darkSpyro

Hi everyone, I'm posting a fan fic that i mad myself. I made it for JAK & Daxter Fans, Spyro fans, and Ratchet and Clank fans. It's a fanfic with a these characters in it. I've only made the first chapter though. If any of you have any suggestions to add to my fan fic, don't be afraid to tell me, OK?

Mmmm...... I wonder what'll happen.

I don't have a title for this. I can't think of one.

Jak was standing on the shore of his home, letting the waves lick his toes. He was a very young man, only the age of eighteen. His green hair ruffled in the wind, making it stand striaght up at odd angles. His ears were just like his hair; very long and pointy, like two great swords coming out of his head. His great blue eyes stared out into the horizon. One look into his eyes would make and girl fall for him.

He turned around after he snapped out of gazing. "Dax? You almost done?", he yelled.

A little oragne creature popped out of the sand. A couple of crabs were clamped to his tail. He looked at Jak and grinned. This was Daxter; Jak's best friend. He was an ottsel, a mix between a weasel and an otter. Two years ago, Daxter was a human, just like Jak. but when the both of them went to go and play on the forbidden Misty Island, Daxter fell into a pool of Dark Eco, and came back as a bright orange ottsel.

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Daxter hopped onto Jak's shoulder and walked up to Samos's hut. Samos was a really old, short wizard, with a log on his head. He was a green sagewith extraordinary powers through green eco. Jak lived with him because he has no other family.
They could see Samos flying out of the hut to them.

"Here comes the great wrinkle wonder.", muttered Daxter in his ear.

"Ah! Finally!", said Samos. He snatched the crabs from Daxter's tail. "I'm starved! Kiera and I have put together a teleporting rift. That way we can explore the unexplored parts of the world!" He walked up to the hut and Jak and Daxter followed. When Jak reached the door, Daxter slithered off Jak's shoulders and went to eat the crabs with Samos. Before Jak could set foot in the hut, a very pretty girl with spunky blue hair stood in the way. The peircings along her long ears jingled with every move she took.

"Where have you two been!", she yelled. She looked a lite angry. Her hands were on her curvy hips, she always wore clothing htat revealed cleavage, midrift, and legs. Jak's heart began to beat very fast.

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Everytime he looked into her green eyes, he wanted to kiss her. "She's just a friend." , he thought.

"Just because you saved the world and all, doesn't mean you get to take the whole day off!", she continued.

Jak couldn't help noticing the dog tags she wore, getting stuck and unstuck between her cleavage when she moved.

"Daddy and I have been working on this rift together all day and all you did was spend the day at the beach!". Her face was blushed. Jak knew she didn't mean it. They were the beat of friends, and she got over it quickly.

"Now Keira, take it easy on the poor guy. He really did save the world by defeating the drak sages. He's been through a lot." Samos was talking through a stuffed mouth of crab.

"Ya hungry Jak?", asked Daxter. He was catching the crabs. The kept scuttling off the table.

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Jak shook his head. He really wasn't that hungry. Keira grabbed his arm, "Come on! i want to show you the rift!". She was smiling this time. Tehy left Samos and Daxterin the kitchen and went to the back room. It was a big room filled with nothing but gizmos and gadgets. Keira loved to invent things. She's a very good mechanic too. But in the middle of the room was a huge circular ring, sitting vertically on an platform with buttons.

"Well, here it is. The telportation rift.", she said. She closed the door behind her. Jak sat down on a empty bench.

"This is amazing." , said Jak. Keira sat right next to him, but she wasn't looking at the rift. She was looking at him.

"your amazing.", she said. Jak turned his head an looked into her green eyes. She was blushing and neither of them said a word.

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The glow form the sun made her face look so soft, the Jak couldn't help from touching her face. He could feel the heat radiating off her cheeks, becasue se was blushing so much. She moved a little closer to him and rested her hands on his muscular shoulders. Jak could feel a hard on coming. He moved closer to her face until thier noses were touching. He was still looking into her eyes. "This is it", he thought. "We're going to kiss for the first time!" He parted his lips and was starting to move in.

"WHOA!!! JAK!!! You are WAY to young to be doing ANY of that!", Daxter burst throught the door.

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Keira jumped up from the bench and started tinkering with her gadgets. Jak just sat there, staring at Daxter. He was so angry at him.

