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This story is interesting to say the least. It is my duty to comment on all topics in N-S and I shall be here next time you decide to update.

Thanks,every chapter be writed.

Chapter 13: Soarin visiting Gary Sparkle and and Maria


One of wonderbolt has just visit a pegasus in canterlot."wow,this place well guarded and I wonder where black pegasus in here.I knew him got medal wonderbolt"Soarin said as he still searching anywhere."ugh,I total lost way".Princess Cadence walking and she bump Soarin."oof,watch it"she said.

Intresting...

Chapter 14: medal wonderbolt


"I would give you a medal wonderbolt,Gary Sparkle"Soarin said."Thanks"Gary Sparkle said.

Ooh! Gary is apart of the Wonderbolts now?

My character Gary Sparkle that use magic with his horn after he turn into Alicorn.

Ah, okay. It makes more sense now.

Chapter 15: Unreplaceable Soarin


Maria treat Soarin's wings."you been alright and cause you crash landing"She said to Soarin.Spitfire walking to Gary Sparkle."here your sport uniform wonderbolt"Spitfire said."I hope Twilight's brother able fly"Soarin said."ouch,careful my wing".while Princess Twilight Sparkle see wonderbolt in race."hey,look wonderbolt prepare race"she said."and....wait what?! my brother still there".she open her mouth wide.

Ooh!!

Getting exciting!!

Chapter 16: Wonderbolt team prepare race about start


Princess Twilight Sparkle waving at Maria."over here and sit with me,Maria"she said."Hello Twilight"Maria said.A pony hold starting flag."On your mark! get set! GO! and they Fly"

I wonder who is gonna win??

wonderbolt team going win.

Who in the wonderbolts I wonder!

Spitfire in wonderbolt

D: I wanted to read that in your story!

Chapter 17: Sweetie bell tickles by feather


"haha stop it.that tickle"Sweetie bell laughs.while Rainbow Dash tickle Sweetie bell's belly.

Chapter 18: Gary Sparkle's Dark Magic Reappear


Duriing Race,Suddenly Gary Sparkle's dark Magic appear and his eye turn white.

Ooh, can't wait for more

see page 1 already add two character.

Nice!

thanks,I would add character.

Ooh, I wonder who it is!

and also,there voice actor in siege of canterlot's two main Character Mlp. nobody knows character are.Chapter 19 write later.

Coolio

I already test record my voices and I finally did record voice actor on speaker

Coolio, can't wait to hear the voices!

that would be awsome.who making openning and ending music?

Chapter 19: New Dark Magic given by Princess Celestia


Race nearly finish line."our team won"Soarin said.While Princess celestia want give dark magic to Gary Sparkle and Maria.

What is the dark magic?

you want to know a Dark magic been created.

Oh, okay! Makes more sense now!

Quote: Eevee88

Ooh! Gary is apart of the Wonderbolts now?

he also in Royal guards too after he wear sliver helmet and armor.

Ah, okay

Chapter 20: Zecora comes back with Potions of the Past


"I finish making a Potions"Zecora and she give to Gary Sparkle."come on,Drink it"Gary Sparkle know a Past."where am I?he said."hello anypony there".suddeny,Princess Luna come out royal chair."there one Alicorn would be Me!"she shout and transform into wicked mare Nightmare Moon when she attack him.Gary Sparkle Jumps back to floor.he look down and he knews Celestia Appear infront him."well,you make me no choice"Princess Celestia beam at Nightmare Moon..


that really scary.D:

D: I Won't be able to dream tonight.

I sppose Gary Sparkle and Maria would wear something in Halloween event. by the way,you already guess from pokemon of the month act 2. I could guess one fire pokemon's name.

Go for it!

And those costumes on them would look cute~

my character Gary Sparkle wear Rocket Raccon(Galaxy of Guardins) costumes.his eyes still look like Nightmare moon.your Character Maria wearing what.

Anything is fine

new Chapter 21 coming soon.

Can't wait

Chapter 21: Elements of Harmony Tree appear


Princess Celestia and Luna were trap in root."we have do release our Elements of Harmony"Applejack said."yeah,we can't bite a Darker roots.I sugguest we use Power magic to our mane and tails too"Rainbow Dash said."alright,just in minute"Gary Sparkle.he flew down to Spear shape to open.suddeny,darker root grab him strange."ugh!"."come on,Gary Sparkle"Applejack said.when darker root cover him up and white light force root disappear.

Woah o.o

Chapter 22: Halloween Event started


Spike still waiting."come on,I don't have much time" He said.Gary Sparkle come down to Stairs."how I look like?"he said."wow"Spike said."you ook like Raccon"he laugh."......"Gary Sparkle said

Hehe, good one.

thanks,new Chapter 23 to be write soon.

Okie.

Chapter 23: Gary Sparkle's helmet has been stolen


At Night,Gary Sparkle and Maria sleep on bed with Twilght Sparkle.When a Pony try steal Helmet's Gary Sparkle.suddenly.Spike wokeup."Guards!"he scream.Gary Sparkle wakeup and run after pony."Halt! Halt!"Gary Sparkle yelling while he gallop."Maria,wakeup"Princess Twilght Sparkle."there thief stolen my brother's helmet"."what?!"Maria shocked."Haha,you never see this helmet"sunset shimmer and she disappear to portal.Next Morning,Princess Celestia waiting in Portal room."you have to go to Royal Guards as human"she said.


that going happen. -.-

Bit isn't Sunset Shimmer good...?