darkSpyro

Im going to right bights and peices of the story Im righting
give me some comints and pointers If you want


( The rain trickeld down his face as he stood on the edg of the cliff, he looked at the tempal below)

soon spyro, I will teach you the power that you hold within you.


( the man stood straight as the lightning light the sky, his tails flowed in the wind, his ears twitched as the thunder rolled)

soon.

this is the begining
what do you think?

oooh sweet! sounds mysterious

really great.

Part 2

the time is upon us

( the man stood over spyro, an old sword hung on his back)

rest well young dragon, for the end of the world is in are hands.

( he nelt down a placed his hand on spyros head)

........your mother and father would be so prowed of you, you have stayed on the path of good but I fear the evil inside you will take over
as it did with the first of your eliment

wilding the power of darkness and straying in the path of good ...........will you destroy yourself?

( the man drew his blade, he put the tip on spyros forhead )

I will give you the stringth to stay on the path of good
but if you stray from that path..............Ill kill you myself

Part 3


Is that the best you can do Dragon?!

( spyro layed on the ground, blood driped from the gash on hie sid )

I.....wont let..you..win!

what can you do?
your just to week to fight someone of my stringth, just give up

NO!

( spyro stood, he quiverd when the gash pulled )

I dont care how strong you think you are Ill never loose

( every thing got silent )

you still dont get it do you?

( a suden gust of wind ingulfed them )

you want to see my true power?
...........THAN HERE IT IS!!!!!!!!

( the mans body flashed, a blue film ingulfd him, he screamed the film explowded, spyro was pushed to the ground)

{what...is....this......I....I cant...move.....its like Im being held down....what is this creature!!!}
now you know dont you, you know you could never win agenst me

( spyro looked up the man was right above him, tears filled his eyes)

{ is this where it ends?, am I really gona die here?}

(the man touched spyro on the snout)

You will servive this..... your children are to inportant to let you die

( the man knocked spyro out)

David lets go

( the man turned to see a large snake)

alright...... soon spyro the power of light will be yours.

wow! sweet

Totallyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy aswome!!!!!!

Part 4

FIGHT IT SPYRO

( David had Spyro pined to the ground, the purpal Dragon had a black strip acros his face)
SPYRO LISTEN TO ME, DONT GIVE IN TO THE EVIL INSIDE YOU
FIGHT IT
IIIIIIRRRRRRRRRRR ITS.....TO.......STRONG


( Cynder watched helplessly as her frinds scales slowly turned black)

SPYRO NOOOOOO

( it was to late, Spyros body explowded, David was flung back into the wall, he hit the wall so hard that it shaterd like glass, the fox jumped up and took his stance, the smoke slowly cleared)

spy........spyro........ar..are you ok?

..........sory Cynder spyro isant here any more!!!!

(The smoke cleard, a purpal dragon with black strips stood grining evilily)

SPYRO IS NO LONGER IN THIS WORLD!!!!!!!

( David stood silent, he looked at the obomination)

Cynder.....get out of here.

WHAT!!!
you must be crazy if you think that Ill-

( David glared at her, his eyes where now slits like a lizards ( this is what it looks like () ) She froze where she stood)

GET OUT OF HERE NOW

( His voice was deep ang rugid, Cynder slowly steped back)

You.......get out of his body.....or I will send you to ####

you think you scare me HAHAHA

THAN DIEEEEEE

( David vanished, he reaperd right in front of spyro, he gave him an upper cut sending spyro flying straight up into the air, he dissaperd agen
and reaperd right above spyro, thay where 300 feet in the air, David wraped his arms around the dragon and fliped them upside down,
thay hurtaled to earth spining, thay crashed into the growend

the darkness drained from the dragons body)

is he ok?!!!!!!

hes fine, help me cary him back to the tempal.


let me know what you think
send me a pm

Neat!

Exellent

^ Yup.

Interesting, but your form of writting a story is terrible.

I don't get it, is this the prologue or something?

Quote: Shrazer320

Interesting, but your form of writting a story is terrible.

Don't be too mean S320...he tried.

Im not done yet, and its a camershal type of thing

Part 4

Is he going to be ok?

yes

What was that, that move you used, I have never seen somthing like that befor

its called bo-rie-sche, its a type of ninjutsue that the grate elders of yeaue tought me

grate elders of yeaue?
who are thay?

thay are the keepers of the elements
fire, ice, thunder, earth, wind, darkness, and light

I havent herd of them befor

good

( Spyro stired )

hes waking up

( Spyro opend his eyes, he started to sit up but David stoped him )

no, not yet
your body needs time to heal

wha......what happend?

the darkness inside you is growing my young friend, if it is not stoped..... your sole will be destroid and you will turn into a monster, as has all who wild the dark art.

( Cynder gasped, Spyro sead nothing, he layed there with a frightend expreshan)

do not fear young dragon, If it comes to that youll be dead befor you turn, that I can promis, and Ill do it myself so youll go quickly

WHAT!!!!
(Cynder yelled horafide)
you would kill him

if it keeps this world safe than yes, I will not let a Dark master impersonater return, So if it comes to that than I will
....im sorry spyro.

Part 5

spyro.......Im sorry.

for what
( David punched spyro in the snout sending him flying back, spyro layed unconshens)

Cynder...

.....yes David

get him out of here

( Cynder grabed the back of Spyro's cape, she looked at David with fear)

Your not going to fight him alone are you?

...........yes, now go leve this place and dont look back no matter what

( a single tear ran down her cheek)

he will kill you

.......I know........ but if protects you, spyro and the rest of this world.......I will do it.

( Cynder licked David's cheek)

dont die, pleas

.........go

great story,dragon rider 99.