"Dammit Dax!!", yelled Jak. He got up and grabbed Daxter by the neck and started shaking him. "You interupt me every freakin' time!",he threw daxter so hard across the room, that he flew passed keira's ear and hit the wall with a thud. He slid all the way down the wall until he hit Keira's worktable. She gasped and picked him up in her arms and turned arund to face Jak. She looked flushed.

"JAK!", she yelled. "What did you do! You could've killed him!"

"I-I'm sorry..", stuttered Jak. "I just----". Jak was cut off whe Samos entered the room.

"Ready to take this baby for a spin?", asked Samos, rubbing his hand together.

Oh he was going to kill him Good chapter.

"But daddy! I thought you said the rift wouldn't be done until next month!", explained Keira. She was holding Daxter like a baby, stroking the fur on his head.

"Thoughts can be misleading Keira.", replied Samos. "Now, I need everyine to grb hold of eachother because were jumping in together!". Samos was pressing a combination of buttons and the inside if the ring looked like a purple swirling vortex. "Ready everyone?", yelled Samos. Jak grabbed ahold of Samos and Keira, but he wasn't quite ready because a huge, robotic monster was emerging from the rift.

"Daddy! Shut it off!", yelled Keira. The monster threw his arms around, knocking Samos threw the roof. Jak threw his arems around Keira to protect her but it was no use. The monster snatched Keira and Daxter away from Jak and went back into the rift. Jak stood there, infuriated of what just happened. "i didn't even have a chance to kiss her goobye", he thought.

"Give her back!", he yelled angrily, and he jumped through the rift after them.

Chapter 2 is under construction. Any ideas will indeed help. I don't know how soon. I have two more weeks of college and then i have a month off. I will then have time to work on this.

I must say, good first chapter
I don't really have any ideas however

Thank you.

Very goodd and i have to say i don't have any idea's either.

I'm still thinking of ideas for my second chapter.

One more day of school! Then i'm back to writing!

OK, I can wait

So when are you going to start the next chapter?! It's been AGES!

Hello?! Is anyone home!?

here it is! *drumroll* chapter 2. mind you, i`m pulling this out of my ass, only because i have good friends who inspire me. thanks cynder 19000.

please mind my mistakes, i`m typing this on my dsi. one letter at a time.

I don't mind. And thanks for typeing again! I was scared d52 would close it befor you got a chance to type more chaps!

Jak was in a swirling vortex pf blackness for a few minutes until a hole opened up into the darkness. He was relieved to see that. But on the same token, he wasn`t relieved to see a thousand rooftops getting closer to him. He was falling from the sky, into a metropolis like city. He almost got splattered by a flying pizza like ship. He was scared and he was getting closer to the ground. He didn`t know what to do.

SPLAT. Jak hit the ground really hard. A he could see was strang looking robots hovering around doing their day to day activities. Blackness start to sink in to his eyes. He couldn`t move.

Jak was flying through the air as if gravity defied him. Kiera was at his side, holding his hand. They soared through the clouds, laughing and smiling together. When he looked down, he could see a feild with green grass, speckeled with green trees. He looked back at Kiera. ~I love you~, said Jak.

Keira blushed. "Oh Jak.",she giggled. " You can be sooooo funny"

"Huh?", questioned Jak. Why is she laughing at the feelings i have for her?

He then felt his belly button begin to tug within itself. His head started to feel heavy and he was speeding away farther and farther away from keira. "KEIRA!" Blackness filled his head again.

OMG!!!!! I wonder whats going to happen!?

Jak tried to open his eyes but it felt like weights were attached to his eyes. So he only opened one. "What the hell?", he muttered. All he could see was a yellow tail with a furry tuft on the end of it, and a pair of runnung feet. He heard a lot of gunfire going on too. His eyes came into focus. People just like Jak, in red armour, were shooting at the guy carrying him. Jak turn his head the get a better vision of the guy carrying him. He had be, long, pointy, fuzzy ears. He was obviously running to safety with Jak.

Suddenly they both stopped and Jak was pulled off his shoulder and laid against the wall. "Stay right here buddy, i`m here for you." said the creature. He turned around and pulled out a gun, five times bigger than him and heaved it on his shoulder. He aimed it at the people that were shooting at him and pulled the trigger. A second later, a mushroom cloud rose into the sky and body parts flew every where. The creature that shot the gun, stood in the spot, surviving the million mile hour winds that came with it. Jak felt as if he were about to fuse with the wall.

