other skylanders about the portal they rushed to find gill grunt eon blocked them dont go we could interfere with our future
the tech element wanted to go so did the ice and mud but the rest didnt
the skylanders decided some of them would go but not alll of the they opened there book
life: camo,stump smash, tree rex, zook,jooz(a another one of zook species) tree teratops (another giant which can fly)arbo they chose tree rex and camo
fire: ignitor,eruptor,flameslinger,lavaqua(zook species),flame burner(a giant blue dragon) they chose flameslinger and flame burner
ice: slam bam,glacier( ice dragon who is camos brother) trice opolis (ice hydra with tree heads) they all went
mud:terrafin, noah(deleted chinese dragon) giga bite ( giant sand worm with massive teeth) mudik ( the last of the four zook species) noah and giga bite went
water:zap, cyclops slime(look him up ) vapor ( a water type eruptor) gill grunt, gurgle fin,wham shell, goldfin (a giant fish in a goldfish bowl on wheels) gurgle fin and goldifn went
none one else but spyro and dark spyro and cynder went

good job!

thanks

Chapter something or other
Woah you are beastly you look like a fire daemon said alex
Ignitor whisper whipvine to himself
What said fred/ignitor
Nothing said whipvine
Tell me said both Alex and Fred
No it could mess up your future or whatever said whipvine
Fine they both said
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Ok guys find gill grunt said gurgle fin
squash
Found him said slam bam
Thats grea- said gurgle fin
And he's gonna need more medical attention than we thought interrupted Noah
Sorry said slam bam

LOL! Slam Bam could have killed Gurglefin!

Quote: TheSpyrofan12

killed Gurglefin!

you mean gill grunt right

back at the ruins/core

skylanders listen up shouted eon
yes shouted the skylanders
we need to find the new members said eon
who shall go said hugo
me said P-lague camo drobot zap and bash

hmm guys lets make a team called team mystersious sky said whipvine
why said alex
because i got a feeling where gonna get into a lot of battles said whipvine
why repeated alex
look around you said whipvine
oh i see said alex
a bunch of bambzookas where in a circle around them
yep also i feel i havent spoken for a chapter so i decided to speak said fred


gill grunt woke up he saw slam bam ontop of him he felt he was in a lot of pain
get off him if your sorry then slam bam noah was shouting
oops said slam bam
where am i said gill grunt
where you were before you were atacked said spyro

wait now i remeber who atacked gill grunt it was chop chop and ignitor lets get them said spyro charge
yeah said all the others
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ok theese are the right chosen ones for the job said plague
haha lets have a battle before you guys join the skylanders said kaos' floatting head
call all the skylanders said p-lague
when the skylanders got there they started to fight kaos
ive worked it out were losing said glum shanks to kaos
still we have killed some said kaos
some of the skylanders were killed others were banished
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whipvine see you in the future said alex
bye cried whipvine thanks for proctecting me

Quote: dangernoah2

Quote: TheSpyrofan12

killed Gurglefin!

you mean gill grunt right

Whoops, sorry. I got confused.

lol thats funny i acidently but slam bam instead of gill grunt

Your story is good, but you really need to fix up your grammar. Good grammar gives a better reading experience.

Putting in details gives someone an image of what the scene looks like.

I'll show an example.

Here's the orginal
Quote: dangernoah2

wait now i remeber who atacked gill grunt it was chop chop and ignitor lets get them said spyro charge
yeah said all the others

And here's with example of what I was talking about.

Spyro quickly lifted his head, he just realized something.

"Wait I remember who attacked Gill Grunt!" Spyro exclaimed, "It was Chop Chop and Ignitor!"

Everyone was stocked by this, but soon they're shock was replaced by anger.

"Let's get them!" Spyro yelled in anger.

"Yeah!" Everyone shouted in unison.


Also remember to write in paragraphs and every single time someone talks to start a new paragraph. I hope this helps.

thanks ill try its just hard to remeber

This is a good fanfic Doing great!

thanks

thanks update soon

wats a alex

alex is a person

whipvine was standing under sign which said join the skysoldiers he was giving out leaflets which said miss the skylanders want to avenge them then you should join the skysoldiers in 3 hours theese creatures had joined
Bender the catterpillar
zelda the dragoness
slasher the hedgehog
gillshock the gillman
robofreak the robot dragon
Frostbite the pheonix dragoness
Widget the ferret
Sgt. Stinger the bee man
Nightwing the owl bat
jin the storm genie
leo the dragon lion
furor the dragon
twin dragons dark shadow and furor who was named after the other furor

meanwhile
noah the dragon was running from kaos while draging p-lague along the floor because he was knocked out by kaos
and glacier the dragon was following him run he shouted

Good.

Hey that's better, still not quite right, but is still in an improvement. Good job. Since you took my advice everyone now has a more clear mental image of what the scene looks like. Keep up the good work. By working hard you'll improve more.

fred and alex where missing whipvine so they went forward in time to see him again
whipvine whats wrong shouted alex
alex fred why are you here shouted whipvine
we wanted to see what your doing who are theese people said alex
there the skysoldiers and im there leader said whipvine proudly
what you made why
because where searching for the skylanders there missing...

Good.

So... When's the next chapter?

nowish
lets got to the safe house said whipvine
kay said fred

they walked and walked and walked

meanwhile
noah we need to take p-lague to the safe house

Good.

@spyrofan12
noah p-lague and glacier walked in to the safe house and saw the others
who are you said noah
no time to explain said whipvine

vac eagle and alchemist got out of 2 of the beds
ok ok one thing why is there a spoiler in the roof also do you know how to fix this said noah
yes i can create a potion to another world which lets us find out how they solved a problem like this said alchemist
also dont brake the fourth wall vac eagle broke the other three continued alchemist

4 hours later
ive finished the potion said alchemist
they all drank then fainted

four creatures walked in and drank some posion ka faint