The winds started to ease up until it was gone. Buildings surrounding them were ruined. The creature finnaly turned around and picked Jak back up and continued to run. "What`s your name?", asked Jak.

"Ratchet.", came the reply.

A few minutes later, they ended up at a fancy retro house. Ratchet opened the door and layed Jak on his couch. Ratchet sat on the floor next to him.

"Are you okay? You took a really big fall.", said Ratchet.

"Yeah. My name is Jak. Where am I?", asked Jak.

"Your on my home planet Boron. Currently, we have been under attack by people called Crimson Guards. I don't know why though.", said Ratchet.

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i'll continue the rest of the chapter later on tonight. i gotta go to the hospital because im really really sick. i won`t give up okay? I know what to write about now.

i need some feedback pleaze!

YES!!!!!

Sorry you have to go to the hospital. Hope you get better soon.

Awesome story! But the guards are spelled Krimson, not Crimson.

Get better soon!

Jeez, your good at this story. Nice.

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hey guys! i feel a lot better now. come to find out, i swallowed a spider in my sleep. i`m a mouth breather. so, now i`m on an antibiotic to keep me good. they wouldn`t let me bring my dsi in the hospital cuz they said is not sterile. anyways, heres the rest of chappy 2!

Jak sat up on the couch and looked around Ratchets` house. There were giant wrenches bigger than him hanging on the wall, one of them was even flaming. Peices of armour and weapons too. Ratchet broke the awkward silence. "Can i get you something to eat?", he asked.

Jaks attention snapped back to him. "Yeah! Thanks.", he replied.

Ratchet go up from his chair and went to the kitchen to get some food. Jak sat there, amazed at the objects hanging on the wall. A door creaked in the corner of the room. Jak looked at it. There wasn`t a light on inside it, yet there was a faint glow. He was really curious to see. Jak peeked over the couch to see what Ratchet was doing. He was trying to remove his tail from the drawer he smashed it in.

Quitley, Jak sneaked off to the door and creaked it open. Inside was an ordinary bedroom and there was a rift just like the one a Jak`s home sitting in it! He gasped. He crept in a little further. Sitting next to the rift, were bolts the size of suitcases. Jak reached out to touch one of them, but instead, he touched the roof.

"Curious for a secret stroll around my house are you?", asked Ratchet. Jak spun around. Ratchet was holding his plate of food.

"I-I-I-I-I", stuttered Jak. "Your rift. I-I`m terribly sorry for sneaking like that. It-I-It`s just-"

Ratchet cut him off and set his plate of food on the bed. He didn`t look angry, but rather scared. "How do you know about this rift?", Ratchet asked apprehensively.

Jak tried to calm down."I built a rift just like this back at my home. We used ancient precursor artifacts to build it. Something went wrong though." Jak managed to keep his eyes to his toes the whole time.

Ratchet jumped on to the bed and got in a comfy spot. He seemed to be really interested. "What happened?"

Jak was surprised Ratchet wanted to know more. He continued, "a monster came out of it and took some things very dearly from me." He was about to choke up. He missed Daxter, and Keira. That`s the only family he has. He heard s bunch of crunching after that. Ratchet was eating his food.

"Your in the same position i am." said ratchet through a mouth full of food. He finished chewing and swallowed. " The krimson guards took my best friend, Clank, away. He knew too much, so they took him away for experimentation. If i were to chase after him, they would come and kill me. That's whybyou saw the guards. i was trying to find clank, but i failed, and found you. I built this rift so i can get to Captian Quark. He knows how to get to clank. I built this using only the finest titanium bolts."

Jak looked up. "I have an idea. Why don`t we look for our friends together?"

"That sounds great.", replied Ratchet. But if you want to leave my house, you have to leave armed."

"Armed?", asked Jak.

"It's dangerous out there, and if the gaurds find out your with me, they will take you too.", said Ratchet. "I`ll let you have one of my guns."

Jak immediatly though of the nuke that Ratchet used earlier. "Can i use the one that you have?", asked Jak.

Ratchet nearly fell to the floor when he got off the bed. "WHAT?!? You cant have that one. That`s my baby. That cost me nearly a million bolts.", he spattered.

Jak looked to the ground again. "Well, what one can i borrow?"

"Come with me.", said Ratchet. They both left the room with the rift and whet too Ratchet`s room. Jaks eyes were as big as walnuts the minute he entered.

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Every inch of the wall was covered in guns of all shapes and sizes. He looked at a gun that was the size of a washing machine. There was an engraved plate underneath it. It said, THE RYNO. "WHhat`s the ryno do?", asked Jak.

Ratched poked his head out of the closet and said, "It spaeks for it`s self. Rip ya a new one." He came out of the closet with a gun. (looks like the shotgun from halo 3). "I haven`t finished it yet, but is shootable.", he said. He handed it to Jak.

"Wow. Thanks dude.", said Jak. He hooked it behind his back.

"No problem.", said Ratchet. Just then, the doorbell rang. Ratchets green eyes got really wide. " Stay right here okay?", he walked out of the room to answer the door. Jak peeked his head out to see.

"Hello?", asked Ratchet as he opened the door. A krimson guard was at the door.

"Your coming with us.", he said. He cocked his gun and shot Ratchet through the stomach. He hit the ground and the guard picked him up.

With all the strenght Ratchet could muster, he yelled, "JAK. RUN!"

i'll put up chapter 3 once people have read chappy 2 and when i get feedback also.

Kay'.

Im actually gonna reiveiw this time instead of rambling like a mindless idiot for you to continue.

Your wrting style makes me cheer in happyness X) It has proper spelling, it actully makes sense unlike most fanfiction...and well its nice to read somthing to do with Jak and Dax that isn't filled with mary sues, self inserts, and badly written romance. You my friend, rock.

excellent so far. actually believable, if the two stars ever appeared in the same game. continue please!

and the interesting thing i found... jak 3 was originally going to be like that. a face off between the two.

Great chapter! I wonder what thaey want with Ratchet, and are they going to remember Jak...

To Doomsong: really? wow! thank you.
Thank you to everyone who posted. I`ll try to get to chapter 3 tonight. I gotta go to school today and i wont be back till 8pm. I don`t know how much studies i`ll have. So it depends on what ive got going.

Okay.

Chapter 3

Jak quickly hid himself from view in Ratchet`s room. His friend that he just made was shot. He`s been taken somewhere. He`s not dead! He was still able to talk to me.

He sat on Ratchet`s bed for hours that night. Thinking about what he was going to do. Every once in a while, he would look a the swirling vortex on the rift. He heard the front door bang open. Jak jumped up from the bed a peeked carfully around the corner of the door way. I was another Krimson Guard, raiding the house. Holy ****! There`s a krimson guard in the house! What to do?

Jak pulled out the shotgun and cocked it. Hands trembling, he slowly opened the door with the end of his gun. The krimson guard was taking things off of the wall. This was making Jak very, very angry. He felt electricity zap through his body, and wanted to kill anything in his path. He looked at the guard again. He was looking at a rather large wrench a was swinging it around, breaking all of Ratchets things. This really set Jak to the limit. He was boiling on the inside to were is skin turned white and he had purple electricty coming off of him. He had turned into dark jak.

He ran out of the bedroom and got his shot gun ready."Hey you!", yelled Jak.

The Krimson guard stopped swinging the wrench and threw it aside. He got his gun ready also.

"Get your filthy hands off of my friends things, you rotten son of a *****!" , yelled Jak. He raised his gun and shot the Krimson Guard in the head. He fell to the ground in a lifeless heap.

AWSOME!!!!!!!!!!!

Jak suddenly resumed to normal and ran to the door and locked it. might as well take the armor a wear it. They won`t shoot me if I`m one of them.

He pulled the helmet off and what he saw underneath was enough to make him want to shoot himself. He had definitely lost the most dearest thing to him. He had shot Kiera.

Jak started to tear up. "Keira....". He was devastated. He sat down on the ground and took the rest of keira`s armour off. Crying all the way. He layed Keira`s head in his lap. "What have i done?" said Jak. He stroked her hair. Tearsvfalling on her cheeks. He sat there for hours, till morning came. "I`m gonna find a way to bring you back.", he said. Still crying and stroking her hair. "I`m gonna bring you back. I promise."